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REAL COMIC Untitled (Angel Wing)-2
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Chapter 1
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Show Alicia at her house putting on shoes in her doorway, light beautiful
colors. In school uniform. Pinks, blues, browns, warm colors for this
drawing. (Research modern home designs).
Draft Idea 3 for Chapter One
Created: 4 July 2014, 16:49
Modified: 4 July 2014, 16:51
Status: Revised Draft
Progress: In Progress
Synopsis
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After seeing so many pages I mean I cut the original down by 10 pages. I
realized that I was still a whooping 10 pages close to 40 and I still have not
introduced the immediate problem and her powers. Seeing this I have
decided to cut out some more scenes to make it fit a bit more.
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Panel 1 Alicia stands before a gorilla looking Seralon
(Taint), it's breath mists the air. As his shadow
overcomes her. Her small frame standing in his
greatness.
Caption Fwoo (taint taking a deep breath)
ALICIA
I can't do this.....
(Inner Monologue)
Panel 2 As she stands there before him, her eyes small and
trembling. WE see his rom reflected in her eyes.
Caption Devu (Tremble of eyes, figure shown in eyes
towering her)
ALICIA
I thought I could change? I thought I was
different... But I don't feel different. I
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feel the same... I feel like the same weak
person from before.
(Inner monologue)
Panel 3 His arm twitches
Caption *za/hiku/koki/guki/gokin*
*crack/gurchh/twitch/* (Make into smaller
panel)
Panel 4 Lower angle, and the seralon takes off to charge
at her. We see his feet and arms thrusting dirt
and rocks into the air.
Caption *zazaza/urya/dododo* *rumble/brum/brrm*
ALICIA
Are we all doomed to never change.... to
always be the same people we hate
ourselves for being.
(Inner monologue)
Panel 5 The taint get's ready to strike her, it's arm
raised over it's head. Show action lines showing
the direction of its swing.
Caption *bun* *Swoosh, whoosh*
ALICIA
To lose everything, we wish to protect to
things we can't even fight against. Unable
to save ourselves....
(Inner Monologue)
KASERNAGE
Aliiiiciiaaa!!!!!
(Spikey Ballon, urgent message
or yell)
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Page 3 Eating breakfast
Panel 1 Alicia blows a spoonful of oatmeal.
Caption *fua/blow/huuu/fuuh* blowing on food.
Panel 2 We are introduced to Alicia for the first time,
show Alicia eat her spoon still lifted and with
her hair done and her body shape.
Caption *eating/chk/mogu* eating food.
ALICIA
My name is Alicia Ebele, I'm 16 years old
and as of now I'm a sophomore in high
school. I'm not exactly the pick of the
litter, the rose of the garden or the
sharpest needle in the haystack. In fact
most would consider me a bit of a
introvert, a shy person.
Panel 3 Show a part of the kitchen layout, basic brown,
white, light beige/sandy color walls and silver
stove and fridge. Show mother leaning, a laptop
before her, a cup of coffee in her hands.
Cigarette bud sitting in a cigarette tray not to
far. Her mother is wearing normal clothes though
she is wearing a animation convention shirt.
Caption no sound effects, just show steam of
cigarette, cups and bowls.
MARY
You better hurry Alicia. Or you're going
to be late catching the bus to school.
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ALICIA
Hai!!!
Panel 4 Introduce Mary, her mother for the very first time
and begin to go into her relationship. Show a pic
of her mother dressing in cosplay.
Caption *zuzu, siiip* sipping coffee.
ALICIA
This is my mother, Mary as her co-workers
would call her and mama for me. She is a
bit of a ditz at times. Though a hard-
working one at that. She unlike me is a
confident person. Enough to considering
cosplaying to which she tries often.
(Inner Monologue)
Panel 5 Talk about the normalcy of the day. Show her
rising to her feet.
Caption *kachan/Clatter* chair moving as Alicia gets
up.
ALICIA
Though you would think the various amounts
of costumes and clothes would make every
day new for me and creepy for when I come
home. I have gotten quite used to it. I
mean as long as she doesn't dress me.
Panel 6 Alicia goes up and kisses her mother one the
cheek. Her mother blushes faintly and smiles.
Caption *uki uki* Brighters colors and warm, showing
family love. Make picture bigger
ALICIA
Bye, bye Mama!
(Dialogue)
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Page 4 Leaving Home
Panel 1 Alicia puts on shoes, and she begins to hint at
strange happenings.
Caption *supo/swip/slip* slipping on shoes.
ALICIA
And like most days, I precariously accept
these situations and little personas. Just
as much as I accept my own personal flaws.
(Inner Monologue)
Panel 2 Alicia slips on book bag.
Caption *Slip/supo* Slipping on straps.
Panel 3 Open door to the outside world, skip entry way and
such and have her walking down the block.
Caption *jiri jiri/shinning* Instead show the
brightness of the sun.
ALICIA
And though sometimes I wish to break
normalcy, to create a new me. A better me.
A braver me. Sometimes its hard to know
that life is filled with predictable
endings and openings. With generic and
genetic personalities and traits.
Especially since everything around me
seems to be....(inner monologue)
Panel 4 Alicia walks out and we see the alien ship above
faintly in the sky but vast enough for us to know
that's not supposed to be there.
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Caption *Devu,zumomomo/zumo* Show shadow of the
spaceship in the sky and the sun refracting
around the edges.
ALICIA
Changing so fast. And I'm... Not.
(Inner Monologue)
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Page 5 School
Panel 1 Peek of classroom during pre-period and some of
her classmates.
Caption *Gya-gya/chatter chatter* Show students
chattering and running to each other's desk.
CLASSMATE #1
Hey did you hear about?
(Faint talking)
CLASSMATE #2
Why do you think they're here? Do you
think that maybe they want to do us harm?
CLASSMATE #3
I hear they have a 10 legs and arms! And
their eyes are huge!
CLASSMATE #4
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Ewwww stop!
ALICIA
Now you're probably wondering what are
these people talking about? Aliens and
such, right? Well, remember that strange
object you saw hovering in our skies. That
is what we call a spaceship. Since the
ship appeared above us three weeks ago,
normalcy for the world broke. At first it
was debate, end of the world prophecies
and scary stories of alien appearances.
People disappearing, weird happenings and
sudden appearances of strange beast in
other cities and towns across the country,
the world in fact!
(Inner Monologue)
Panel 2 Show Alicia's loneliness.
Caption *Dyon/depressed* Color a black shower(aura)
around Alicia and brightness around her
classmates who are all grouped up.
ALICIA
And even though the year just started off
and news of the spaceship hovering over
the earth.... Has gotten everyone excited.
I still have yet to make any friends!
(Inner Monologue)
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Page 6 Lonely
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Panel 1 Alicia grips her head and she sinks into
depression. (Funny moment)
Caption *Doon/depressed/gloom* Show funny chibi
moment of Alicia turning into liquid. Show
brief moments of loneliness, moments where
she should be with friends but is not.
ALICIA
Normally at school I would be lonely
meaning I would have no friends for the
entire year. An entire year of no partner
for field trips, science projects or lunch
time meals.
Panel 2 Small panel of her seeing the ship and her face
sinking or utter hopelessness.
Caption Show her sitting before the tv and the her
melting.
ALICIA
When the apparent doom machine appeared
above, I thought I would die lonely, with
no hope of ever having a girl conversation
with a dramatic and lonely friend who made
up of lies about past boyfriends.
Panel 3 Show her coming into class room and seeing her
classmates busily talking and active. And her eyes
glittering with hope.
Caption *Pa/light/shine* Eyes's shinning.
ALICIA
Till I came to school on the first day and
found loads of people talking to each
other. Pretty girls, jocks, nerds, geeks,
nobodies, rebels, idiots, fattys,
foreigners, loners. Everyone! This was my
chance! My chance to show through, to
become more than what I have been making
myself for these last couple of years.
Panel 4 Regular Panel. But show Alicia turned to stone and
her classmates happily talking along.
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Caption *Shun/rock bottom,fwoomp* Alicia's skin
turning to rock.
ALICIA
But that didn't happen. It was as if I
missed the last chord of the apocalypse!
And everyone died and went to heaven and I
was left to walk the earth alone. (like
the man in Twilight, "Time Enough At
Last".)
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Page 7 Alien ships and Alicia
Panel 1 A small panel showing the chalkboard and a picture
of a space ship hovering a planet. Alicia reflects
on how the world seemed to have drastically
reverted to normal after the alienship. Even how
the kids in her class once grouping up changed
back to their normal.
Caption Nothing here but brighten drawing on the
chalkboard.
ALICIA
But even with all the alien talk around
school. It's normal. It's as if it faded
into the pool of celebrity gossip, fashion
trends and whispers of war amongst the
enemies. It became the everyday talk of
normalcy. People slowly began to accept
the spaceship for what it was... A hunk of
junk in the sky.
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Panel 2 Who now sits gazing out the window, her chin
leaning against her hand. We get a better view of
her.
Caption *eee* or just show light and wind blowing in.
ALICIA
But what does this mean for me? Should I
accept it as normalcy and go about life as
I always have. Or should I....
Panel 3 Outside the window, we see Alicia gazing out the
window but this time we see Alicia's mascot
(Carina) looking down at Alicia from the opposite
building. Show Carina as a bit menacing.
Caption Nothing here really.
ALICIA
See it as an opportunity.
Panel 4 Full view of Carina (Mascot) who is staring down
at her herione. But Carina looks a bit scary look
at Madoka Puella Magical mascot and somehow copy
eyes.
Caption *gugu/stare* Carina (mascot) staring at
Alicia.
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Page 8 Mascot
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Panel 1 Full view of Carina (Mascot who is staring down at
the heroine. But Carina looks a bit scary looking,
like the mascot from Madoka Puella Magica (Copy
eyes)
Caption *gugu/stare* Carina (mascot) staring at
Alicia.
ALICIA
To become something more than just me.
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Page 9 Lunch Time
Panel 1 Alicia is eating lunch which consists of a wrap,
fruit and two juices, and a usual side of cookies.
Drinks from a juice cup. Upward angle show her
looking up to the sun above.
Caption *kupu/slip/suck/siiip* Alicia drinking juice
from container. *Bzz* dragonflies fluttering
about.
ALICIA
Well at least I can still eat, it would've
been troublesome if I couldn't hold down
my food. Though in all honesty...
Panel 2 Alicia smiles as she gazes at her cookies as she
gazes upon its brown roundness.
Caption *Shi/shimmer* Eyes gazing upon cookies.
ALICIA
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Well at least I can eat in peace... I mean
its not like having someone is required in
order for me to eat. But then again it
would be nice to share some time with
someone.
Panel 3 Alicia looks down at her stomach (downward angle)
and sadly looks upon the ripples that appear
there. Show in panel also some other people who
are chubbier than Alicia (putting not true
underneath)
Caption *bosho/sad* as she gazes upon herself.
ALICIA
But nobody wants to spend time with a
chubby like me. I'm practically the worse
kind of useless.
Panel 3 Chibi mood: Alicia places cookies against cheek as
she shakes her head as if she was hugging them.
Alicia giggles as she blushes.
Caption *Gyuu/hug* Hugging sounds. *Baku/waku*
excitement. *Hehehe/gera gera* giggling.
ALICIA
Oh well at least I have my sweets, my
preciouses. I don't care if your filled
with chubby goodness, I would rather eat
you now and forget my worries than to put
down a cookie!!
Panel 4 Show Alicia with Super rape face!!! And her hands
clutching the cookies trembling with excitement.
Caption *waku waku/trembled* evil aura around Alicia
and make eyes scary and funny looking. *poto*
in the corner of picture.
ALICIA
Soon you will be eaten and swallowed to
become one with my body! Muwahahaha!
(Hahaha!) To become a source of happiness
for the depressing and normal life I
live!!!!
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Panel 5 Alicia looks up and we see one of her juice
containers rolling away into bushes.
Caption *poto**drops and rolls* the sound of the
container rolling away.
ALICIA
You got to be kidding me.
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Page 10 Meeting the mascot for the First time
Panel 1 Small panel of Alicia rising up to get it. And we
see a shadow of a small beast (mascot).
Caption *Kasa, rustle* bushes rustling from mascot
twitching.
Panel 2 A hand reaches down before the mascot and light
enters in as the mascot is seen for the first
time. A cute little griffin with dragon fly wings.
Caption *zawa/rustle/shine* from the light hitting
the griffin's shiny artificial coat.
Panel 3 Show large shot of Jannie before the mascot.
Caption *gaze/ahh* Jannie seeing the pet for the
first time.
ALICIA
A.... owl.....
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Panel 1 We skip to her at work and mopping the floors. She
is wearing a fast food costume. For the first time
we see her outside of the school setting.
Caption *Squish* mop being used.
ALICIA
What was that?
Panel 2 Small panel of the mascot jumping to attack her
and her getting scared. But on the other side of
the panel what really happened. Alicia running
away from the mascot when it steps out. While
Alicia is reminded of that horror before, her face
becomes drastically fearful.
Caption *OOOOO/roar/howl* of mascot. *Da/dash/run*
Alicia running away. *Kyaaaa/scream/ahhhh*
Alicia screaming.
ALICIA
Some weird mixture of a owl, cat and bug.
It looked like some mutated kitten. Maybe
it escaped from test facility, if so I
should really listen to those emails that
talk about those medical and make-up
facilities where they test on animal
subjects.
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Panel 3 Alicia boss calls for her to come over. Show
Alicia in distance and her bosses hand waving her
over. Alicia jumping from coming out of her state
of shock
Caption *come over* hand waving her over. *Pachi!*
from her snapping out of it.
MANAGER
Hey Alicia come here for a second!
Panel 4 We see Alicia's hands and sheets of paper being
placed into her hands.
Caption *pera/thump/thud/dosa* paper being placed
into hands.
MANAGER
I need you to hand out these pamphlets
today. For our new item on the board and
the sales we're having for this weekend.
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Page 12 Alicia hands out pamphlets
Panel 1 As Alicia clutches the papers she gazes upon the
papers with utter dread. Upward angle of Alicia
clutching papers and shadows of demons in the
background as she cowers in fear of the fragile
demons.
Caption *puru puru/shake shake/quiver*
ALICIA
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Pamphlets.... But I hate handing out
Pamphlets. These demonic word filled paper
mache that have caused wars, established
meaning for children existence and covered
the internet with mountains of junk.
Panel 2 Alicia stands out in the open as she stands
practically in the middle of traffic(people
walking on sidewalk) as she trembles in the crowd
of people walking past. Alicia screaming silently
out loud.
Caption *doon/doom* Showing utter depression or
making known of utter depression or doom.
ALICIA
Worst of all I hate handing them out to
people!
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Page 13 Handing out Pamphlets
Panel 1 Alicia tries to hand them out to people do side
view make shadows of people in front of her to
show she's in a crowd but make her clear. And show
Alicia trembling to hand them out to people.
Caption *suta suta/walk straight pass/tap tap tap*
crowd walking past.
ALICIA
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Would you......? We're
having......next...?
.....take....pamphlet......
(Soft Spoken Voice)
I hate feeling uncertain. I hate this
feeling of being lost, or being possibly
being pointed out.
(Inner monologue)
Panel 2 Smaller Panel of Alicia going up to a woman in one
corner, then a group of boy students in another
corner and trying to give them a pamphlet.
Caption *puru puru/no* for the woman. *Buru
buru/refuse/shake/no* for the boys.
ALICIA
Of my thoughts clouding my reality. Of
seeing the hatred in everyone of knowing
that people are bound to society where
people like me is the bottom denominator.
And how its never going to change.
(Inner monologue)
Panel 3 Alicia gets pushed away and her papers fly out of
her hand. As a man rushes and past and calls her
annoying.
Caption *ba/push/slam/bam/thud* Man shoulder hitting
Alicia. *Gocha
gocha/confusion/flutter/mess/rustle* paper
sounds.
STRANGER #1
Get out of my way if you have nothing to
say!
(Angry Voice)
ALICIA
Ahhh!!
Panel 4 Show Alicia's Papers scattered over the ground,
some people standing others walking on it. Dark
scene show only pants legs, shoes, legs and
papers.
Caption *zaka zaka/tap/tmp* footsteps walking around
and on the papers. *Pasa/rustle* paper on
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ground. *Gusha/crush* Paper being crushed
under foot.
ALICIA
How it's okay to walk over people like me.
(Inner Monologue)
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Page 14 The Breaking Point of Alicia
Panel 1 Alicia bends down and reaches for the papers and
begins to gather them up. But as she does she
looks up at the crowd now around her. (Downward
horizontal angle seeing her from the crowd view)
People begin to look tall and big, slightly
menacing.
Caption *gogogo/menaching atmosphere. Only draw
picture of shoes everything else is dark of
course for the ray of light around Alicia and
the papers. But for papers deep in crowd do
not paint shoes white, instead paint as black
and the shoes on them as black. Only shoes
around Alicia (mostly the tips of shoes) are
lighted.
ALICIA
Stop looking at me like that... Stop
looking at me!
(Inner Monologue 1)
Someone help! Please help!
(Inner Monologue 2)
I can't take it anymore...
(Inner monologue 3)
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Panel 2 Small Panel show young teenage girl from another
school. And a cellphone in her hand.
ALICIA
Stop it!
Panel 3 Another Small this time of a business man looking
slightly angry or disgusted.
ALICIA
I know you don't like me...
Panel 4 A third small panel spanning the middle of the
page in a row along with panels 2 and 3. This time
of a boy and another one who seem to be smiling or
cackling at the situation.
ALICIA
So stop laughing at me, stop walking away!
Stop! Stop!
Panel 5 A hand reaches down to help her and Alicia pushes
the hand away as she runs inside. Show Alicia's
hands backs and the door opening, as she runs
inside. With the crowd looking on as she runs and
the young man who was offering to help watching
her run away with his hand still out to help her.
Caption *zazaza/run run run* Alicia running inside.
*Kara/open* door opening up.
ALICIA
STOP!!!
Panel 6 Alicia runs past counter, where her Managers calls
out to her.
Caption *Zaza/tmp/tap* Alicia's tapping shoes as she
runs.
MANAGER
What's a matter?! Alicia?!
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Page 15 Alicia Desires to Change
Panel 1 Small Panel show little girls sign on door and
soft hiccuping sounds within.
Caption *Hiiku/hiku/hic/hiccup* sounds of Alicia
crying.
Panel 2 Upward angle of Alicia crying, tears and snot
smearing her face. As she cries and hiccups, she
tries to wipe the tears from her face but its too
much. She is sitting on stall.
Caption *Hiiku/hiku/hic/hikku/hiccup* sounds of
Alicia crying (hiccups).
ALICIA
I hate this..... I hate myself. I hate
being like this. I hate being looked at
like that, of being ignored, of being
laughed at, of being worthless. I hate
being me!
Panel 3 Having a slightly nude picture of Alicia drifting