Who We Are
Colin Holtz
Steve Daigneault
Version 1: Institutional approach outlining accomplishments and need.
Version 2: Story of one young person diagnosed with a debilitating disease.
Version 1 raised…
…more than version 2
4x
For a national civil rights organization, the story version lost by 25%
For an international aid organization, there was no statistical difference
In countless other cases, story-based appeals have under-performed industry and client benchmarks
Science tells us
stories are powerful…
… so what’s going on?
Two Types of Stories:
1) Stories that explain
2) Stories that compel
Stories that Explain
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1) Grab the reader’s attentionNesting season for sea turtles is always fraught with danger from threats like entanglement in fishing gear and habitat degradation. But this year, sea turtles must also face the fallout from the worst oil spill in history.
Getting caught in fishing gear is bad enough. But this year, sea turtles faced a much more horrifying threat: Dirty, sticky oil from the worst spill in history.
2) Replace statisticsIn the wake of devastating floods in Pakistan, hundreds of thousands of children are without food, unable to access emergency supplies without help from an adult.
When you’re a starving child, it’s nearly impossible to fight through a crowd of adults. Right now in Pakistan, that’s the only ways to get food – so thousands of children are going hungry.
3) Put a human face on workUNICEF provides water sanitation tablets to decrease the threat of waterborne illness and provide clean drinking water to thousands of children.
When children are thirsty, it doesn’t matter if a river is clouded and polluted, they’ll drink from it. UNICEF’s simple solutions like clean water tablets make it easy for children to access clean water anywhere, anytime.
4) Build your org’s credibilityWe are the nation’s longest-standing faith advocacy organization and have a Charity Navigator 4-Star Rating.
When Glenn Beck puts you “on notice,” you know you must be doing something right…
Explaining stories don’t,
by themselves, compel readers to act.
Why do people give?
To be happy
To feel important
To be part of a success story
Because everyone’s doing it
“You’ll not only fund our work – you’ll know you changed a life”
“Give today to become a member and get insider info and updates.”
“We saved the savannah elephant . We can save the Asian elephant too.”
“From Martha L., a grandmother in Tennessee to Jim T., a construction worker in Florida, Americans everywhere have already committed to our fight.”
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What if every week were an incredible week? A week when you felt meaning and purpose. A week
when you knew you were literally changing the world for the better.
That’s what it’s like for U.S. Fund for UNICEF’s monthly Pledge Donors. Every month, they support UNICEF’s programs with a modest
amount. And in return, they can be confident that with less than a dollar a day, they’re saving
innocent, vulnerable children from pain and suffering.
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Will you sit back and let climate deniers and oil companies destroy
this biologically rich, environmentally-fragile, crown jewel
of our refuge system?“
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In the dead of the night last Thursday, the Wisconsin Assembly passed Gov. Walker’s
disastrously anti-worker budget. The vote lasted mere seconds – and 28 pro-worker legislators never
even had a chance to cast a vote.
But it’s not over. That night, the halls of the State Capitol were still filled with protestors chanting “Hell no, we
won’t go!” We’re not going anywhere either – because this fight is bigger than just Wisconsin.
Governors in a handful of states are already planning their own Walker-like attacks on nurses, firefighters,
teachers, and other critical employees. This fight belongs to all of us now, and we don’t have a
second to lose.
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People give because doing so
offers them a chance to write their own story
– and join in a shared story.
Make donors the heroFrom: Mary BaileySubject: George needs your help
Friend –
My husband George has almost given up on life.
He needs to realize there’s hope for the future.
Can I count on you to donate $5 to help pay his debt?
If everyone chips in a little, his money problems will be gone – and he’ll know just how loved he is.
He’s on the bridge over the river this moment, so we don’t have any time to lose.
Donate now.
Recommendations
Use stories to explain
Make your supporter the hero of the lede
Make supporters as a whole the heroes of the overall email
If you remember one thing:
“Your organization is
not the hero. The donor is
the hero.”
8 Questions
to Ask Yourself
1.
What am I trying to achieve?
2.
Would I share this story whether or not
it’s in an email?
3.
Is your story about how awesome you
are, or how awesome your donor is?
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Is there unresolved tension in the story?
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Is there a credible role for your reader?
6.
What would happen if your supporters
disappeared at this moment?
7.
Is this a “can’t miss” part of the movie?
8.
Would this story makes sense if you
told it a year ago, or a year from now?
Q & A
Contact Us:
Colin Holtz
Steve Daigneault
Read more at: labs.mrss.com