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English 105, Meeting 4Adopted from Teri Tosspon Ms. Oliver, Heald College

Powerpoint TemplatesPage #Meeting 4Review: Commas/Capitalization, Thesis Intros/ConclusionsNew material: Run on SentencesBody ParagraphsCompare/Contrast

Powerpoint TemplatesPage #Futbol del Oliver or some variation thereof15 minutes to correct the capitalization and punctuation on the handoutOne team sends a player to the front to draw a #.That player is responsible for answering that question.The ball will move one line forward for each ITEM the player corrects from the handout, IN ORDERIf they player misses one, the other team has a chance to steal the ball and move it down the field the opposite direction. If they make an error, the original team can steal backBoth teams will try to move the ball down the fieldWhen a team scores, the ball starts all the way at the other end of the field.

Powerpoint TemplatesPage #Combining SentencesCoordinating 1.Use a comma & a coordinating conjunctionThe speaker rose to his feet, and the room became quiet.2. Use a semicolon, an adverbial conjunction, and a comma I worked hard; therefore, I expected results.3. Use a semicolonI worked hard; I expected results

Subordinating1. Subordinating ConjunctionsWhile he was eating breakfast, the news came on.

2. relative pronoun. (Who, whose, whoever, what, whatever, whichever, when, that)The researcher who was studying diabetes had a breakthrough.

Powerpoint TemplatesPage #Ask for student input as much as possible. 4ClausesA clause is a group of words with a subject and a verbSubjectVerbYoustink.Sallyis talking.SubjectVerbIlovegrammarSallyis talkingloudlyMost clauses have further information after the verbPowerpoint TemplatesPage #Two Types of ClausesIndependent clause (Main clause)Can stand alone as a sentenceCan be joined to another clauseFred filled a cardboard tube with gunpowder.Dependent clause (Subordinate clause)Cannot stand alone as a sentenceMust be joined to an independent clauseBecause he wanted to make his own firecrackers.

A word that joins clauses is a conjunctionPowerpoint TemplatesPage #

Joining ClausesA dependent clause can be joined to an independent clause to make a sentenceFred filled a cardboard tube with gunpowder because he wanted to make his own firecrackers. OrBecause he wanted to make his own firecrackers, Fred filled a cardboard tube with gunpowder.When the sentence starts with the dependent clause, it must have a comma before the independent clause

Powerpoint TemplatesPage #Run-onsRun-ons are independent clauses that have been combined incorrectly. There are several types:The AND run-onThe Fused run-onThe comma splice

We will be going into detail on each one

Powerpoint TemplatesPage #The and run on (pg 146)two or more relatively long independent clauses with a coordinating conjunction without any punctuation.

Goal 1 AND per sentence (some situations warrant 2)(Because this has no punctuation, we have to read it in one breath.) I met Charlyce in a yoga class at the YWCA and we liked each other immediately and we soon became friends and we often hang out at each others houses.

Powerpoint TemplatesPage #9The Fused run ontwo or more independent clauses run together without any punctuation. The girls made the fire the boys cooked the steaks.

Powerpoint TemplatesPage #The comma splice run-on The comma splice: two or more independent clauses run together with only a comma.

I met Charlyce in a yoga class at the YWCA, we soon became friends.

Sounds right? It is actually two separate independent ideas/clauses. We COULD add a ; (semicolon) to make it correct, or we could separate into two sentences.

Powerpoint TemplatesPage #Run-onsIn the story of Fred, identify what kind of run-on these are!Fred didnt throw the firecracker, he placed it between his legs, he wanted to put the lighter away first.Comma spliceFusedThe fuse burned too quickly before he could throw it the explosive blew up between his legs.

Powerpoint TemplatesPage #There are 3 ways to fix Run-OnsMake into 2 (or more) separate sentences.Make a compound sentence *using the methods of coordination*Make a complex sentence *using the methods of subordination*

Powerpoint TemplatesPage #Practice- Packet1. I'd like to buy a piano, but I really don't have the money right now. 2. She gives wonderful parties, I can't wait for her next one. 3. The people on the park bench who meet every day and eat lunch together. 4. I'm saving money for a trip to Oklahoma my brother lives out there. 5. He was beaming he got an A on the exam.

1. No Change! I'd like to buy a piano, but I really don't have the money right now. 2. Run On! She gives wonderful parties. I can't wait for her next one. 3. Fragment! The people on the park bench who meet every day and eat lunch together. 4. Run on! I'm saving money for a trip to Oklahoma; my brother lives out there. 5. Run on! He was beaming. He got an A on the exam.

Powerpoint TemplatesPage #14Body Paragraphs (p 47)Chpt 3, Turn to pg 50Think of your essay like a Hamburger. MmmWithoutall of the piecesits just not complete!

Introduction/HookParagraphs prove your thesis. Your thesis is the MEAT!!! ConclusionPowerpoint TemplatesPage #Each Paragraph has a part to playYour individual paragraphs are like pieces of pie.

Topic sentenceProve your point: Evidence, a story, a quote, data, research Why does this point matter to your topic???Powerpoint TemplatesPage #Topic Sentence (pg 50)Supports the thesis by clearly stating a main point in the discussionAnnounces what the paragraphs will be aboutControls the subject matter of the paragraphIts like an umbrella for the paragraphAll of the information in the paragraph should RELATE to the topic sentence The Topic sentence shouldprove or discuss a portion ofthe thesis!

Powerpoint TemplatesPage #Focusing & Placing (pg 53)Focusing be specific(read examples pg 53)

Placement usually the first sentence in the body paragraph, but does not HAVE to be (read examples pg 54-55)

Powerpoint TemplatesPage #Paragraph Development (59)Include enough supporting info/evidence to make readers understand the topic sentenceMake the information clear and specificAvoid vague generalities and repetitious ideas

Powerpoint TemplatesPage #Paragraph Length (pg 62)Long enough to accomplish its purpose and short enough to be interesting.Avoid one- or two-sentence paragraphsDivide long-ish paragraphs at a logical point.Use transitional phrases

Powerpoint TemplatesPage #Paragraph UnityStick to the subjectUnify sentences around a central or main idea- the topic sentenceUnify paragraphs around a thesis

Powerpoint TemplatesPage #Paragraph CoherenceUse a recognizable orderTimeSpaceDeductiveInductiveUse transitional phrasesUse examples, compare/contrast, sequence, resultsAvoid whiplash maintain coherence!

Powerpoint TemplatesPage #PracticePg 57, Letter CAdd topic sentence to the paragraphsNot all inventors had it easy in life. Items originally owned by Elvis have increased in value substantially.Most people do not consider writing a real occupation. Just as records are kept for collge football winners, records are kept for college football losers!

Powerpoint TemplatesPage #Paragraph TournamentEach person write A Paragraph about that would support the thesis:Job interviews can lose a job for you, if youre not ready.These WILL beread aloud to the class

Get peer feedback becauseYou could WIN a homeworkexemption!

Powerpoint TemplatesPage #In groups of 2 discuss whose paragraph is the best. Why? Why should it move on to the next round?Take the winner of the partners to a group of 4 people. Discuss whose paragraph should move on to round 3. Take the winner to a group of 8 Etc. We will do this until we arrive at the top 4, then the class will hear each one, vote for the top 2. Hear again and vote!The class winner will earn a 1 HW exemption Paragraph TournamentPowerpoint TemplatesPage #Plagiarism & Citing SourcesOlivers English 105Heald CollegeObvious Plagiarismbuying, stealing, or borrowing a paper (including, of course, copying an entire paper or article from the Web); hiring someone to write your paper for you; and copying large sections of text from a source without quotation marks or proper citation.

Cite ItWords or ideas presented in a magazine, book, newspaper, song, TV program, movie, Web page, computer program, letter, advertisement, or any other mediumInformation you gain through interviewing or conversing with another person, face to face, over the phone, or in writingWhen you copy the exact words or a unique phraseWhen you reprint any diagrams, illustrations, charts, pictures, or other visual materialsWhen you reuse or repost any electronically-available media, including images, audio, video, or other media

DONT Cite ItWriting your own lived experiences, your own observations and insights, your own thoughts, and your own conclusions about a subjectWhen you are writing up your own results obtained through lab or field experimentsWhen you use your own artwork, digital photographs, video, audio, etc.When you are using "common knowledge," things like folklore, common sense observations, myths, urban legends, and historical events (but not historical documents)When you are using generally-accepted facts, e.g., pollution is bad for the environment, including facts that are accepted within particular discourse communities, e.g., in the field of composition studies, "writing is a process" is a generally-accepted fact.Best Practices: Research Reading and Note-TakingInterviewing and ConversingWriting Paraphrases or SummariesWriting Direct QuotationsWriting About Another's IdeasMaintaining Drafts of Your Paper

Must Cite in 2 places: In-text citationsWorks Cited Page(also known as parenthetical documentation)In other words- in parentheses.Your in-text citations work with your bibliography (works cited) page to identify where any quotes or ideas borrowed from another author came from.

References in the text MUST clearly point to specific sources in the list of works cited.- MLA Handbook for Writers of Research Papers, 6th ed.

Halio, Jay L., "Elizabethan Age." Grolier Multimedia Encyclopedia. Scholastic Library Publishing, 2006. HF-L High School. 1 Apr 2006 .Life in Elizabethan England. Summer 2005. 31 Mar 2006 .Pressley, J. M. "An Encapsulated Biography." Shakespeare Resource Center, February 10, 2005. 3 Mar 2006 .Shakespeare, William. Romeo and Juliet. New York: Scholastic, Inc., 1969.Thomas, Heather. The Life in Times of Queen Elizabeth I. 23 Mar 2006. 1 Apr 2006 .

Works CitedPowerpoint TemplatesPage #In the body of the paper, it looks like this:

When Mercutio is wounded, he screams A plague on both your houses! referring to both the Capulets and the Montagues (Shakespeare 70).

In-text citations: Direct QuoteWorks CitedShakespeare, William. Romeo and Juliet. New York: Scholastic, Inc., 1969.

Powerpoint TemplatesPage #The parenthetical notation (Shakespeare 70) identifies where the quote came from and refers to your bibliography page for further publication information33Direct QuotesDirect quotation:Educators are cautioned that labels tend to stick, and few people go back later to document a shifting profile of intelligences (Gardner 139).

Paraphrase with in-text citation:Gardner explains that there are difficulties in labeling children with a type of intelligence, including the problem that labels may last, while the assessment may change (139).

Powerpoint TemplatesPage #How to ParaphraseParaphrase

Powerpoint TemplatesPage #Which of these should be cited?On September 11, 2001, the World Trade Center and the Pentagon were attacked by hijacked airplanes.

Atta, Binalshibh, al Shehhi, and Jarrah had lived in Germany and were chosen over more established Al Qaeda members due to their exposure to the West and ability to speak English.

Powerpoint TemplatesPage #B was correct: it is specific and not commonly knownHow would you cite it? In the text of your paper:Atta, Binalshibh, al Shehhi, and Jarrah had lived in Germany and were chosen over more established Al Qaeda members due to their exposure to the West and ability to speak English (National Commission 160).

In the Works Cited: National Commission on Terrorist Attacks Upon the United States. The 9/11 Commission Report. New York: W.W. Norton, 2004.

Powerpoint TemplatesPage #Which of THESE do you need to cite?A. The science labs at East St. Louis High School are 30 to 50 years outdated.

B. When public schools were segregated, conditions were not equal.

Powerpoint TemplatesPage #A! It is very specific, even w/ out quotes!How would you cite it? In-body:The science labs at East St. Louis High School are 30 to 50 years outdated (Kozol 27).

In the Works Cited:

Kozol, Jonathan. Savage Inequalities: Children in Americas Schools. New York: HarperCollins, 1991. Print. Powerpoint TemplatesPage #Good Sources/Bad SourcesDo NOT use wikipedia as a cited source. Sources that end in .edu or .gov are more reliable.

News agencies often end in .comBeware of .org, .com, and .net websites. Sometimes can be used to show peoples opinions. Should NOT be used for facts unless reputable source.

Powerpoint TemplatesPage #Exposition: Compare and ContrastPg 227Powerpoint TemplatesPage #Compare and Contrast these 2 clipsExposing the subject: give information about it

Powerpoint TemplatesPage #Compare/Contrast

Alice in WonderlandTrailersImagery/ArtColorsTone/StyleIntended AudienceActor(s) vs Cartoon1951 vs 2010

Powerpoint TemplatesPage #Block method: Alice in WonderlandTheme

1951 Version

ColorsHappy/brightGreens/yellowsCharactersChild Alice Silly, over-the-topWordsConstant text on screenDescriptive + Sentences2010 Version

ColorsDarkReds and blacksCharactersNearly adult AliceIntense, scaryWordsAlmost NO textText it actorsnames, etc.

Powerpoint TemplatesPage #Point by PointThesis: The 2010 version of Alice in Wonderland a was MUCH darker and more sinister movie than the 1951 version.Colors1951 Version: Happy/bright; Greens/yellows2010 Version: Dark; Reds/blacks

Characters1951: Child Alice; Silly, over-the-top2010: Nearly adult Alice; intense/scary!Tone1951: Wonder, surprise; Mischievous2010: evil/harmful magic; fearful, intense

Powerpoint TemplatesPage #Known Issues (pg 230-231)So what? Why should your reader care? FIND A PURPOSEDirect your thesis to a particular audienceDescribe your subjects clearly and distinctlyAvoid a choppy essay use transitions! (pg 231)

Powerpoint TemplatesPage #Choose your topicPre-Write checked in by end of class today (Venn diagram or Evidence Gathering sheet, etc)Research Scaffold what research should/can you do? Rough draft due next meeting Final draft will be due the following week

Topics choose from: 231-232online: http://homeworktips.about.com/od/essaywriting/a/compare.htmPropose a topic to me by the end of class today.

Powerpoint TemplatesPage #HomeworkCompare/Contrast 1st draft DUE @ beginning of NEXT MEETING (50 points)Read: Compare/Contrast Student Essays pgs 233-239Research ScaffoldVocab 3 from the articles you read