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What makes a moment important in life?

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What makes a moment important in life?

1. Your feelings

2. The implications for the future

3. A surprise/unexpected event

4. Confirmation of something

5. A change in viewpoint or perspective

6. Who you share it with

These are the kind of moments

WORTH describing.

Descriptive Writing: What Ingredients do you Already Know?

• In groups, write the opening to an answer to this question:

From your imagination, describe a warrior or a hero at the moment of victory.

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• There are many well defined, well developed ideas and images, describing complex atmospheres with a range of details.

• Overall structure is provided through devices such as the movements of the persona, the creation of a short time span, or the creation of atmosphere or tension.

• There is no confusion with writing a story.• Repetition is avoided and the sequence of sentences

makes the picture clear to the reader.

How Big Can you Make your Cake?

• Today you will practice: 1. Thinking of complex responses to the questions2. Crafting your sentences and paragraphs3. Developing your descriptions

On Thursday, you will practice:4. Crafting using punctuation5. Using correct comparatives and superlatives: who is the

most * * in the class?And complete your descriptive writing past paper.

1. Complex Responses to the Questions

• Don’t make the obvious choice!1. If the question allows, pick an unique topic.

2. ‘You’ just has to be a persona: you can write from anyone’s or anything’s perspective.

Describe a group of people at work.

• ‘Suddenly everything stopped moving and there was complete silence.’ Describe what was before your eyes and the sensations that you experienced.

• From your imagination, describe a warrior or a hero at the moment of victory.

• Describe the last moments before you leave a place forever.

• Describe a restful place

• Describe an alien’s first impression of a town centre known to you.

• Describe the surroundings and your emotions at a time when you felt very alone.

• Imagine you are in a hot air balloon. Describe what you see below and how the experience makes you feel.

1. Complex Responses to the Questions

1. If the question allows, pick an unique topic. 2. If not/Then, look at it from a unique angle.3. (Unless it is an emotional piece) Describe it from an object’s

perspective.

Take control of your writing: it doesn’t say it’s limited to one person/object’s perspective.

GET IN AN UNUSUAL POSITIONDescribe the room.

Describe a place you feel uncomfortable...

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• Describe a toilet.... From a sink’s perspective.

2. Crafting sentences and paragraphs

• The whole thing has to be structured via a common thread.

• How many ways can we thread the details together?

Describe a group of people at work

Juxtaposition

Many people are happy there. They think it’s a wonderful wonderland of excitement and adventure. Most people’s heart beats rise and fall in rapid succession as their cheeks light up and their mouths swallow heavily in anticipation. My mouth cradles inside itself, frightened like a hedgehog lost in the middle of a fierce highway. My heart slows so that I can feel every microsecond of movement as it contracts into a small ball. This is my personal hell: this is P.E.

Juxtaposition• Link to your viewpoint:

Look again at your description of the room. Now get on the floor.Write it again from the perspective of an ant.Link it using one of the following phrases:

Below my eyes crawls an ant, experiencing an entirely different world within these four walls... Contrary to this perspective, an ant is over-powered by the ....

Balanced sentences

• Her home and her housekeeping, her parish and her poultry.

• Alliteration + same number of words either side of a connective or ;

• (Repetition can also aid this).

Which are the antithesis words?

1. As I got bigger, the world got smaller. 2. The curtains breathed in and out with the

melody of the wind. 3. The wealth of the sky was replaced by the

impoverished clouds. 4. As the miserable days sank into my past, my

future climbed before me with promise.

Prepositional and Adverb Starters: Find Them!

• Prepositions:• Until• As• Beneath• Above• Beyond• Unless• Out of reach

• Adverbs:• Stealthily• Miserably• Melodically• Harmoniously • Roughly• Effortlessly• Contentedly

3. Developing Details• You will be given a photograph. Describe the photograph

for 1minute. • Your partner will then draw what they think the photo

looks like.

Cross-reference the photographs. • If the layout of the photo is similar, you’d get a grade C/D.• If there are specific, minute details on both photographs,

you’d get a B. • If the atmosphere is similar, despite the layout not being

exactly the same, you’d get a grade A.

Which is the most effective personification?

1. The walls venomously suffocated me with the weight of the world on their shoulders.

2. The windows stared dully out on the bleak landscape.

3. The computer hummed a peaceful tune and the teacher’s voice matched the melody.

4. The carpet stroked my feet as I swung my legs beneath the table.

Imagery Pecking Order

• Metaphors

• Extended Metaphors

• Personification

• Similes

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Argue your case!

• You will be given an opener to a description for the question:

Describe a group of people at work.

Your job is to argue that your opener is better than the rest.

Welcome to Tenby Magazines

URGENT MEMO From: Editor CarinaTo: Yr11 Subject: Descriptive Writing Needed.

Describe the last moments before you leave a place forever.

Write the first 195-205 words to this question. Pass it to the sub-editors, who will comment on your work and decide

which two are worthy of publication. Use your ingredients.