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Task 2.

Please, add your reports to the comments. The deadline is 21 p.m. Monday, November, 29

You can find all the necessary information about reports in the attachments.The 1st attachment includes some brief information about writing a report, 2

sample reports and a table with possible grades. Please, be sure to study thisinformation carefully before writing your own report.

The 2nd attachment presents the task for you.

A report schould normally include about 180-220 words.

Task 2.

The deadline then will be tomorrow (December,3) 9 a.m.

You are the secretary of the Sports Club at an international college in New Zealand. The club would like to make some improvements and needs financial

help from the college. The college Principal, Dr Parker, has asked you to write areport on the club. Some of the students have given you their views.Read the advertisement for the club and comments from the students below.Then, using the information appropriately, write a report for the Principal,

suggesting what changes you would like to make and why and persuading himto contribute some money towards these changes.The advertisement for Riverdale College Sports Club:

BadmintonSquashClimbing WallFitness Room

Social EventsMon – Fri 5p.m. – 10 p.m.Students’ comments:

- Nowhere to have a drink, to relax- Fitness room always overcrowded

- Showers always broken- I can only come at weekends

- Organ ised classes?

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Now write your report for the Principal, as outlined above. You should use your

own words as far as possible.

Dear friends!

Here are some brief comments on the most common mistakes in the reports you’ve

submitted so far (the1st

one about the Careers Conference and the 2d

one about

Riverdale College Sports Club). The comments concern only those reports, which

haven’t been discussed in class.

Your Careers Conference reports (some points to work on):

! The improper form of address (use Dear Sir or Dear Madam, if you

don’t know the recipient’s name and in this case you have to end the letter Yours

faithfully. If you begin with a name (Dear Mr Brown/Mrs White, end with Yours

sincerely (both Yours faithfully and Yours sincerely should be followed by acomma). In both cases after the formal ending you should write your name and

surname below).! Falsifying or misunderstanding the information given in the task ( for

ex.: ‘…because of the lack of time not all questions were answered…’

(Ekaterina Buchalova) (because there were not enough experts to answer all of

them). ‘… the experts were always available to give advice…’ (Lorce Palych).

One of the imperfections of the Conference was that the experts were not

always available to give advice since there were not enough of them.

! No paraphrase of the information given in the task . Sometimes liftingthe phrases from the input material, which is not advisable.(for ex.: ‘ …many

talks were good…’ ; ‘… the exhibition was great…” (Dima Korostylev). ‘…

talks on a wide range of careers..” (Lorce Palych).! Partial misunderstanding of the task . According to the task, you are to

write a report to the College Principal, explaining how useful the Conference

was and making recommendations for the future. Since you address your report

to your College Principal, the recommendations should concern his future

possible actions (for ex.: what students it would be better to send there next time,

from what departments and so on) The recommendations and occasional

comments you made about how to improve the conference (though often logical,

interesting and well-grounded) would be more relevant for the conference

organizers than your own College Principal).! Occasionally inappropriate register and format . All informal or

relatively informal words , expressions and comments should be avoided (fro ex.

‘…this very conference…’ (Dima Korostylev). ‘…without any…mess” (Olga

Chekhovskaya).

Since a report is a very impersonal piece of writing, you should avoid expressing

personal opinions or feelings. It’s also advisable to avoid making very denite

statements and not to be judgmental. For ex.: ‘… there were some drawbacks

which are necessary to be improved…”; ‘Undoubtedly…’; ‘advantages’,

‘disadvantages’, ‘drawbacks’, ‘bad points’ (Lorce Palych). ‘… negative

moments…’; ‘ Of course…’ (Irene Gridasova). ‘ …a bit useless…’ (Olga


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! Use an appropriate register consistently.! Don’t lift whole phrases from the input material . Rework them insteadinto original language.

Here is a model of a proposal:

Here is the task for you. You should write a proposal (180-220 words) with

regard to the information in the task. The deadline for this task is 22 p.m.Monday, December,6.

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Dear students,Here is a new task for you. You should write a proposal with regard to theinformation in the task. The deadline for this task is 23 p.m. December, 9.

You should also grade the proposal on this topic, which is below the task itself. (The table with possible grades is in the 1st attachment) Justify your

opinion briefly (several sentences) and add your comments on thisproposal.

The Committee of your school’s Arts Club, of which you are a member, has decided to publish amonthly arts magazine for students. Read your notes below, and the replies from the people youhave contacted, and write a proposal for the committee suggesting four ideas for inclusion in thefirst issue and giving your reasons.Your notes:

NB aim for varietyFILM REVIEWS what’s on at local cinema?BOOK REVIEWS contact Derek LOCAL EVENTS - art exhibition in town Hall

- circus in Wigmore Park CLUB ACTIVITIES next month’s trip to see musical in LondonINTERVIEWS - offer from Hadley Norris – curator of local art museum.

- Audrey Perham - actor?COMPETITIONS writing competition? Film quiz? The replies from the people you have contacted:“ I’ve enclosed reviews on three art history books – hope that’s o’k”Derek Turner, Turner’s bookshop “… not possible as I’m busy rehearsing for my next production. However, here are 4 free ticketsto offer as prizes”Audrey Perham “ … as it’s the school holidays we’ll be showing mostly cartoons and action films”Peter Tulley, Manager, ABC cinema

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Dear Club President,

As it is supposed to be the first Art’s Magazine for students we should pay a lot of attention to its format, including different aspects of our club life, which are as follows.

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Film Reviews

That appears to be known to everyone in town that our local cinema weekly presents such

entertaining and exciting films like ‘A New Moon’ or ‘Alone at Home’ which attract not onlycinema-lovers, but even those who only come to like this kind of art. It happens as theplots turn out to be catching and extraordinary. One can’t remain indifferent. That wouldbe reasonable enough to include substantial reviews.

Local Events

It goes without saying, local events concern everyone for no one can ever remainindifferent to the happenings or occasions which are easily available for the inhabitants of

our town, both young and not very. I believe the art exhibition in town Hall which takesplace from Monday till Friday (opening hours from 10 a.m. till 6 p.m.) will enjoy a greatpopularity with grown up art lovers. Kids with their parents are sure to be attracted to thecircus in Wigmore Park as the statistics proved judging by previous years.

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Everyday club activities should be undoubtedly reflected in the first issue of the Art’sMagazine. It will bring more participants and ideas as to improve our club work. Our

intention to see a musical in London is going to be great, I bet! Why not make a full reviewof it? More than that, the coming New Year celebrations with Santa Clause and Snow-Maiden (brought from Russia) is to be a great thing, the Russian samovar and later Troika(a three-horse open sleigh) riding. All that is worth finding reflection in the issue.

Interviews

I succeeded in contacting Hadley Norris who, indeed, is awfully pressed for time.Nevertheless, he was so kind as to promise to give us invitations to the Art Museum,

where he is a curator. As for Audrey Perham, an actor we had a very lively conversation inwhich he promised to come to our club after his tour of Europe. He seems to be a veryversatile man.

Conclusion

To sum it up, we should have columns with Film Reviews, Local Events, Club Activities,Interviews which will ensure the successful activity of our club.

Sincerely yours,

Vicky

Dear Club Editor,

According to the discussion held among the members of our Art club we agreed on somepoints to include in the first issue of our new monthly magazine “The Student’s Life”. Thetopics which might be interesting for students are as follows.

Reviews

As any well-established magazine “The Student’s life” should correspond to someeducational purpose and reveal some information from art and literature. Derek Turner,both a member of our Club and a bookshop assistant, is able to give the reviews on the

latest three art history books, which are in great demand of the students from the Collegeof Visual Arts.

According to the statistics 76% of people who go to the cinema are students. That is whywe include some reviews of the films which are on at our cinemas. It would be helpful for

them to be aware of the latest blockbusters and to know the time of the sessions and all

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possible discounts.

Activities and events

In order to enrich students’ moral and cultural values we present a program of attendingart exhibition in Town Hall on Saturday and circus in Wigmore Park on the next weekend,and a trip in London next month to enjoy the musical “Cats”.

Interviews

We can’t do anything without a gossip column or something of that kind, but we just do itin a proper way. Talking about a well known actor Audrey Perham, we include the

information about her busyness with preparations to the new play where she takes themain part.

Competitions

To wind up the first issue and motivate students to get the next edition we put some tasksat the end, such as writing compositions and different quizzes on the topic of the cartoonsand action films which would run on the holidays. Four students who would be mostcreative get tickets for the play with Audrey Perham that I managed to get from her while

asking for an interview.

Conclusion

So, to my mind we managed to include cultural and educational aspects, alongside withlocal events and even entertainments in our first issue. I hope it would be a success.

Regards,

Natalia Ilina

As for the grade of the proposal on the same topic mentioned above, I would s top on theband 3. Firstly, I didn’t manage to find the target reader (an editor or the president of the

club) there, I mean some formal marks. The next thing is that the information and ideasare not always logically organized as the writer always switches from one topic to another.But actually I think it is a good one as the structure on the whole is acceptable.

As far as the sample proposal is conserned, i would give 2 for it, since the information andideas are not to the point-“….an interview with Audrey Perham, the actor who lives near the college”, too muchinformation reviewed in the paragraph “ Reviews”. The range of structures and vocabularyis limited. The introduction and conclusion are too short and they don’t include all the

information needed. The general effect, prodused by this proposal is a bad one.

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Dear Mr. Brown,The first issue of an arts magazine for students is going to be printed out this month. So,

we should do our best and attract students for the magazine to be interesting and popular with them. The following topics are target to that aim.Film ReviewsI guess we should write about the films which are to appear on the screens. For example“Harry Potter and Deathly Hallows”, “Rapuncel”, “Chronicles of Narnia” and many others.More than that a special discount system should be mentioned.

Events and ActivitiesUnfortunately many events remain unheard and to rectify that we should provide studentswith information about exhibitions, concerts, meetings, etc. which will take place in thenearest future. It may be interesting to get to know about the opening of a circus inWigmore Park on 20th of December or about Art exhibition on 15th of December.

New Year CelebrationIt happens so that our magazine appears before winter holidays and that’s why weshouldn’t ignore New Year. We can write about preparations to it, gifts and various typesof leisure activities during that time.ConclusionThe first addition of a magazine is a very perturbing and serious moment and I hope it will

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be a success.Regards,Irene Gridasova

Dear Jack, As it is going to be the first edition of the magazine, undoubtedly, it should be animpressive one. I examined your ideas thoroughly, contacted with different specialists andI consider the following aspects the best to be covered in the magazine.

Book reviews As 80 % of the members of our Art’s club are fond of the history of literature, it would bewise, I suppose, to tell them about some books which are devoted to this subject . A goodfriend of mine, Derek Turner who is the owner of the Turner’s bookshop agreed to provideus with this information.

Film reviewsI should note, that 9 out of 10 students of our school stressed the fact that watching filmsis still one of the most popular pastimes, so it would be interesting for them to have freshinformation about what is on in the cinemas. Especialy it is actual now, when students aregoing to have their holidays. I’ve contacted the manager of ABC Cinema, Peter Tulley,

and got all the brief reviews of the cartoons and action films they are going t have.

CompetitionsIn order to make our issues more lively, we should include, I think, some competitivemoment, such as the contest of the best piece of poetry. Last year we have such a

contest, but among only senior students, and it was a success. Now in the journaleveryone can participate and win a prize, which, in its turn could be 4 tickets to thetheatre. I can provide them, as my friend, Audrey Turner, is an actor, and he is going tohave a performance next month, on 18 December.

Local Events

My classmates often complain that they don’t have enough information about theactivities, held in our area, that’s why the idea of including reviews on this topic is a wiseone. This month it is desirable to be about an exhibition in town Hall, since this event willbe held for the first time in our city and just for a week. So everyone should know about itnot to forget to visit.

ConclusionTo sum it up, all the ideas suggested by me are listed according to the opinion of thestudents I talked to. They are the potential readers of this magazine so if we rely on heir opinion , I believe, this issue will be a successful one.Yours sincerely,

Tatiana Afanasyeva


Dear Klaus

I'd like to write about some ideas, concerning the magazine and it's articles.

Reviews

It would be very nice if the readers could read through the reviews of the films, which canbe watched in our local cinema, for students to know what the film is about, whether tovisit the cinema or not.

To my mind, it is not necessary to publish books reviews since our students do not prefer

to read at all.

Events & Activities

I'd like to pay your attention to the exhibition in town Hall, which is going to present veryunique and extravagant pictures of the modern artists. More than that, there will bearranged an open circus in Wigmore Park, with free soft-drinks and many competitions,the winner of which will get a nice gift ( The children will be glad to visit such a place)

Interviews

I managed to talk to Audrey Perham, who is a friend of mine, but, she was not verytalkative as she was rehearsing for the next play, but, despite that she gave me four

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tickets for us to watch her playing. Recently I've got an e-mail from Hadley Norris - acurator of local art museum; he invites us in order to see the new art collection.

Conclusion

Taking into consideration all items, which have been mentioned, I believe, that the firstissue of our magazine should include: the film reviews, events and activities, which aregoing to take place and the interviews from the well-known people.

Sincerely yours,

Dima Korostylev

Dear Jack,

Very soon the first edition of our monthly arts magazine for students will be published. Andin order to make it popular and demanded we should include some interesting pieces of information. There are some of them below.

Film reviewsI suggest that it would be great PR operation to give the information about films in our magazine, as the majority of our students are keen on watching films. IT will be fruitful toput some information about Premier films which will be shown at our local cinemas.

Local activitiesTo my mind, it is of first importance that studets should be informed about the events andactivities which take place in our city. It will be interesting to know that December 17 artexhibition is going to be in Town Hall.Here our students can observe works of modern arts, moreover, here will be represented

the works of their contemporaries. In addition, very soon, exactly December 20, 3 p.m inWigmore Park there will occur the opening of a circus. Various performances with rareanimals, clowns will be presented there. I think, it's always great pleasure to relax in sucha way.

New Year activities

We should understand that our magazine will be published right before New Year and it isnecessary to put some information about the entertainment activities which will take placeduring winter holidays. What's more, It would be quite good to put horoscope and someparticular things about how it will be correct to celebrate New Year in 2011.

ConclusionThe first issue is the basis for the future of our magazine, because of it the presentation,illustration, information should be striking and informative. Everybody should findsomething interesting for him personally. And the topics mentioned above are rather suitable and eye-catching. The magazine should be a success.

Regards,Larisa

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Dear Mr Brown,

Since the first issue of a art magazine for students is to be published this month, weshould grab the students' attention making them as much interested in it as possible inorder for it to be popular and well-sold. Thus the contents of it shoul include the followingpoints.

Film Reviews

According to the statistics, the majourity of our students spend half of their free time in a

local cinema theatre,so it would be useful to write about the films going on there thismonth like "The Nutcracker and Mice King", "Chronicles of Narnia" or "Tron Legacy" and aspecial discount system for students.

Events and Activities

There are many interesting events taking place in our city which are really worthmentioning. For example,on December 12 the circus in Wigmore Park invites all guestsfor its new Christmas perfomance involving some guests from France and a special fire-

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show. Moreover, it would be a good idea to include a short circus quiz,the winner of whichwill be able to visit the perfomance free of charge. The will also be an art exhibition inTown Hall on 15th of December which is going to represent some joung modern artistswhich can be especcially interested for students.

New Year and Christmas Celebrations

The fact that our magazine will be released just before winter holidays makes it obvious

that there should be some infrormation conserning Christmas and New Year celebrationsvarying from the entertainment city during programm during the holidays to the possiblekinds of gifts and special dishes.

Conclusion

As the first magazine issue tends to define the whole its future,it should be especiallyinteresting, provoking and diverse to attract as many readers as possible and to makethem look forward for the next issue as well thus the topics described above will be asuccess with the readers.

Regards,

Olga Chekhovskaya

Dear Jack,

This month the first issue of an arts magazine for students is going to be released. As it isthe first edition, we need to draw students’ attention and make the magazine popular, so

some interesting and fascinating topics should be covered. They are as follows.

Film ReviewsI think it would be a great idea to include the information about films which are on thismonth. The majority of students will get interested, as several good and long expectedmovies were released this week. Our local movie theatre has in its repertoire such films as

‘Harry Potter and Deathly Hallows’ and the ‘Chronicles of Narnia’. Also we should tellabout discounts for students (Monday-Friday10 a.m – 5 p.m. all films except first nights at a discount of 50% for students).

Local EventsIt’s obvious that students should be aware of different activities which are going to takeplace this month. I’ve searched through the Internet and found out that December 17 artexhibition is going to be in Town Hall. I suppose many students will find it both informativeand interesting, as famous and new unknown artists will exhibit their masterpieces there.That’s why students can combine business and pleasure – to have a good time and to buy

a painting if they want to. One more event which can awake interest is the opening of acircus in Wigmore Park (December 20, 3 p.m). There an entertaining show is going totake place, visitors will be able to win prizes, and also they have discounts for students.

New Year Celebration

As our magazine is going to be released just before New Year’s holidays, I think it wouldbe necessary to include the information on this topic. Some ideas about how to spendthese holidays, what dishes can be cooked, how to decorate houses. And by all means inthis rubric we should invite students to our New Year’s party (December 27, 7 p.m.,assembly hall)

ConclusionsThe first issue is the most important one, as the future of the magazine depends on it.That’s why the material and the way it is presented should be perfect. I think the topicsmentioned above will be the most suitable ones and will grab reader’s attention.Regards,

Ekaterina Bukhalova

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Proposal for Improving the Library Facilities

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The library at our international college is constantly visited by students, who may need avarious kind of information in the field they major and also in any other possible spherethey are interested in. But I believe, some improvements should be made which are asfollows.

Opening hours

We should bear in mind that the opening hours should suit every student’s needs. I meanthe time-table differs from course to course, but the available time is the same for everyone. So, my mind is that the working hours should be flexible. Once I happened tocome after 6 a.m. and found the door closed and, as a result, I failed to get the material.

Work space

As far as the working space is concerned, the reading hall provides enough space for itsreaders. Nevertheless as everywhere there can be the so-called ‘rush hour’ when thereading-hall is overcrowded. I suggest extra space should be built to improve the libraryfacilities.

Resources

The resources our library contains are up-to-date, generally speaking. But the number of those who are able to use the most recent technologies like laptops, the Internet and other modern electronic equipment is increasing. Consequently, the library fund needsenriching.

Conclusion

Taking all the mentioned above into consideration, we can conclude that in spite of seemingly positive state of things, the library, being may be the most important sport togain knowledge, it needs special care and attention. In other words, it must be wellfinanced.

Faithfully yours,

Victoria Bagrayeva

Proposal on improving of library facilities

Dear Ms. Johnson,

To keep a first-rate library is a significant thing for a university, because it gives the

students an opportunity to improve their skills of the future careers. Particularly nowadayswhen they are needed to be made better. They are as follows.

Opening hours

I should taken notice of students’ need in time when they are unable to do their homework properly since the opening hours do not let them do that. Once I got in such a

situation and realized that this problem really exists. So it is felt that the working day for

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the library should be increased for 3 or even 3 hours a day.

Work space

Our library is a big one but there is not enough space for work still. A great quantity of students spends hours reading, looking for information, searching some material. Thus

and so it would be better to assign one more room for working in the library.

Resources

All the materials kept are marked by the students as out –of-date ones, that’s why it wouldbe desirable to obtain new modern ones. In order to add even more, a special actionamong the students can be held – each of them can bring to the library one book of their own.

To conclude the renewal and improvement of the library will help the students tocorrespond to the modern standards of education. I am sure that it is easier to do such athing in well-equipped place with friendly atmosphere.

Proposal for improving the library

Introduction

First of all, I'd like to say, that library is one of the necessary thing in the college and, of course, it should be somehow enriched.

Things to be developed and improved

Dear Ms Johnson, I think, that those components, which you have written and supposethem to be prior, are too short, because I concern them to be not enough. I assent theidea of giving opening hours for students to study, I believe, that is a good thing, when wecan come and learn something at any time we want, much work space is also fine, we,

then, can not overcrowd and mess with each other.

Resources

Frankly speaking, I do not think, that books and videos can really help the library, as manystudents and I consider them to be dull and old-fashioned. I also do not understand whatdid you mean, mentioning " other resources " I do not believe, that glamorous magazinescan enrich our library. The best thing which can help in improving is modern technologies,thus IT is the point since plenty of us use it and like it.

Recommendations

I would advise you to involve as many IT as possible: computers, laptops at each workingplace, so the students will not have to wait their turn to use it, e-books since they arerather easy in use and we can have all the material in one book, and things of that kind.

Conclusion

Dear Ms Johnson, I hope you will take my notes and recommendations into account sinceI'm sure, that they will make our library modern, useful and popular place to visit.

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Dima Korostylev

Dear Ms Johnson,

Few colleges can offer such a library with a large choice of books and other resources.Though in order to be up to standard in future some facilities should be improved. Theyare as follows.

Work spaceThough the library is rather large, there are not enough working places. Students from allthe departments often need to spend much time in the library reading up for their examsor searching for some material for writing papers. Therefore, I suppose, it would be better to have more reading halls.

Operating scheduleThe library is open from 11 a.m. till 5 p.m. and full-time students of our college practicallyhave very little time to spend in the library, as studies last till 3 or 4 p.m. Moreover thelibrary doesn’t work on weekends. Probably it would have been better if it works in theevening also and at least on Saturdays.

ResourcesSpeaking about video collection, it should be said that the library has a wide selection of video resources but they should be updated, as the majority of students think manyfeature films, documentaries went out of date and the information there is often irrelevant

to suit educational purposes. Also, I would like to mention that the library lacks for audioresources. I think they would be extremely useful for students from the department of foreign languages.

Our library is a very important source of information and resources for students, that’s whysome improvements are necessary to help students show better results in studies and in

doing their homework.

Yours faithfully,Ekaterina Bukhalova.


Proposal on improving of library facilitiesDear Ms. Johnson,

it is very important for the university to keep its library work on the highest level, since itenables our students to improve their self-studying skills. Especially, now, when there are

some facilities to be improved. They are as follows.

Opening hoursI should note that not once I heard from the students of our college that very often they failsome tasks of theirs because of the short opening hours of the library. I am not anexception, a week ago I faced this problem too. In such a way, it would be desirable for

the library to work more for 2 or 3 hours a day approximately.

Work spaceIn terms of the places where the students can fulfill their tasks in the library, here theshortage of them can be noted. And this make students wait for half an hour or even anhour to take a sit to work. I suppose, that an appropriate way out of this situation could be

joining one more room to the space of all the library, which is used now for keeping sportequipment.

Resources All the materials kept are marked by the students as out –of-date ones, that’s why it would

be desirable to obtain new modern ones. In order to add even more, a special actionamong the students can be held – each of them can bring to the library one book of their own.

All in all, the improvement of the facilities of the library are certainly to influence our students success in studying. And it will be both pleasant and useful for them to work in a

new atmosphere.


Report on the Sports ClubDear Dr Parker,

The report is targeted at providing the informarion about the Sports Club at anInternational College. It draws on the opinion expressed by the students who attended thisclub.Positive points

According to the stastics of the attendance of this club which is about 80%, it can be said



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that the club is popular among the students and they appreciate a possibility of doingsport exercises of various kinds like squash, badminton or fitness in this right place.Points to be improvedIt should be mentioned that not everything is perfect in this place and there are somethings the improvement of which can make the club more popular and in such a way give

benefits to all the college.First, the students mentioned that after 3 or 4-hour training they have to come backdirectly to the changing room without drinking some water or having a rest in a specialroom. So, it would be desirable to have a special place for this, and it could be the room inwhich all the equipment is held, that needs a thorough repairement. Then 8 out of ten

student stated that the days convinient for them to come in the club are weekends, so thechanging of the timetable can attract more visitors. And with this changing the forming of special groups can be profitable- it will unite people according to their prefernces. And atlast, 10 out of 10 students called the showers the weak point of our club, since they arealways out of order, so new ones could solve this problem.Conclusion

All in all, the club has an average grade among the students, but the position could beobtainedwith some changes made that need finacial investing.

Careers Conference Report

The report is intended to give information on Careers Conference held in Vancouver Hall12- 13 November and which presented over 100 jobs. It draws on the students opinionwho took part in this Conference.Positive points

According to the made survey it was found that the majority of the students who attended

this conference marked it as a great one, pointing out at the good level of discussions onwide range of careers. All the information presented tended to be relevant.Points to work on and recommendations.Despite all the success of the event, it has its weak points. Though one had a possibility tohave advice from an expert at any time, the number of them was not enough to satisfy allthe interest of the participants of the conference. In such a way, many students didn’t

manage to have an answer to their question.Next time the conference held, it would be desirable to have more specialists availableduring all the event.One more drawback which was noted by the students is that the jobs offered , were aimedat science students primarily. And the language and history ones were paid less attentionso it would be advisable to include more varied information that can be interesting and

useful for all the participants.ConclusionsTo sum it up, the success of the Careers conference can not be exaggerated and this factmakes us realize the necessity of holding this event annually. Though some weak pointscan be observed , they are sure to be get read off and next time we can witness an

improved version of the conference which can satisfy all the needs of career orientedstudents.


Report on a Two-Day Careers Conference.

The aim of the report is to present information on career’s conference held in Vancouver Hall from Friday till Sunday. It is based on a survey carried out among students whoparticipated in it.

Positive Points

It appears that the majority of the students, who attended the conference pointed out thatthe exhibition was great with it’s over than 100 jobs, which extremely encouragedstudents. Some of the talks were both informative and substantial. It turned out that therewas a wide range of careers to follow and get prepared already at college. Sometimes thetalks were challenging and animated.

Points to Work and Recommendations

According to some students’ opinions there were not enough people able to answer

questions that were asked. Besides, some participants wished to have more expertsavailable to give proper pieces of advice on the items which are of interest.

As some of the students remarked, the Careers Conference seemed to be beneficial for science students than language or history students. The choice of careers was muchwider.



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Conclusions

To summarize all the mentioned above the conference is sure to be a success. Suchevents should be arranged yearly. Young specialists and experts should be provided withan opportunity of having talks about perspectives of future employment.

Dear Mr. Muller,

The aim of this report is to provide the students of our college in New Zealand with someuseful information. The results of this report are based on the students' views andopinions.

Positive Points

To begin with, this Sport Club is going to include: Badminton, Squash, Climbing Wall,Fitness Room, where all the students could cure their health and become stronger, and,the last, but not the least - Social Events, this seems to be a good idea since plenty of

students can get new fruitful acquaintances, friendly talks and even have a great time.

Points to be improved

Despite the fact, that the Sport Club is tended to be well-organized and, as it was said

earlier, have lots of entertaining and bodybuilding things, the Club, as the questionnairesays, has some drawbacks: It, practically, has no place, where students and attendantscould have some drinks and relax, the fitness room is often overcrowded, showers, asstudents say, always broken, and it is thought to be not a very good thing and one morematter is, that students can attend it only at weekends.There is one more thing, which isworth mentioning - The Club needs to have organized groups since it is very convenient

and funny to train with your friends.

Conclusions

We do believe, that our Sports Club needs some capital, which could make it morepresentable, bigger and, also, it could help us to provide our club with some new

machines, showers, places to relax and more.


Vicky Bagraeva

Dear Mr. Parker,

The report is aimed at providing essential information about the available activities in theSports Club of the International College in New Zealand which is open from Monday toFriday at 5p.m- 10p.m. It presents the result of a survey made among the students who

were questioned about the conditions for taking part in sport activities and whatimprovements could be made.

Positive points.

To start with, it should be pointed out that all sport lovers appreciate the kinds of sports

provided at our educational establishment. It helps to be physically fit and remain healthy.It’s a favorable way to arrange leisure time and mingle with people and even find newfriends. The variety of sport activities is large enough to suit any taste. Alongside withtraining in the fitness room lots of students came to like climbing wall, squash andbadminton. Social events are extremely popular with sport lovers.

Points to be Improved.

On the other hand, the majority of students have agreed there are rather many problemsin the club concerning it’s equipment first of all. Some showers need repairing, that’s whythere is sometimes no hot water or there were cases when they went out of order. In

addition, there is no room for having a drink and relaxation. As a result students feelthirsty and not relaxed. What is more-the fitness room needs rearranging as it is alwaysovercrowded and there is no air to breath! There were suggestions to change thetimetable, including weekends for sport training. Consequently, all the above-mentionedimprovements can be made with your financial help.

Conclusions.

All in all our sport club enjoys a great popularity and it seems important to solve theproblem of financial help to improve the situation we have now. We hope to receivesupport on your part.



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By Vicky Bagraeva

Dear Dr Parker,

This report is aimed to provide information on the Sports Club at our international collegein New Zealand. It is based on the results of a survey carried out among the students whoattend it.

Good pointsIt was found that the majority of students who attend the Sports Club enjoy it as we have awide range of various activities. Climbing wall and squash are particularly popular amongstudents. Some of them, especially females who are fond of aerobics, prefer the fitnessroom. Regular social events like sports competitions between faculties of our college and

convenient operating schedule (Mon – Fri 5p.m. – 10 p.m.) make our Sports clubattractive in general. Though, some students mentioned that it would have been better if we worked on weekends also.

Points to be improvedIt appeared that though our Sports Club is rather big, nevertheless there is not enough

space as the number of students, who want to attend the club, is constantly increasing,and as a result the fitness room is always overcrowded. Therefore it would be better tohave more such rooms and recreation places, where students can have a drink or relax,are also necessary.Curiously enough, but the showers are constantly broken and it is recommended to have

new bathroom equipment in the shower rooms. Besides we need to provide organizedclasses, as it appeared that training in a group motivate students.

ConclusionsOur club is highly appreciated by students as it is a useful place to spend free time. But if more money were contributed from the college, this could be used to improve its

conditions and thus attract more people and inspire them to be keen on sports and keepfit.


Dear Mr. Churchill,

The report is intended to provide information about the Sports Club at an internationalcollege in New Zealand. It is based on the views of the students who were asked to give

their ideas for improvement the Club.

It appears that almost 150 students are regular customers of that place and they are reallyhappy to attend the Club and not to waste free time. The number of the training devicesgiven allows to work on diverse group of muscles which does nothing but satisfy everyattender.

It was felt still that organization was not properly thought over, as the amount of attenders

is going up and the desires are getting exacting. It was cleared up that there was noenough room for having a rest after a hard training, the bathroom equipment is constantlybreaking down, the time for attending should be increased and it was required to havesome trainers for beginners.

One solution may be to invest more capital into this undertaking in order to make the Club

correspond to the increased needs of the attenders and these money will come back withtriple profit.

To conclude, it is everyone’s pleasure to have such a useful place to spend free time andif it is decided to pay more attention to the Club and to improve it in some aspects the

attenders’ gratitude will be enormous one.

By Dmitry Yesipov

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Report on the Sports Club

Dear Mr Parker,

This report is intended to provide information on the Sports Club working on Monday-Friday at an international college in New Zealand. It draws on the results of a survey

carried out among the students who attend it.

Good points.

According to the majority of the students attending the club, it appears to provide a wide

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range of facilities varying from sport activities in the fitness room to different games likebadminton or squash. The climbing wall and a convinient timetable was especiallyappreciated by the students although some of them commented that it would be better for the club to be work on weekends as well.

Points to change and recommendations

It was found out that there are constantly too many people in the fitness room and it isrecommended to open some more rooms of this kind as well as the place for relaxing andhaving a drink. So it may be useful to give some money for the club for this in order to

involve more students and develop the idea of keeping a healthy way of life on the onehand, and to make their conditions more comfortable and thus encourage their wish to goinfo sports.

Strangely, the showers tend to be always broken and it would be quite advisable to offer some money for either their reparement or buying the new ones since it is obvious that in

each fitness centre or a sport club there should be a working shower.

Conclusions

If more money was availiable,this could be used to provide organised classes aswellwhich could make the club more interesting. To sum up, the Sports Club is quite

popular among the students though it is recommended for the college to invest somemoney for serious improvements.

I'm sorry, guys, I gave you the topic of the report for tomorrow only now and in thecomments, since, unfortunately, I failed to add it to the attachments as well as to this pagebecause of my poor internet connection. The deadline then will be tomorrow (December,3)9 a.m. Sorry again!:-)

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You are the secretary of the Sports Club at an international college in New Zealand. Theclub would like to make some improvements and needs financial help from the college.The college Principal, Dr Parker, has asked you to write a report on the club. Some of thestudents have given you their views.Read the advertisement for the club and comments from the students below. Then, using

the information appropriately, write a report for the Principal, suggesting what changesyou would like to make and why and persuading him to contribute some money towardsthese changes.

The advertisement for Riverdale College Sports Club:Badminton

SquashClimbing WallFitness RoomSocial EventsMon – Fri 5p.m. – 10 p.m.Students’ comments:

- Nowhere to have a drink, to relax- Fitness room always overcrowded- Showers always broken- I can only come at weekends- Organised classes?

Now write your report for the Principal, as outlined above. You should use your own wordsas far as possible.

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The aim of this report is to provide information concerning the Careers Conference held atVancouver Hall on Friday-Sunday (29-31 November). It is based on the results of a surveycarried out among the students who attended.

Good points

The majority of the 80 students who attended the conference tend to consider it bothuseful and informative, and they would like to see it repeated. The exhibition representingover 100 different jobs appeared to be excellent covering various fields of work ranging

from building and construction up to medicine and industry. The talks on possible careerswere also appreciated, on the whole, though some of them were found out to be a bituseless for humanitarian students.

Points to develop and recommendations

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It was found out that in spite of the presence of avaluable experts there were not enoughof them to answer all the questions and give advice.

Thus it is recommended that the stuff working at the exhibition is taken and well-informed

at least 3 weeks before the event in future so that everything runs without any hesitationand mess. Careers talks should be well-thought as well in order to get the audienceinterested in each presentation.

Surprisingly, the conference appeared to be better for science students than humanitarian

ones as the range of careers was represented mainly by the spheres of industry andscience. One solution may be to involve more presentation connected with other spheres.

Conclusions

In case of more money given, this could be used for students to make presentations of

their achievements to increase their chances of applying to a better job.

However, in short, the Careers Conference was a great success and extremely useful.


This report is intended to provide useful information about the Career Conference holdthat week from Friday to Sunday. It is based on the results of the discussion among thestudents who managed to present that conference at Vancouver Hall.

Positive points

The majority of our students about 20 people who attended the Conference can admit thatit was both interesting and informative, especially the demonstration of different kinds of

jobs, which were over 100. According to the head of our delegation, particularly important

for the students was the opportunity to discuss any problem questions with the expertsfrom the sphere, where student would probably work.

Points to work on and recommendations

Alongside with many positive aspects, still there are things to work on. It is recommended

that two days were not actually enough for such an event as Career Conference. Therewere so many students that even experts were not enough to answer all the studentquestions.

It would be advisable to invite more experts both from Natural sciences and from

humanities as that conference was a great success for science students.

Conclusion

In short, that Conference was very helpful for all the students especially for graduators,where they managed to solve many problems concerning their future employment.

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Report on Career Conference

The aim of this report is to provide information on the career conference held at thecollege on 19 December. It is found on the results of the review carried out among thestudents who presented at it.

Positive points.

It appears that almost 200 students who attended the conference found it both interestingand informative and that they would be eager to present at such an event again. The

selection of the exhibits chosen and careers discussed was an appropriate one. Sometalks were rather cognitive and useful for the person who needed such information for their future career.

Points to be improved and recommendations.

It was felt that organization was not properly thought over and it is recommended that theorganizers invite more experts in the problem questions raised during the conference.Such specialist should be properly prepared to answer any issue no matter how difficult it

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could be.

Some of the discussions were devoted to the subjects which did not correspond to therange of the students invited. One solution may be to study the classes of the guestswhich were to attend beforehand and adjust the possible list of desired topics.

Conclusions.

In short, if resources were available for such an event in future, this could be very usefulto conduct a similar event. It would be also helpful to add a multimedia element withphotos and videos files to every presentation. But in spite of some shortcomings theconference was a success and quite usable.

by Irene GridasovaReport on the Careers Conference

This report describes the 2-day Careers Conference held at the Vancouver Hall. It isbased on the opinions of the students who have attended it.

Positive pointsIt seems that all the students found it very useful and informative and they recon they willnot loose an opportunity to come there once again. More than 100 careers were exhibitedthere and everyone also could talk to a real specialist in the area he/she was interested in.

more than that, 2 days were give to us to be able to cover it all.

Some negative moments and recommendationsPredictably this conference was more helpful to the students of scientific faculties than toothers. Furthermore, there were not enough people to answer the students' questions. Of course, it should be taken into consideration, that the interest of every single student

should be satisfied.

ConclusionOn balance, the conference should attract more students and expand the quantity of thesuggested jobs. All in all, the conference was useful and successful.

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Report on two-day Careers Conference

The aim of this report is to provide information about a two-day Careers Conference,

which was held at the Vancouver Hall. It draws on the students' opinion who presentedthere.

AdvantagesIt appears that the majority of the students found this conference great. It was informativeand extremely instructive for them. On the whole it was exhibited over 100 various jobs,

there was a talk on wide range of careers. What is more, the experts were alwaysavailable to give advice.

Disadvantages and recommendationsThough the conference tended to be rich in discussions and also impressive, there weresome drawbacks, which are necessary to be improved.

The problem was that not every person who were to answer the students' questions waseager to cope with it. Factually, some students such as linguist and history ones, werebored, as this conference was mostly for science students.So it would be advisable for the organisers to make it useful for the students of differentspecializations.

ConclusionsTo summarize, Career Conderence was a success. Inspite of some bad points.Undoubtedly, It should be held every year and be available for all students.

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Report on Career Conference

This report is aimed to provide information on a two-day Career Conference held inVancouver Hall on 26 – 27th November. It is based on the results of the discussion amongstudents who attended.

Positive points.It was found that the majority of students, who attended the Conference considered it tobe both informative and interesting. The exhibition of different jobs (over a hundred) wasimpressive. Talks on wide range of careers were also of great interest, on the whole. Also

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almost all the students who visited thought it was a great idea that experts in differentspheres were available to ask questions and give advice.

Points to be improved and recommendations.It appeared that though rich of content talks on various careers were rather informative in

general, some of them turned out to be too long, and thus some students felt bored.Besides it was evident that because of the lack of time not all questions were answered.The organizers should have given more time for an audience’ questions or at least morespecialists should have been responsible for this.Though the Conference included a great deal of information about different kinds of job,

they spoke little about the possibilities for students of language or history departments.The majority of variants were useful for science students.

Conclusions.If more information for students of humanities were available, it could have attracted morepeople and made it more helpful for the whole audience.

However, Careers Conference was extremely useful, a lot of new things and ideas werelearnt there and it would be great to attend this event next year.

Career Conference Report

The aim of this report is to describe and reveal the content of the past conference. It isbased on the results of the information, provided by the students, who attended this veryconference.

Positive points

It seemed that almost all of the students liked the conference and found it rather informative, as many talks were good and some of the students, perhaps, found thecommunication fruitful. Besides that, the exhibition was great, lots of things were observedand it, probably, made all the attendants feel good.

Points to work out and recommendations

Despite the fact, that the exhibition was exciting and the communication was informative,the conference could be arranged more successfully, some things should be done better or even changed at all, for example, even the fact, that some talks were good, there could

be found some persons who did not answer the questions. Definitely, the exhibition was asuccess, but still, it was found that, the conference was aimed to inform and impressscience students, than language, history or musicians.

Conclusions

In short, if such a conference is to be held one more time, it might be attended by talkativeand open-minded people, and as it is recommended, the conference should be accessibleand understandable for every type of students, but, on the whole, the conference was asuccess.

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