Writing Introductions: Where to begin ?

Writing Introductions:Where to begin?

What is an Introductory Paragraph?

• An introductory paragraph is the starting point of your essay.

• This is where you provide the reader with all the points you will be addressing, and some background information.

• This is your chance to engage your reader in a single paragraph.

Parts of an Introductory Paragraph

• An introductory paragraph has three main parts that must be

included.

1. Hook/Opening Statement2. Commentary/Background

3. Thesis statement

Parts of an Introductory Paragraph

• The three parts of an introductory paragraph are also known as: ANT

1. A- Attention Getter (Hook/Opening Statement)

2. N- Necessary Information (Commentary/Background)

3. T- Thesis statement

A = Attention Getter(The Hook/Opening Statement)

• Your hook is your first chance to spark interest in your reader- first impressions matter!• This sentence should give your

reader an idea about what the essay is about in an engaging manner.

Hooks: What to Avoid

• Vague statements should always be avoided in hooks.

For example, if your essay was a compare/contrast piece about different types of bears, you would want to avoid a hook like:

Many things are alike, but many things are also different. Be specific!

Hooks: What to Avoid• “Captain Obvious Statements” should always be

avoided in hooks.

For example, if your essay was a compare/contrast piece about different types of bears, you would want to avoid a hook like:

In this essay, I will tell you about different bears.

Or

The following paragraphs are about the differences between many types of bears.

Show, don’t TELL!

Hooks: What to Avoid• Questions should always be avoided in hooks.

For example, if your essay was a compare/contrast piece about different types of bears, you would want to avoid a hook like:

Do you know a lot about different types of bears?

Or

Did you know that there are many differences between the many types of bears?

This is an essay, not an infomercial!

Hooks: What To Do

• Make your hook interesting and engaging. Though both hooks below are “correct”, which one would get a better score?

Before buying a car, people should do their research, rather than just blindly trust salesmen, commercials, or manufacturers.

OR

Buyers beware! A suit, shined shoes, a Rolex, Old Spice, and a dazzling smile don't make someone an expert and people should not let smooth-talking advertisers, manufacturers, and car salesmen sell them the wrong car.

Hooks: What To Do• Start with a direction quotation from your book and/or

research that relates directly to what you are reading.

For example, if you were writing an essay about why Jonas (in The Giver) made the right choice in running away, you might use this quote to start:

“The worst part of holding the memories is not the pain. It's the loneliness of it. Memories need to be shared.” (The Giver, pg. 106)

You can later draw back on this quote by explaining that running away was the right choice for Jonas’ mental state (too painful and lonely), as well as for the Community (the sharing of memories would change them)

Hooks: What To Do

• Use descriptive words. Though both hooks below are “correct”, which one would get a better score?

The day was cold, blistery, and dark, and I couldn’t shake a persistent and nagging feeling of dread.

Or

The weather caused me to feel anxious and think that something bad would happen.

N- Necessary Information(Commentary and

Background?)• This section of your introductory

paragraph is your chance to expand upon your hook.• This is where you, the writer, should

provide more detail about what you stated in your hook, as well as give the reader a “sneak peak” of what will be discussed in your essay.

N- Necessary Information(Commentary and

Background?)• Your necessary information

should not give specific details about what will be covered in your essay, it should just introduce your topics.

Leave a little mystery for your readers!

Necessary Information Example

• Think of your compare/contrast essay about Among the Hidden and The Giver. Here is what commentary/background should look like:

What To Do What NOT To do

The dystopian societies in both books contained many similarities and

differences in the ways in which the people, population, and food were

controlled. The main characters, Luke (Among the Hidden) and Jonas (The

Giver), also shared many similarities, as well as differences, in their personalities and in how they

retaliated against their respective governments.

(This writer noted each topic that would be covered in the essay,

without giving away the details)

In The Giver, food is controlled by being delivered three times a day, while in Among the Hidden food is either grown or purchased under

government control. Also, population is controlled in both societies by only permitted two children, and in The Giver, assigned children to parents, rather than allowing births within

homes. Jonas and Luke are also very similar and different.

(This writer wrote way too much information that should be in the

body)

T = Thesis Statement

• This is the last sentence in your introductory paragraph.

• This sentence should indicate the main point your essay will be making.

• Basically, this sentence tells what your essay is about.

• When a teacher grades your essay, he/she will be going back to this sentence and asking his/herself- Was this really the main point of the essay and did the student address it thoroughly?

Thesis Statement: What To Do• Use direct and specific language.• Your thesis statement is almost like a “road map” for your

essay, so you should be specific about what you plan to address.

• Avoid language like “good”, “bad”, “same”, or “different”.• Instead use words that specifically show what you are

trying to say.

For example:1. Danielle and Anna form a friendship in Because of Mr. Terupt since they are similar.

VS.

2. In Because of Mr. Terupt, Danielle’s and Anna’s shy, kind, and mature personalities cause them to become close friends.

Thesis Statement: What To Do• Answer a question.• Sometimes, the prompt you are being asked to write about is the

in form of a question. Use your thesis statement to answer that question if it shows what the essay will be about.

For example:

If the teachers has asked you to write the following essay: “Should cell phones be banned in schools?”

Your thesis statement might be:

For emergency and parental contact purposes, cell phones should be allowed in schools.

Or

Because of their distracting and unnecessary nature, cell phones should be banned in schools.

Thesis Statement: What To Do• Pass the “So what?” test• If your reader asks “so what?” at the end of your

thesis statement, chances are you haven’t shown why this essay is important.

For example:

Dogs are good pets for kids.

Vs.

Dogs are good pets for kids because they teach them responsibility, loyalty, understanding and patience.

Putting it All Together

• Your hook/opening statement should be about 1-2 sentences.• Your commentary/background

should be about 3-4 sentences.• Your thesis statement should be

about 1-2 sentences.• A typical introductory paragraph

is about 5-8 sentences.

Putting it All Together: ExamplesTopic: The high cost of living in Tokyo

Attention Getter: For many citizens of Tokyo, the staggering cost of living has become too much to handle, and many have had to take drastic measures to cope.Necessary Information: Tokyo is one of the most expensive cities in the world. The prices of things in Tokyo are much higher than in other parts of Japan. Many people living in Tokyo have a difficult time paying for their lifestyles. Thesis Statement: Tokyo is definitely one of the most expensive cities for many reasons.

Putting it All Together: ExamplesTopic: How Among the Hidden and The Giver are similar and different

Attention Getter: In two different, yet equally horrifying and controlling dystopias, two boys fight to seek the truth and gain freedom.Necessary Information: In Among the Hidden, by Margaret Peterson-Haddix, and The Giver, by Lois Lowry, the governments in both societies are both similar and different in the ways in which the people, population, and food were controlled. The main characters, Luke (Among the Hidden) and Jonas (The Giver), also shared many similarities, as well as differences, in their personalities and in how they retaliated against their respective governments. Thesis Statement: While Among the Hidden and The Giver are distinct books written by different authors, their similarities regarding the societies’ governments and main characters make them easily comparable.

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