Personal Statement for Uni Students

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Chabot Engineering

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Bruce Mayer, PE Chabot College Personal Statement Page 1


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Example 1

What is your intended major? How interest in subject developed? Experience.

I intend to major in mechanical engineering. I choose this particular major as I am veryinterested machine design. This awareness began when I was small boy. In my childhooddays, the days that when I did not know anything about engineering, I had a strong attractionto any kind of machinery; air conditioners, car engines, water pumps, and on and on. I thoughthow does this work?, how was it designed?, WHO designed it?

This curiosity about how things work prompted me to take a physics class during myjunior year in high school. After a year of physics I had learned a great deal, but I was still notsatisfied. Coincidently, junior/senior year in high school is the time when people in my age startto decide their future. During my decision process, I immediately considered my interest inmachinery. Since mechanical devices fascinated me, I quickly concluded that I should studymechanical engineering at the college/university level.

However, I faced some challenges before I submitted my UC application during mysenior year in high school. Over that summer, I went back to my birthplace of Hong Kong tovisit friends. We talked about our decisions for university majors. One friend who intended tomajor in business told me about his interest. He said that if we studied business and became aCEO in a company, we could do very well financially. Financial reward affected my decision,and distracted me from choosing an engineering major. I knew engineering was the betterchoice, but I felt my future couldnt be decided based only on my aptitude and interests alone. Ihad to think about my adult life and future financial security. I thus decided to split my intendedmajors into mechanical engineering and business at different schools. I could decide later.

After I received the offers from two UC campuses, I hesitated. Both campuses acceptedme as a business major. I had no engineering option at that time. After receiving myacceptances, I needed to fly back to Hong Kong for personal reasons. While I travelling on theaircraft, I kept thinking about that question; to enroll or not to enroll? Just when the planetouched down, the spoilers quickly rose, and the mechanism inside the wing came into myview. That scene completely fascinated me. A great feeling of curiosity about the mechanismfilled my mind. My college-major question was answered at that moment. I changed my focuscompletely to engineering. I developed a new plan to enroll at Chabot community college, andthen apply as a mechanical engineering major as transfer student.

In my Chabot years, I took many major-required courses. Having a chance to deeplylearn physics (particularly mechanics), I can now answer some of the questions I had aboutmachinery. For example, I learned the function of the four strokes of the internal combustion

engine cycle that powers automobiles. I also learned different kinds of object-motion, and theconcept of the center of gravity. I even did a class project on the motion of airplanes. Myanalysis included the calculation of the center of gravity, the centripetal force when an airplanemakes a turn, and the torque generated when it yaws.

Besides preparing for transfer, I joined the Chabot engineering club. I attended the meetingsand I had opportunity to learn about technology in my own field. One time the club Presidentpresented on wind turbines. He located some videos from YouTube which showed how peopledesigned and built a low-cost wind turbine. Their design ingenuity amazed me. I never thought



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that an old water pipe could be fabricated into curved fan blades. These videos gave me someideas on how engineers engage the physical-design process. I also read library books aboutairplanes in order to learn how the control mechanisms function. I also like to search for onlineresources about aircraft. These materials provide me basic knowledge about mechanisms inthe real world, which intensifies my interest in machinery design.

Tell us about a personal quality, talent, accomplishment, contribution or experience.

While I attended middle school in Hong Kong, I joined a First Aid organization called St.John Ambulance, which is similar to the Red Cross in United States. During the time I spent asa St. John volunteer, I learned how to treat people well, and value others lives. These twoperspectives would play a major role in deciding on my intended major of mechanicalengineering.

As I wavered between choosing business or mechanical engineering, I asked myself thequestion: what do I want to achieve in my life?. Aside from my general interest in engineering,this question also weighed heavily when I made my final decision. Earning a good living is

attractive to almost everyone; including me. However, I didnt want to live just for money - Iwanted to contribute something more. I want to live a meaningful, productive life.

A meaningful life is interpreted differently by every individual in the world. My conceptof this phrase is to do something that relates directly and positively to peoples lives. Toaccomplish this, mechanical engineering was the best choice for me. The job of an engineer isto design useful products to improve peoples lives. The physical design of a product or deviceis something which can not be easily done by a business major.

In considering what it takes to be a science/engineering major, one recognizes a criticalelement that people should have deep in their heart. That element is called passion. My

passion for mechanical engineering is that I want to use my skills to betterment of humankind.My passion for mechanical engineering is so important as it tells me that I know what I amtrying to do, and also the significance of doing it. I am attempting to design or invent somethingthat would affect someones life for the better.

I am proud of having this type of motivation. I believe that people who learn science andengineering should use their knowledge to help people, and of course to avoid harming them. Iwould keep what I learned at St. John Ambulance in mind as I continue my study and join thepractice of engineering.

Example 2Prompt 1:

What is your intended major? Discuss how your interest in the subject developed anddescribe any experience you have had in the field such as volunteer work,internships and employment, participation in student organizations and activities andwhat you have gained from your involvement.



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I plan to major in Electrical Engineering. My interest in the electrical field began at a very earlyage from the simple seed of curiosity. As a young boy, I was always awed by my father for hisuncanny ability to take apart and repair almost anything. As I grew old enough to actuallyunderstand this process and method, my love and interest for how things work blossomedinto a passion. My mind would urge me to take apart everything; to decompose, understand,and rebuild every device within my grasp. As I moved into the later years of high school,physics and mathematics began to bring the fulfilling answers that I for which I searched. At

that point I knew I wanted to continue down this academic road in a technical field.

My interest in the electrical aspect of engineering did not develop until I started college andbegan actually building circuits; not only in class, but for fun in my free time. I was fascinated tosee how I could learn techniques in advanced mathematics and engineering courses, andthen come home and apply them in an increasingly hands-on and practical fashion. This hobbyof mine eventually .(to be continued (add experience) I realized engineering was more thana hobby or interest, but something I enjoyed both inside and outside the classroom. Thisexperience strengthened and affirmed what became a powerful desire to pursue ElectricalEngineering as a life-long career. I simply love the field, and UC Berkeley offers the best ininstruction and research, giving me a tremendous opportunity to learn and grow.

Prompt 2:Tell us about a personal quality, talent, accomplishment, contribution or experience thatis important to you. What about this quality or accomplishment makes you proud andhow does it relate to the person you are?

In my second semester physics class the instructor assigned a project to design and constructan operational rail gun with a group of classmates. My experience with the rail-gun design, Ifeel, exemplifies many of the personal qualities and talents which make me the person I amtoday.

The rail gun was no trivial task. It involved many characteristics of what I have learned mightbe expected in a professional working environment as a practicing engineer. Having a strongpassion for anything that involves electricity and engineering, I was more than ready andexcited to accept this challenge. Having the opportunity to use science in a physical andapplicable sense powerfully attracts me to this major. After forming working-groups, I soonfound myself in the role as leader, and head electrical systems engineer. My team wascomprised brilliant and creative student colleagues. The design/build proces soon became oneof the most challenging and rewarding experiences I have ever encountered.

Taking on the role as a leader in this group posed many challenges for me. Through hard and

consistent effort I overcame the challenges and ultimately grew stronger as an individual. Alarge part of what made this task so demanding included the realization of the importance ofcomprehensive and precise communication. I found that communication is not just a means bywhich people share information, but is in fact far more. Communication requires the ability tolisten, stop talking, and show respect and empathy for the person who speaking, whilemaintaining a professional demeanor in order to focus on the ideas and facts offered by teammates.. There were a few times during this experience where, after countless hours of rail-gundesign and/or build work, I felt that frustration impacting my decision making. When otherstudents in the group offered input, or differed in areas in which I felt more knowledgeable, I



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had struggled to stay open-minded and flexible. I would consciously take a step back and trulylisten to what my teammates had to say. This allowed me to objectively assess the real valuethat their ideas brought to this project. This process helped me grow as a leader, and more soas an individual. Technical Project leadership taught me the ability to communicate well withothers in all aspects of my life. When a leader treats others with respect and worth, then thereis no limit to what a team with a common goal can accomplish. I am proud of our groupsaccomplishment, and my contribution to the success of the project.

In the same way the rail-gun project posed obstacles to overcome, it also afforded me theopportunity to demonstrate two qualities that exemplify who I am: determination andperseverance. Many times during this project my group and I felt as though a specific task wasbeyond the scope of our understanding or expertise. During these times I found myself workingwell into the night researching and analyzing various solutions to the problem(s). I tried to dowhatever it took for my group to design and build a fully operational rail gun. In the course ofthis experience I have learned so much about the meaning of leadership, and the amazingsatisfaction it can bring. Through the effort and capabilities of my group members, along withmy leadership, perseverance, and determination, we accomplished MUCH more than I couldever imagine. This intense five week project proved tremendously rewarding. The effort

brought out many of my characteristics and qualities that make me proud of the person I amtoday. I hope to continue both my technical and leadership growth at UC Berkeley where thebest of both these aspects of an Engineers life are developed.

Example 3Prompt #1

What is your intended major? Discuss how your interest in the subject developed and describeany experience you have had in the field-such as volunteer work, internships and employment,

participation in student organizations and activities and what you have gained from yourinvolvement.

I intended to major in MECHANICAL ENGINEERING. From a very young age, I aspired tobecome an engineer because I wanted to design flight systems that would improve the speedand handling of aircraft. My goals for these designs include: improved engine efficiency,accident prevention, and (potentially) automatic aircraft repair. With these improvements airtravel could become even faster and safer than it is today. The great inventor Thomas Edisoninspired me to pursue my dream of mechanical design. Edisons 1093 patents helped to formthe basis of modern technology. His work still inspires inventors and engineers all over theworld. Edisons accomplishments in face of many difficulties motivate to stand behind my

ideas and make them come true. I hope that my designs become, as did Edisons, becomemajor milestones in the advance of technology.

By the eighth grade my uncle, an aeronautical engineer in Hong Kong, had taught me agreat deal about airplanes. He was a great teacher, and I was an eager student; I had anintense desire to learn how airplanes worked. My uncle liked to take me to his workplacewhere I watched him repair airplanes. Soon afterwards, I became a serious aircraft enthusiastand tried to memorize all the parts of the airplane such as wings, jet engine, cockpit, andhorizontal/vertical stabilizer even though I not fully understand the function of these



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components. I loved every second of watching my uncle make repairs to such magnificentmachinery. When my parents decided to immigrate to the United States, I knew this gave methe opportunity to pursue my dream as the United States is one of the most technologicallyadvanced countries in the world with many great Engineering Universities.

When started college, I knew that in order to continue to pursue my dream of aircraftdesign that would need to build my hardware skills and knowledge. I thus chose to work in an

auto repair shop. There I learned how to increase a car engines horsepower to make the carrun faster and more efficiently. I found that changing the software contained in a ROM chip inthe engine control unit would improve engine output. The more I understood about enginedesign, the more sure I became that Mechanical Engineering is my best career choice. Mywork at the auto shop strongly influenced my decision to study Mechanical Engineering, whereI intend to specialize in aircraft engine design. I now feel I am on the path to achieve my dreamof improving the speed, safety, and efficiency of airplanes. Recently I realized that a successfulEngineer needs skills beyond sound technical ability; including communication, management,and leadership.

Besides becoming more focused on my academic and future career goals, I learned the

importance communication through my work at the auto shop. When I first began working myinexperience sometimes lead to unproductive miscommunication. After working closely withmy fellow employees for a few months, I realized that I needed to better communicate withthem to improve our understanding of the many tasks we needed perform during engine repair.I began to ask the more experienced Mechanics for help and advice. Through this process oftheir teaching and my learning we developed a mutual respect which lead them to accept meinto their group. As time went on I learned even more, With improved communication wefinished complicated repair jobs more quickly than before. A few times, I was even placed incharge of some important work orders where I had the responsibility for managing a group ofpeople to finish the repair. Through this experience I think that I developed valuablemanagement and leadership abilities.

Working in an auto shop was an eye-opening experience during my time at Chabotcommunity college. While I learned a great deal in class, and through my participation in anengineering club at college, working at the auto shop was gave the chance to greatly expandmy hands-on, communication, project-management, and leadership talents. This experiencewith sophisticated mechanical devices (engines) became the greatest influence on my decisionto pursue a degree in Mechanical Engineering. My time at the auto shop helped me find mypassion for building and designing engines; giving me the focus for my academic and futureprofessional career.

Example 4What is your intended major? Discuss how your interest in the subject developed anddescribe any experience you have had in the field such as volunteer work,internships and employment, participation in student organizations and activities andwhat you have gained from your involvement.

At Chabot College, one instructor in particular, influenced me to pursue engineering. Thisprofessor won my respect and admiration due to the fact that he was knowledgeable yethumble, well-educated and yet able break down complex concepts in a way that students



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could comprehend. This professor recommended that I read a brochure describing mechanicalengineering. The information in the brochure sparked my interest in the field of mechanicalengineering, I knew since childhood that I wanted to become an engineer. The brochuredescribed in detail with various facets of engineering, such as building and design. Thebrochure further explained how innovation and research play a critical role in the technologicaldevelopment of many important industries including automotive. Cars have always fascinatedme, and I hope to make my career as a design engineer within the automotive industry. I

believe that engineering, in general, is a foundation of the modern world in that technicalinnovation and progress crucial for industrial development. Engineers are at the cutting-edgeof technology, I want to join the profession to assist, as best I can, with continued technical andhuman progress.

Throughout my childhood, engineering grew to become my passion in life. As a child I recallspending hours assembling and taking apart countless devices, such as model cars, air rifles,and bicycles. I wanted to learn how these products truly worked; exactly how did the air-riflelaunch the projectile? Through my own exploration and research of such devices I was able toderive my own conclusions about fundamental function. In high school I had the opportunity towork on two interesting projects: the building of a catapult and model bridge. Working through

these projects I came away with a broader perspective on how physics, mathematics, andengineering-creativity intertwine to produce a desired result. For instance, the goal in thecatapult project was to launch a tennis ball as far as possible. To achieve this result I had toconsider the variables involved such as calculating the angle-of-release to maximize hangtime, I also designed the spring system to impart to the projectile an increased initial velocity.My college courses greatly expanded by technical knowledge base. My Chabot Collegeinstructors were seasoned technical professionals and as a result, I became even morecaptivated by the potential offered by the study of engineering. I eventually realized thatvirtually all devices could be improved through simple modifications that would make themmore useful and efficient. I also saw that the creative application of scientific principles couldresult in practical designs for NEW devices to perform tasks that had never been done before.

On the non-academic side of my life it turned out that financing my education beyond highschool proved to be quite challenging.. I began working fulltime at an office as a dataprocessor while attending Chabot College part-time. During this time I took advantage of everyopportunity to troubleshoot and repair printers and copiers, learning first-hand about how theyfunctioned. However, I quickly realized that I wanted a job that would permit me to make betteruse of my time and allow me to apply the engineering knowledge that I obtained in school, andto accelerate my learning within engineering. I decided to pursue my education on a fulltimebasis and also obtained a more technical position with a telemanagement company as apayphone technician; a job I continue to hold and enjoy. This position requires that I read andunderstand technical documentation, and that I develop significant hands-on technical skills.

Tell us about a personal quality, talent, accomplishment, contribution or experience that is

important to you. What about this quality or accomplishment makes you proud and how does it

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I was born to a Mexican father and Mexican-American mother in a family that did not stronglyemphasize education. Fortunately I realized at an early age that a college education wascritical to succeeding in the area of my choosing - engineering. Further, the experience ofhaving grown up in a quite tough Oakland, CA neighborhood motivated me to do my best toescape this difficult environment. For instance, many of my friends dropped out of high schoolbecause, in my opinion, they did not believe they could succeed; they did not believe thateducation was a path to success, Im thankful that, despite the harsh environment in which I

grew up, I have always recognized that it was up to me to pursue my dream of becoming anengineer. I also appreciate the experiences that I had growing up since they propelled me tofind my way toward realizing my dream of becoming an Engineer.

One positive experience in particular changed my life. At the age of 18 years the youth groupof my church elected me as leader for the Royal Rangers youth program. This position entailedleading and mentoring a group of troubled 8-12 year olds. The ultimate goal was to raise theirself esteem through activities and open discussions that focused on the problems and issuesthey faced everyday. At the conclusion of the program I came away with a great sense ofaccomplishment after receiving great feedback from many parents regarding the improvementin a childs attitude and behavior. One mother in particular thanked me personally for

strengthening her sons moral character. This experience benefited me in that it required that Istep out of my comfort zone, I was an extremely shy person and working with the youngpeople and their parents help be to break out my shell.. In addition I also gained valuableinterpersonal skills upon which I rely to this day.

At Chabot, one of my calculus instructors recommended that I become a math tutor. I took thissuggestion as I felt that I could improve both my verbal technical skills while assistingstruggling students. I did this for a semester and Im glad I did. I think that I helped a number ofstudents succeed in all levels of mathematics. In the end, I found it flattering that many of mytutoring clients were very thankful grateful for my assistance. Some clients even requestedprivate tutorials which I accommodated whenever I could..

Throughout my life I have taken pride in having become an accomplished musician. I play theguitar, bass, drums, and saxophone. As a praise musician I use these talents to serve mychurch. Learning these instruments took years of hard work and dedication. My musicexperience caused me to realize that diligence pays off in all of lifes endeavors. I know thatdedication and diligence will serve me well in my journey to become a mechanical engineer.

Example 5Question 1: What is your intended major? Discuss how you interest in the field developed anddescribe any experience you have had in this field such as volunteer work, internships, andemployment, participation in student organizations and activities and what you have gainedfrom your involvement. (less than 600 words)

I intend to major in Mechanical Engineering (ME). My interest in ME developed during myemployment with a Silicon Valley technology firm. My awareness of engineering as a careertook shape after a new optical-fiber communication company, Avanex Co., offered me a job.



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Looking back, I was not only lucky to secure a well-compensated position, but moreimportantly, I also took my first steps toward understanding engineering. The experiences andknowledge I gained from this job played a vital role in influencing and initiating my decision topursue engineering as an academic and professional career.

Avanex hired me as a technician during formation of the firm. I was the eighteenth employee ofthe company. At the beginning, an optical engineer trained me for my job. The training

engineer instructed me in the use machines, equipment and instruments. I learned how tooperate a number of sophisticated instruments, including: optical spectrum analyzers, powermeters for measuring decibel loss, and the laser source systems. During my training, I alsoassembled the many intricate parts required by the device as designed by the optical engineer.In a sense, my duties were similar to those of an engineers assistant. Although he did notexplain the principles behind his inventions, I could follow and understand the processes ofhow an engineer conceives and develops a product as I transformed his thoughts into finishedproducts. When I encountered a problem, such as the assembled device showing anunexpected loss in light power, the engineer would review my work with me to determine thesource of the difficulty. From these invaluable experiences, I not only became familiar withengineering design and problem-solving, but also I learned how engineers optimize their

working efficiency through teamwork and attentive analyses. These experiences all combinedto ground very firmly my decision to become an engineer.

The specific problem that moved me toward mechanical engineering can be traced back to thebiggest issue we encountered in developing the above-mentioned device. Temperaturechanges degraded device performance, and this problem had not been solved even afterproduction of the device had commenced. Thermal expansion and contraction, caused achanges in the positions of the device lens and filter assembly. Even though the change wassmall, it has a significant effect on the angle of the light beam as it entered the filter, which wasm (micrometer) in scale. Under these conditions the beam alignment failed, resulting in anout-of-range scrapping of the device. Several engineers put considerable effort into solving this

problem, without being able to eliminate it. It turned that the same problem plagued otherproducts. During my three years at Avanex, I encountered the thermal expansion problemeach time I participated new-product development. As I observed the repetition of this problemmy interest in mechanical engineering intensified. Now I know that I want to become themechanical engineer who creates a solution this long-standing problem. I promised myself thatI will one day use my mechanical expertise to invent a better optical component that will beable to split many channels into separate wavelengths while minimizing the thermal expansioneffect.

Example 6Prompt 1

I hope to study mechanical engineering in order to enhance my understanding of the functionand purpose of mechanical devices. A degree in mechanical engineering will give me moreinsight into the principles of mechanical, fluid, and thermal system design.. I often analyze thedesign of mechanical devices that I encounter in daily life. Many times I see that the designcould be significantly improved with a few simple changes. On the other hand, many times I



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am fascinated by well-engineered equipment, which incorporates functionality and an organicintegration with the surroundings in which it was designed to operate.

My interest in engineering began when I was a child. I spent hours playing with Technic Legos.Simply following the instructions to build the Lego set quickly became routine anduninteresting. I then began creating my own designs for gear boxes, cranes, cars, locks, andother mechanical structures. I became addicted to taking apart things such as alarms, printers

and remote controlled cars in an effort to satisfy my curiosity about how they worked. This wasmy first introduction to engineering design.

In high school I worked with my father who runs a business repairing high speed dental drillsand other dental equipment. As a service technician I assisted with the repair and rebuilding ofthese high-speed precision drills. My service work exposed me to engineering design at amuch higher level. Small, high-speed compressed air turbines provide power to the dental drillbit. Encountering a turbine that I had never repaired before was especially exciting. I woulddraw my own assembly diagrams as I took apart the instrument to enhance my understandingof the design. This increased understanding allow me to improvise and use parts from othermodels to complete a difficult repair. I became increasingly interested in working with my

hands, and to understand the underlying concepts that made these machines work. Byservicing complex mechanical devices I gained valuable work experience. More importantlyduring this hands-on repair process I learned how to creatively solve real worldengineering/technical problems.

During my time in college I had two instructors who had private-sector engineering designexperience. These Professors won my respect and admiration instantly. Both professors wereknowledgeable yet humble, well-educated yet down to earth. One of these instructors, Mr.Mayer, had been awarded four patents and had won and industry Product of the Year designaward. These professors became role models for me as an aspiring engineer and as aperson.

Mr. Mayer is also a UC Berkeley Mechanical Engineering graduate. He helped me tounderstand the tremendous opportunity afforded by the study of Mechanical engineering atCal. I will do my absolute best to make the most of this opportunity

Prompt 2I consider myself fortunate to have lived and grown up among many different languages,cultures and ethnicities. My Father is an American and my mother a German. My parents wereunderground missionaries in Nicaragua during the revolutionary era in the 1980s. Our familythen moved to Russia, a short time after it opened to the west. Instead of attending an

international school, I became immersed in Russian culture as I went to the local public school.After living in Russia for three years our family relocated again, this time to the island ofJamaica.

In high school I experienced several situations that really changed my life. First, while inJamica, I was nominated and elected for student body president, or Head Boy as it is called inthere. I was very shy, and a part of a racial minority. This made it very challenging for me torun for the post. I had to overcome serious skepticism and ridicule from my peers as a student,



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and also as Head Boy. This responsibility gave me the opportunity to go beyond my comfortzone and interact with many people in many different circumstances..

In an attempt to bring my Jamaican high school to a new level of academic excellence. ThePrincipal asked me to help to create a team the Schools Challenge Quiz competition . Thisnationally televised quiz show is the highlight of Jamaicas school year. I decided to take onthis challenge and be a part of the team representing our school. Membership on this team

turned out to be one of the best decisions I made during high school. As the captain of theteam I had to lead by example. I worked-harder and studied more than my team mates in myeffort to inspire them. Our team renewed and enhance our schools reputation by advancing tothe third round of the competition. During this team-effort I won over several peers that hadskeptical of my non-Jamican background. More importantly my service as Team Captaintaught me the importance of humility, hard work and teamwork.

After my high school graduation I made an important decision in NOT immediately applying forcollege. Instead I decided to take a break from academics and pursue some experientialeducation. I moved to the USA for two years of volunteer work as a member of the SpecialTask Force, a youth program organized by my church. This program focuses on character

education and leadership training. My communication skills improved greatly as I worked withand assisted literally thousands of people in thirty states from almost every walk of life. My theprogram supervisor eventually appointed my as Team Leader of other young people my age.

As Team Leader I did my best to guide my team mates through community service, outreach,fundraisers, and moral education activities.

By living most of my life in several differenct countries I became keenly aware of the diversecultures that exist in the world today. The vast differences in cultures is something that, I think,cannot be easily grasped by someone growing up in a developed country. These experienceshelped me to become adaptable to many circumstances and have enabled me to relate topeople of all cultural backgrounds.

Probably my most important lesson-learned during my international time was that I placed onmyself many self-imposed limitations; perhaps too many. I found that if I go beyond theseartificial limitations I can accomplish more than I thought possible. This self-discovery helpedme persevere through many challenges in college, work, and my personal life.

My life experiences have given me a well rounded understanding of the world in which we live.Growing-up, and working-in different continents has given me the ability to easily adapt to anycircumstance. I also love to learn, both in the classroom and in life. My worldly experiences,and strong desire to learn, make me confident that I will succeed in my field of MechanicalEngineering. I am sure that I will make strong contribution to the University of California. I look

forward to attending a UC College of Engineering, and I will do my best to bring credit to thisfine university.

Example 7#1

My intended major is civil engineering.



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The interest and passion I have toward the civil engineering field struck me just after a

powerful earthquake known as the Wenchuan Earthquake. This terrible natural disaster tookplace in Southern China on May 12, 2008. I was terrifyed to witness the face of a mother whodied as she protected her infant child from the effects of the earthquake. I can almost hearvictims crying inconsolably upon losing their homes and even the lives of some family andfriends. Nearly 68,000 people died during this earthquake that also left almost five million

survivors homeless. With many sorrowful stories, my attention was drawn toward the fallenbuildings which appeared sturdy before the earthquake, but crumbled during the shaking.Every time I thought of the fallen buildings, my desire to become a civil engineer grew moreintense. I want to learn how to design strong buildings and houses, allowing people to workand live in safety. Another earthquake of the Wenchuan magnitude may happen again and Iwant to help create building to withstand it. I began researching and collecting informationabout structures built to resist earthquakes, especially for a worst case scenario such as theWenchuan Earthquake. I started with internet searches, and watching many documentaryvideos regarding structures and buildings. As I learned about structural engineering I becamemore curious and hungered for greater knowledge.

Even with many hours and devotion to self-studying engineering, I knew that only auniversity experience could formalize my knowledge. I did well in early college classes due tomy strong desire to earn a Civil engineering degree. My interest in the field makes it easiercomprehend specific details and concepts related to engineering. When I encounter situationsthat I do not completely understand, my curiosity drives me to study and learn more about it soI can apply this knowledge. Several teachers recognized my technical talent and nominatedme to represent the school in a Mathematical Olympiad Match. In the Mathematical OlympiadMatch, I learned many interesting problem-solving methods, as well as special study skills thathelped me very much in my engineering classes. I hope use some of the thinking strategies todesign new and better structural components. Many of my teachers also recommended me tofor math and physics tutoring. My tutor duties allowed me to share my desires with others as I

mentored them and inspired them to become sience/engineering heroes as well. Tutoring issuch a wonderful experience because students share their challenging questions. We thenstruggle and learn together. Even though I am the tutor, the students often teach mesomething new, or share a unique perspective that helps me in my studies. I am ready topursue my ambition, use my skills, to work with other engineers who will fulfill my dream ofproviding for the world by creating a structurally safe environment.

#2Perseverance is one of the greatest strengths that defines my character. I believe in my

personal qualities and I am very proud of the obstacles and challenges I have overcome toreach my academic goals. In order to become a great engineer, I work intensely to learn all Ican about engineering. I make a stong effort to understand every detail. When difficult timesarise, I know that hardships often lead to good ends.

Shortly after my family had moved to the USA, an unexpected disaster happened in2010: My father was twice victimized by a stroke which caused him Hemiparalysis and manyother symptoms that powerfully impaired our familys way of life. Due to my fathers fragile



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health and his inability to work, I helped the family by working more hours to contribute to thefamily finances. I also assist my mother who does not speak English. Along with employment,school, and many other responsibilities to fulfill each day, I must communicate with the hospitalto ensure my father's good care, contact agents of the insurance company, and drive my momto visit my dad daily. These challenges do not and will not defeat my good spirit because of thefierce desire I have, dreaming to become a great engineer; this will always burn in my heart. Istudy until midnight every single day, even on the weekends. I study after work to make sure I

will stay ahead of the classes and be the best student; I love what I learn. Besides collectingvaluable knowledge applicable to my engineering path and maintaining a 4.0 GPA, I also needto support my family. This challenge is even more difficult because my dad does not qualify forthe Social Security Disability Insurance (SSDI) benefit, and my family lost its main income frommy fathers employment. Due to the increased hours on the job to earn money, I have lostadditional study time, personal time, and family time. As a resolution to this problem, I continueto focus on the goal; my dream of earning a civil engineering degree. I know that this obstaclewill not prevent me from making my dreams come true.

To help pursue my goal, I participate in many clubs at Chabot College, such as the

Engineering Club, International Club, and Alpha Gamma Sigma club. The Engineering Clubgives me insight into the engineering field, and raised my level of interest in engineering. Weshare ideas and participate in fun activities such as building a model-sized wind turbine whichcreates mechanical energy from the wind, We also discuss current technologicaldevelopments, and their effect on peoples lives. Outside of Chabot College, I am also amember of the Aspire Program, EOPS Program, and the Bridge to Engineering Program whichhelped me become a more dedicated engineering student. To pursue my goal, I will never sayimpossible to myself because I believe that as long as I continue to give a 110% effort, thenmy engineering dream will eventually be realized. The scholarships I received from the AspireProgram and Tung Goon Bo On Association are indications of my motivation and personalqualities. I am confident that my perseverance and personal qualities will always keep me

strong enough to overcome every challenge I meet in the future and to eventually become anoutstanding engineer.

Example 8#1

I intend to major in the wonderful field of Mechanical Engineering as I aspire to becomea machine-design engineer.

I want to practice mechanical/machine design engineering because I have always beenfascinated with HOW machines do their work. As a child, I often took apart my electricpowered toys to learn how these machines transferred power from the motor to the movingparts, Often I would modify the transmission parts to change how the toy operated. Forexample I once made a power and steering system for a RC boat using the components frommy RC airplane. As I grew older, my interest shifted to larger machines such as my mountainbike. I was fascinated by complexity of the components of machinery with moving parts. I



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always tried to understand how the machine converted electrical, pneumatic, heat, or humanpower into useful motion. This intense curiosity leads naturally to my choice of the MechanicalEngineering major.

For many year father worked in building construction. On several occasions I had theopportunity to visit his construction. I immediately noticed some of the difficulties ofconstruction process. For much of the day the workers completed tasks that required a greatdeal prolonged-standing, bending and stooping. Frequently the worker had to lift and carry

heavy objects. Watching this activity, I thought how I might improve this working environmentby designing robotic systems that. I instinctively new that Engineering Design could improvethe lives of construction workers such as Dad. .

Some my inspiration for robotic-system design comes from the computer game StarCraft. In There SCV portion of the game a human wearing a robotic exoskeleton that collectsresources and constructs buildings. I dream of bringing this robotic suit life. My concept is thatfour limbs and a main-body would form the basic suit. The main body would include sensorsto detect nerve-signals and limb-motion. Computer software would then learn from the sensorinputs, allowing the robotic limbs to copy our movements. The robotic suit basically acts as astrength and stamina amplifier, allowing an operator to finish difficult physical tasks without the

risk of injury. My design could be easily adapted to enable people with extremity disabilities toperform tasks without assistance, giving the person much greater independence.

Creation of such a robotic suit requires sophisticated Mechanical Engineering. Such asystem would include the integrations of computers, sensors, motors, servos, power sources,precision mechanical parts, strong and light materials, an intuitive user interface, and operatingsoftware. Design and production of such an assistive suit presents many technical challenges.Earning a degree in Mechanical Engineering would prepare me to overcome these engineeringdesign obstacles to ultimate create a product that would help countless people.

Fortunately for me my uncle owns an automobile repair business. I often visit my unclesauto shop to help him with diagnosis and repair work. This has been a tremendous learning

experience. I gained hands-on skills by operating repair machinery anddisassembly/reassembly of automotive systems. I think that these experiences would definitelybe an asset as I learn the art and science of machine-design engineering.

I also joined the student engineering organization here at Chabot College. Joining theclub gave me the chance to apply the knowledge gained from my coursework. Currently ourclub is working on the design and construction of a 3D printer. By participating in this project, Inow understand the importance of teamwork. The success of the project requires that EVERYteam member contribute to the effort. Ive also learned the value of planning andcommunication. The project plan guides the efforts of team members, and effectivecommunication keeps the project on-track.

Im very excited about continuing my Engineering Education, and I would work veryhard to take advantage of the learning opportunities that are a natural part of earning a degreein Mechanical Engineering. I hope you will look with favor on my application for admission tothis fine program.



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Example 9#1

I plan to major in the wonderful field of Chemical Engineering. In my opinion, innovativeChemical Engineering will solve many environmental and health problems humans mustovercome in 21st century. For example, air and water pollution in my hometown ofGuangzhou, China, produced major health concerns. On some days during my childhood, I the

thick smog would obscure the sun in the sky. I also learned that Guangzhou rain water oftenreached acidic levels with a pH as low as 5.6. Many people living near factories suffered fromexposure to industrial toxins. My first-hand observation of the destructive power of a degradedenvironment motivates me to lessen impact of useful industrial activities. I hope to use theknowledge and skills gained through the study of Chemical Engineering to improve the lives ofthe people in Guangzhou and other areas that encounter similar situations. I know thatChemical Engineers can design improved industrial and manufacturing processes that wouldgenerate greatly reduced levels of undesirable byproducts that might degrade the air andwater. Chemical engineers could employ advanced materials, new catalysts, networkedsensors/actuators, and sophisticated real-time control algorithms to produce useful productswith a greatly reduced environmental footprint.

The opportunity to APPLY my strong interest in the science of chemistry also lead meto my chosen career of Chemical Engineering. When I learn a new topic in chemistry, Im veryexcited with the new knowledge. I feel as though my whole world has become much morebroad and rich. For example, when I learned the basic atomic structure, I was amazed byphenomena which I never knew existed such as the process by which an electron dropping toits ground state from an excited state releases energy in the form of light. This is why a hot ironrod glows red, and why certain electronic diodes (LEDs) produce light to efficiently.

I find Engineering, in general, fascinating as I really enjoy solving problems. When I was a boy,I would feel happy and excited when I solved a complicated jigsaw puzzle, or worked through a

difficult mathematics problem. This experience still influences me. Solving science andengineering problems reminds me of playing with puzzles; when I get stuck on some point, I tryto imagine different ways to solve it. At Chabot College Im currently enrolled in aComputational Methods course where students use software tools such as MATLAB andSimuLink to solve calculus-based engineering problems. I learned in this course that technicalproblems can be solved in a number of different ways as well. I find the entire process of usingchemistry and technology to solve real-world problems extremely exciting.

I also like to help my fellow students with their studies. I think that sharing myknowledge with other students helps me to learn the subject as well. As a chemistry tutor, Imet many students struggling with complex topics. As I assisted these students I found my

own knowledge refreshed and reinforced when I explained the chemistry concepts to thestudent. Along with tutoring in chemistry, I also hold the position of President of the ChemistryClub at Chabot College. From my experience leading this club, I've gained organizational skillssuch as meeting management and event planning/preparation. Most importantly, I've had theopportunity to share the wonder of chemistry with other students, brining more and morestudents into fields of chemistry and engineering. I think these experiences are the mostprecious in my life. When I become a UC Chemical Engineering student, I would love to tutorchemistry and chemical engineering students as this will help them and me to learn the coursematerial.



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As I study chemistry and engineering at my community college, my desire to be a chemicalengineer grows ever stronger. A career in Chemical Engineering will give me the opportunity todesign solutions to important and difficult puzzles such as the reduction of harmful industrialpollution. I look forward to completing by baccalaureate degree in Chemical Engineering whichwill enable me to help solve these puzzles and to improve the lives of so many people. I lookforward to joining your fine Chemical Engineering Program.

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I emigrated from China to the U.S with my parents in 2008, just after I graduated fromhigh school in China. Since the tuition for out-of-state students was so high, I went to adultschool for free English study. During those few months, my parents could not find any jobs andhad great financial difficulty. As a result, one day, my parents told me that we needed to goback to China. But I told them that I had decided to remain here to study because I could thenpursue my dream in the U.S. My mother ended up going back to China, while my father stayedwith me. At that time, I studied hard to improve my English skills. I borrowed some textbooks

such as college-level chemistry and calculus from my cousin and studied them at home bymyself. As time went by, my English skills improved very much. Later on, I took anassessment test in Chabot and, surprisingly, I received a high score in English and math.

The first English course I took in college was tough for me because it was about criticalthinking and writing. The major problem I encountered was that I didn't know how to writelonger essays which involved critical thinking. At that time I really needed some help in thecourse, but my parents couldn't help me because they only had a little bit high schooleducation. Taking the instructor's suggestion, I went to the tutoring for English writing everyday. I trusted her advice that a good foundation of English skills I built up would certainly helpme in future studies. At last, I got an A in that English course and my English improved

tremendously. More importantly, I not only improved my critical thinking skills, but became trulyconfident in studying in college.

A while ago, my grandmother became seriously ill and my father had to go back to mycountry to take care of her. I understood that the situation was hard for my family and that Ineeded to be strong to overcome this circumstance. Living by myself, I have had to managemoney and take good care of myself. I also need to manage my time and balance the timebetween work and study. When other students are playing video games, I'm concentrating onmy study because I don't want to waste the money I paid for tuition and the valuable time.Despite the busy schedule between home and school, I have done my best and received A's inmy classes. The experience of living without parents not only builds up my skills for cooking

and fiscal management, but also trains me to be a more responsible, independent, and adisciplined person. I'm proud of having these qualities.

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I intend to major in the exciting field of Civil Engineering. At early age I became interested inengineering by working with my father at residential construction sites. My dad usually askedme to perform routine tasks such as sweeping or picking up loose nails, but I enjoyed this as Icould watch the buildings take shape over time. As I swept I began to wonder exactly howthese houses were held up by thin two-by-four wooden beams, why the ceiling did not cave in,how the building withstand the shaking of a strong earthquake, and most interestingly, HOWand WHO designed the building in the first place. My uncle, an environmental engineer, told

me that civil engineers create building designs that produce strong and safe structures thatwithstand hurricane-winds and powerful-earthquakes. At that moment that I realized I wantedto become a civil engineer. My curiosity about building structures led me to civil engineering,and by choosing it as my major field of university study, I can, throughout my adult life, engagethe same curiosity and to experience the same excitement about the building process that I feltat the age of ten.

As I grew older, my interest in civil engineering intensified as I continued to work with my fatherin residential construction and as I worked under the guidance of my instructors at ChabotCollege. On one occasion, my father and I were remodeling a three story house built in the1920s. We needed to erect a scaffold to reach a top story window, but the scaffold could not

be secured to the house as the scaffold brackets might damage the original stucco on theexterior. To meet the customers needs of replacing windows without defacing the exterior, Idesigned and built a support system that braced the scaffold. This experience had a profoundimpact on me because it gave me an opportunity to logically solve a problem, implement adesign from paper to reality, and meet a customers unexpected need. Engineers must performthese tasks on a regular basis, and it is experiences such as the scaffold-support design whichhelped me to develop the creative problem solving skills which I will use my entire CivilEngineering career.

During my calculus-based Physics and Engineering-Mechanics classes, my instructors, Mr.Scott Hildreth and Mr. Bruce Mayer (both of whom have years of engineering-practice

experience), provided me with the tools to answer some of those first questions aboutbuildings that I had asked as a boy. In these courses, I studied Newtons Laws of Mechanicswhere I learned how to use calculus and reasoning to solve real life problems. Mr. Hildreth andMr. Mayer inspired me and informed me about the hard work, fulfillment, and opportunitiesoffered by an engineering career. By attending one of the finest universities in the world, I candevelop to a very high level my understanding of the field and have expert guidance along mypath in engineering.

Just as my instructors influenced and inspired me to achieve academic excellence, I havebeen afforded the opportunity to help others as a mathematics tutor at Chabot College. In thatcapacity, I refined thinking and analytical skills that will support my future work as a Civil

Engineer. Not only has the tutoring experience solidified my understanding of higher levels ofmathematics; it has required that I refine my communication skills so I can explain complextopics, clearly, concisely and effectively. Additionally, the tutoring experience gave me thechance to reach out and to help my local community by aiding my peers. Just as I strive to helpmy peers grasp algebra, geometry, and calculus, I as an engineer could contribute to thecommunity by using the knowledge I gained at the university by contributing to technicaladvances to the benefit of our society. After earning undergraduate and graduate CivilEngineering degrees, I plan to work as a City or County engineer. By working in the public



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sector I can engage my university training in civil engineering to directly contribute to theeffective, efficient, and safe construction of municipal infrastruture

***************prompt 2**************My participation in year-round competitive USA Swimming from age eleven has had aprofound impact on me. Swimming taught me life skills that I will carry with me well into my

engineering career and throughout my entire life. Through participation on swim teams Irealized the importance of hard work, commitment, teamwork, and time management. As aswimmer, I consistently arise at five in the morning for practice, swim for several hours twice aday, and devote many hours on weekends to formal competitions. At one particular swim meetin Long Beach, CA, I had a very rough first race. My team and coach became concerned aboutmy ability to contribute to the team effort over the course of the weekend-long competition.Fortunately, all of the hard work and time I had put into my training gave me the confidence torecover from these difficulties. I eventually swam a personal-best time in the 200 yard freestylerace. This experience reinforced my view that hard work and commitment that brought me thesuccess that I enjoyed in swimming and academics. Additionally, understanding the value ofteamwork and unity, I routinely encouraged my teammates by helping them to refine the

technical aspects of swim-starts and swim-turns.

Without the ability to manage my time, I would have never been able to be simultaneouslysuccessful the classroom and swimming pool. Reaching my goals of earning an undergraduatedegree in civil engineering, of continuing my education with a masters degree, and ofultimately working in the public sector will require effective time management, communication,and disciplined commitment. There is no substitute for working hard as powerful personal effortgives one the best chance of meeting personal goals. I am proud of my swimming career notonly because of my successes in the pool, but more importantly because of the crucial lifeskills learned during the process of training, preparation, and performance required by thesport.

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