English 10 Grammar & Writing #21 Mr. Rinka Personal Response Essay TOEFL Vocabulary List #16.

English 10 Grammar & Writing #21

Mr. Rinka

Personal Response EssayTOEFL Vocabulary List #16

Personal Response Essay

A personal response essay is your reaction to something you have read, viewed or experienced. This essay should identify and summarize that to which you are responding and then present your reaction to it. We will write a 5 paragraph response essay to a famous photograph.

The 5 Paragraph Essay

Although an essay can vary in length and structure, the 5 Paragraph Essay is a classic format.

The 5 Paragraph Essay

Introductory Paragraph1st Body Paragraph2nd Body Paragraph3rd Body ParagraphConcluding Paragraph

Introductory Paragraph

Starts with a Hook that grabs the reader’s attention.

Includes some General Background information.

Presents the Thesis Statement.

Body Paragraphs

Paragraphs 2, 3, and 4 are the Body of your essay.

Each Body Paragraph follow the form we have studied.

Topic Sentence Supporting Detail Concluding Sentence

Concluding Paragraph

Restates your Thesis Statement.

Summarize your 3 main points.

A final definitive statement that concludes your points.

The Writing Process

Step #1 = PrewriteStep #2 = Rough DraftStep #3 = Reread & ShareStep #4 = ReviseStep #5 = EditStep #6 = Final Draft

Step #1 = Prewrite

Brainstorm for ideas & then:

ListOutlineMapGraphic Organizer

Step #2 = Rough Draft

Keep your prewrite in mind.

Write your ideas down on paper in sentence and paragraph format.

Do not worry about spelling or grammar.

Better more than less.

Step #3 = Reread & Share

Read over your rough draft out loud and eliminate, add or rearrange ideas and details. (mark up your paper)

Have another person read to you your piece and make suggestions. (if you accept, make changes)

Step #3 = Reread & Share

Make sure you have:

a topic sentence.strong supporting details.a closing sentence.not strayed from main idea.

Step #4 = Revise

Take all the changes you have decided to make and rewrite your paper.

Concentrate on the presentation of your ideas, the organization of ideas, and your choice of words.

Step #5 = Edit

By yourself or with another person, carefully go over your revised paper.

Carefully check for:Sentence Variety.Grammar Mechanics.Correct spelling.Correct punctuation.Presentation of ideas.

Step #6 = Final Draft

Using your edited revised draft create your final paper.

Now Publish your paper.

Assignment

Write a 5 paragraph personal response essay to Harold Edgerton’s famous high speed picture of a bullet going through an apple. Follow the format as outlined early in this lesson and keep the following rubric in mind as you write.

Writing Rubric

Does the student:use the 5 paragraph essay format? (15 pts.)

use the proper paragraph format? (15 pts.)

follow a Thesis Statement? (20 pts.)

punctuate correctly? (10 pts.)

create a variety of sentences? (15 pts.)

use proper grammar mechanics? (10 pts.)

spell correctly? (15 pts.)

Stopping Time 1964http://www.worldsfamousphotos.com/index.php/2008/02/21/stopping-time-1964/

http://www.worldsfamousphotos.com/index.php/2008/02/21/stopping-time-1964/



After Harold Edgerton’s famous high speed picture of a bullet going through an apple was taken in 1964; it became a famous image, not least because it was such an unusual photo based on a great achievement in high speed photography. Edgerton, professor at MIT, is also inventor of the strobe flash and a pioneer of stop-




action photography. He collaborated with Jacques-Yves Cousteau to experiment photographing some of the deepest sea beds in the world.



What is a Moment?

Travelling at over 1000 feet per second, a bullet cannot be seen by the “naked eye”, and yet Harold Edgerton captured a bullet leaving an apple in his stunninglybrilliant 1964 photograph “Stopping Time.” Everyone knows a photograph captures a moment, but that reality has rarely been presented as concretely as

it appears in this photo. “Stopping Time” impresses me because of its technical achievement, its detailed brilliance and its thought-provoking image. I am not a “shutter bug,” but even I can appreciate the technical accomplishment this photograph represents. Taking photosof family events has taught me how hard it is to produce an acceptable picture. The effect of light, movement and film speed

All play a role in creating a clear photograph, and I have been a victim to all these factors. On this basis alone I can appreciate what “Stopping Time” accomplishes. I can only imagine the mechanical precision and the human discipline it took to produce this historic image. Timing the shot for the precise instant the bullet leaves the apple and then capturing that image so clearly is a

feat that would humble even the most experienced professional. Two details in this photo stand out for me. The entrance point of the bullet seems to be less explosive then the exit point. Is that because of the physics behind the bullet’s impact or the infinitely small time difference between these two events? The other detail that amazes me is the clarity and stillness of the apple as it sits

motionless while violent explosions occur on its two opposite sides. This detailed contrast is most appealing to my eyes. I am fascinated by the concept of time. I know time is merely a human invention that chronicles the progress of moments strung together. So, as humans we are always in the present moment, but that present moment keeps constantly changing. Now, here in this picture, an

instant has been captured that illustrates just how brief a moment is because the subject is traveling at such a great speed. Then I think further and realize that capturing a bullet is almost slow motion photography when compared to the speed of light that captures this event. I begin to question the existence of even a moment. Pictures capture moments, but seldom

do I get that sense until I view a photograph like “Stopping Time.” The technical achievement this photo represents is extraordinary while the precision of detail is stunning. However, the mentally stimulating image of a bullet stopped in time is mind boggling. In its entirety, the Harold Edgerton photograph entitled “Stopping Time” is magnificent as well as awesome.




Assignment

Write a 5 paragraph personal response essay to Harold Edgerton’s famous high speed picture of a bullet going through an apple. Follow the format as outlined early in this lesson and keep the following rubric in mind as you write.

Writing Rubric

Does the student:use the 5 paragraph essay format? (15 pts.)

use the proper paragraph format? (15 pts.)

follow a Thesis Statement? (20 pts.)

punctuate correctly? (10 pts.)

create a variety of sentences? (15 pts.)

use proper grammar mechanics? (10 pts.)

spell correctly? (15 pts.)

TOEFL Vocabulary List #16

The following is a list of vocabulary words that often appear on the TOEFL (Test of English as a Foreign Language) test.

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http://www.southampton.liunet.edu/academic/pau/course/webword.htmpassion (noun): a strong feeling or emotion

pass (suffer) + ion (noun. condition)

Barbara has a passion for cooking.




http://www.southampton.liunet.edu/academic/pau/course/webword.htmsympathy (noun): sharing another person's feelings

sym (at the same time) + path (feel) + y (noun. condition)

Jim expressed his deepest sympathy when hearing of Mrs. Martin's death.




http://www.southampton.liunet.edu/academic/pau/course/webword.htmpathology (noun): the study of diseases

patho (feel) + log (study) + y (noun. result of an activity)

Juan is studying pathology because he wants to learn about diseases.




http://www.southampton.liunet.edu/academic/pau/course/webword.htmimpede (verb): to hinder, to slow down

im (not) + pede (foot)

The shackles and chains impeded the prisoner's escape.




http://www.southampton.liunet.edu/academic/pau/course/webword.htmpedestal (noun): a support for a column or other structure, a base

pedest (foot) + al

John put the vase on a pedestal.




http://www.southampton.liunet.edu/academic/pau/course/webword.htmpedestrian (noun): a person walking

pedestr (foot) + ian (noun. one that is)

As soon as the cars stopped, the pedestrians crossed the street.




http://www.southampton.liunet.edu/academic/pau/course/webword.htmpodium (noun): a platform, a place at which to speak in front of an audience

pod (foot) + ium

The guest walked up to the podium and spoke into the microphone.




http://www.southampton.liunet.edu/academic/pau/course/webword.htmrepel (verb): to drive away or push back

re (back) + pel (push)

Does Margo's new jacket repel water?




http://www.southampton.liunet.edu/academic/pau/course/webword.htmpulse (noun): the regular action of blood through arteries

pulse (drive)

The nurse felt for the patient's pulse in his neck.




http://www.southampton.liunet.edu/academic/pau/course/webword.htmsuspend (noun): to hang from, to interrupt, to stop

sus (under) + pend (to hang)

The light was turned on by a string suspended from the light fixture.




http://www.southampton.liunet.edu/academic/pau/course/webword.htmponder (verb): to think about, to weigh in one's mind

pond (weigh) + er (verb. action)

Levi pondered the possibility of going to medical school.




http://www.southampton.liunet.edu/academic/pau/course/webword.htmphantom (noun): something seen but having no physical body, a ghost.

phan (make visible) + tom

The children told horror stories about phantoms and ghosts.



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English 10 Grammar & Writing #21

Mr. Rinka

Personal Response EssayTOEFL Vocabulary List #16

English 10 Grammar & Writing #21 Mr. Rinka Personal Response Essay TOEFL Vocabulary List #16.

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