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I took the GMAT twice and scored 60 each time I did put a lot of time in it the first timetoo much actually Being a non‐nativespeaker and having not written a damn essay (of any kind) in many many years I was very scared of the AWA So I went throughevery guide that I could find and wrote nearly 25‐30 essays Even had a friend grade them for mePathetic huh
Anyway for my second time I just looked over my templates I created and wrote one of each the day before test just to refreshmy memory on faster typing without making too many typos
So here it isEnjoy and please do not blame me if the 60 percentile goes down to 80 soon
AWA GUIDEby Chineseburned
1 General Structure
Intro ‐ Restate argument point out flaws or state intention to discuss them below1st Para ‐ First2nd Para ‐ SecondIn addition3rd Para ‐ ThirdFinallyConclusion ‐ The argument is flawedweakunconvincing because of the above ‐mentionedUltimately the argument can bestrengthened ifby
2 Structural Word (should be all over the essays)
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1 Supporting examples ‐ for example to illustrate for instance because specifically2 Additional support ‐ furthermore in addition similarly just as also as a result moreover3 Importance ‐ surely truly undoubtedly clearly in fact most importantly4 Contrast ‐ on the contrary yet despite rather instead however although while5 Decide against ‐ one cannot deny that it could be argued that granted admittedly6 Ying‐yang ‐ on the one handon the other hand7 Concluding ‐ therefore in summary consequently hence in conclusion ultimately in closing
3 Templates
IntroThe argument claims that (restate)Stated in this way the argument a) manipulates facts and conveys a distorted view of the situationb) reveals examples of leap of faith poor reasoning and ill‐defined terminologyc) fails to mention several key factors on the basis of which it could be evaluatedThe conclusion of the argument relies on assumptions for which there is no clear evidence Hence the argument isweakunconvincing and has several flaws
1st ParaFirst the argument readily assumes thatThis statement is a stretchFor exampleClearlyThe argument could have been much clearer if it explicitly stated that
2nd ParaSecond the argument claims thatThis is again a very weak and unsupported claim as the argument does not demonstrate any correlation betweenandTo illustrateWhileHoweverindeedIn fact it is not at all clearratherIf the argument had provided evidence thatthen the argument would have been a lot more convincing
3rd ParaFinally(pose some questions for the argument)Without convincing answers to these questions one is left with the impression that theclaim is more of a wishful thinking rather than substantive evidence
ConclusionIn conclusion the argument is flawed for the above‐mentioned reasons and is therefore unconvincing It could be considerablystrengthened if the author clearly mentioned all the relevant factsIn order to assess the merits of a certain situationdecision it is essential to have full knowledge of all contributing factors In thisparticular caseWithout this information the argument remains unsubstantiated and open to debate
4 Going from the templates to full‐fledged essays
ESSAY QUESTION The following appeared in the editorial section of a national news magazine[b]
The rating system for electronic games is similar to the movie rating system in that it provides consumers with a quick referenceso that they can determine if the subject matter and contents are appropriate This electronic game rating system is not workingbecause it is self regulated and the fines for violating the rating system are nominal As a result an independent body shouldoversee the game industry and companies that knowingly violate the rating system should be prohibited from releasing a gamefor two years
Discuss how well reasoned you find this argument Point out flaws in the arguments logic and analyze the arguments underlyingassumptions In addition evaluate how supporting evidence is used and what evidence might counter the arguments conclusionYou may also discuss what additional evidence could be used to strengthen the argument or what changes would make theargument more logically sound
YOUR RESPONSE
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The argument claims that the electronic games rating system although similar to the movie rating system is notworking because it is self regulated and violation fines are nominal Hence the gaming rating system should beoverseen by an independent body Stated in this way the argument fails to mention several key factors on the basis ofwhich it could be evaluated The conclusion relies on assumptions for which there is no clear evidence Therefore theargument is rather weak unconvincing and has several flaws
First the argument readily assumes that because the electronic game rating system is self regulated it is not workingwell This statement is a stretch and not substantiated in any way There are numerous examples in other areas ofbusiness or commerce where the entities are self regulated and rather successful For instance FIA the Formula1racing organization is self regulated Yet the sport is very popular and successful drawing millions of spectatorsaround the world each year Tickets are rather expensive races are shown on pay‑per‑view and nearly all drivers arepaid very well Another example is the paralleled movie rating system that the argument mentions The author fails toclarify whether it is working well but it is clear that the movie rating system is pretty well received by people whooften base their decisions to go see a movie with kids or not on the movie rating It has never been a case whensomeone would feel cheated by the movie rating and express disappointment afterwards Since the movie ratingsystem is also self regulated it follows that this regulatory method is working pretty well and it is not obvious how itcan be the reason for the poor electronic game rating system The argument would have been much clearer if itexplicitly gave examples of how the self regulatory system led to bad ratings and customer dissatisfaction
Second the argument claims that any violation fees for bad electronic game ratings are nominal It thus suggests thatthis is yet another reason for the rating system not working This is again a very weak and unsupported claim as theargument does not demonstrate any correlation between the monetary amount of the fines and the quality of theelectronic game rating system In fact the argument does not even draw a parallel with the mentioned movie ratingsystem and its violation fines If any such correlation had been shown for the movie rating system which supposedlyworks well then the author would have sounded a bit more convincing In addition if the argument provided evidencethat low violation fines lead to electronic game manufacturers to ignore any regulations with respect to the game
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rating system the argument could have been strengthened even further
Finally the argument concludes that an independent body should oversee the game industry and companies thatviolate the rating system should be punished From this statement again it is not at all clear how an independentregulatory body can do a better job than a self regulated one Without supporting evidence and examples from otherbusinesses where independent regulatory bodies have done a great job one is left with the impression that the claimis more of a wishful thinking rather than substantive evidence As a result this conclusion has no legs to stand on
In summary the argument is flawed and therefore unconvincing It could be considerably strengthened if the authorclearly mentioned all the relevant facts In order to assess the merits of a certain situation it is essential to have fullknowledge of all contributing factors
5 Final tips
During the tutorial type in a few sentences in the mock essay window to get used to the keyboardAgain during the tutorial jot down on your notebook the basic structure of your essays or the opening sentences in case youget too nervous and forget them when the clock starts tickingWrite as much as you can Try to write at least 500 words per essayAlways have the e‐rater in mind as your potential reviewer Remember that the human rater will make every effort to gradejust like the e‐rater In that sense keep your structure and volume in mind over actual qualitycontentBe careful of spelling mistakes Double check words that you normally know you misspell (eg exercise) Try to finish 2‐3minutes before time is up so you can slowly re‐read your essay for the purposes of spell checking Do not reorganizedeletesentencesparagraphs with less than 2 min leftNo matter how great you thought your essays went try to stay humble and focused ‐ remember this was just a warm‐up andthe real stuff hasnt started yet
Good luck
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Great stuff chineseburned much obligedIf you have any additional material that might be useful kindly post italthough your guide looks sufficient +1
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to add to chineseburn veritas tells you in paragraph 5 (before conclusion and after 3rd point) to add what would have made thearguement issues stronger (analyze the arguement) or to criticize your own arguement (issues question) They say to write 6paragraphs
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to add to chineseburn veritas tells you in paragraph 5 (before conclusion and after 3rd point) to add what wouldhave made the arguement issues stronger (analyze the arguement) or to criticize your own arguement (issuesquestion) They say to write 6 paragraphs
I include this in the conclusions 5 or 6 paragraphs doesnt matter as long as the word count is there _________________Chinese Democracy is misunderstoodat your nearest BestBuy
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Thanks a lot 4 ur efforts G8 job +1 from me
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+1 with my 30 AWA is very useful Well done Chineseburned if you have more pls post this Well appreciate this exciting
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Here is an essay I wrote for a PR Test ‐ Graded a 60 (normally they grade harder than real thing)
Prompt ldquoThe autonomy of any country is based on the strength of its borders if the number of illegal immigrants entering acountry cannot be checked both its economy and national identity are endangered Because illegal immigrants pose such threatsevery effort must be made to return them to their country of originrdquo
Assignment Discuss how well‐reasoned you find this argument In your discussion be sure to analyze the line of reasoning and theuse of evidence in the argument For example you may need to consider what questionable assumptions underlie the thinking andwhat alternative explanations or counterexamples might weaken the conclusion You can also discuss what sort of evidence wouldstrengthen or refute the argument what changes in the argument would make it more logically sound and what if anythingwould help you better evaluate its conclusion
This argument relies heavily on unverified assumptions and has a very extreme conclusion The author fails to make logicalconnections between the evidence provided and the conclusion that all illegal aliens must be returned to their country of origin
The first problem with the argument is that it suffers from multiple unsubstantiated claims The first evidence that is given tosupport the extreme conclusion is that the autonomy of any country is based on the strength of its borders This statement is alsoextreme because it infers that every countries autonomy could be ranked by the strength of its borders There are many Europeancountries that have very little strength exerted at the borders but still maintain autonomy The author should clarify thisstatement by grouping countries together or using a more vague statement that would include most countries but not all
The next statement in the argument is conditional phrase stating that the more illegal immigrants that enter a country the worseoff the economy and national identity will be While this statement might be true for some countries it is certainly not true for allcountries The very foundation of early US society was based on immigrant labor and culture that brought from over the sea Thereare still many countries whose economy is heavily dependent on immigrant labor Even though many economist feel this statementis true in the US today most would disagree that this statement is true of all countries
The final portion of the authors argument is the conclusion The conclusion states that the because of disadvantages mentionedearlier all illegal immigrants must be returned to their country of origin Although this statement might appear to be a logicalconclusion of this extreme argument it fails to take extra information into account The author doesnt give any indication on howextreme these problems will be or how costly it will be to return the amount of illegal aliens to their home country What if thecost to the economy was half the amount that it would cost to send all of the immigrants back to their country of origin Theauthor could use some monetary figures to prove that some savings would be incurred if all illegal immigrants were deported
In conclusion the argument suffers from logical flaws and makes an extreme conclusion based on unproven assumptions Theaddition of hard examples and connections between the statements would prove to strengthen the argument
This just shows you how you dont have to write great to get a good score
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Wow Chineseburned this makes the AWA much easier to attack +5Much obliged
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to add to chineseburn veritas tells you in paragraph 5 (before conclusion and after 3rd point) to add what wouldhave made the arguement issues stronger (analyze the arguement) or to criticize your own arguement (issuesquestion) They say to write 6 paragraphs
I used verita for the essays tooIn fact I was most nervous about the AWAs then anything elseI skipped paragraph 5 in the verita guide since the it leaves me too little time to proof readAnyways just received my score today and got a 55 good enough
Id say probably the only good thing verita guide for is the AWA _________________明日やろうばかやろう
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Verry useful post I hope that it will help me to improve my 45 score You must be rewarded Kudos
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Extremely helpful
However just wanted to note that 500 words is quite a bit I think 450 words is still pretty good (enough to get a 60)
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Thank You chineseburned +1 (unfortunately the kudos feature is turned off for some reason) _________________You have to find it No one else can find it for you ‐ Bjorn Borg
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The only addendum I would add here is that you do not necessarily need to make 3 points I made 2 points on an essay and still gota 6 If you dont make 3 points though make sure you write a lot about the 2 points Word count is important i think
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Thanks mate The structure part of your guide was very helpful
I didnt read past section 3 and it was good enough to take me from a 45 in late 2003 to a 60 a few days ago (Im surprised theychurned out a score that fast) Unfortunately that is only an 87 now
My conclusion paragraphs were very short too and my intros werent that long either My three body paragraphs were very longthough Therefore if I have anything to add to this for other test takers it is literally restate the argumentissue and take aposition and move on Dont bother with fluff and save that for the body as that seems to be what they are looking for Same withthe conclusion A couple sentences seems to suffice (ie dont restate anything just say for the reasons stated above)
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1 Supporting examples ‐ for example to illustrate for instance because specifically2 Additional support ‐ furthermore in addition similarly just as also as a result moreover3 Importance ‐ surely truly undoubtedly clearly in fact most importantly4 Contrast ‐ on the contrary yet despite rather instead however although while5 Decide against ‐ one cannot deny that it could be argued that granted admittedly6 Ying‐yang ‐ on the one handon the other hand7 Concluding ‐ therefore in summary consequently hence in conclusion ultimately in closing
3 Templates
IntroThe argument claims that (restate)Stated in this way the argument a) manipulates facts and conveys a distorted view of the situationb) reveals examples of leap of faith poor reasoning and ill‐defined terminologyc) fails to mention several key factors on the basis of which it could be evaluatedThe conclusion of the argument relies on assumptions for which there is no clear evidence Hence the argument isweakunconvincing and has several flaws
1st ParaFirst the argument readily assumes thatThis statement is a stretchFor exampleClearlyThe argument could have been much clearer if it explicitly stated that
2nd ParaSecond the argument claims thatThis is again a very weak and unsupported claim as the argument does not demonstrate any correlation betweenandTo illustrateWhileHoweverindeedIn fact it is not at all clearratherIf the argument had provided evidence thatthen the argument would have been a lot more convincing
3rd ParaFinally(pose some questions for the argument)Without convincing answers to these questions one is left with the impression that theclaim is more of a wishful thinking rather than substantive evidence
ConclusionIn conclusion the argument is flawed for the above‐mentioned reasons and is therefore unconvincing It could be considerablystrengthened if the author clearly mentioned all the relevant factsIn order to assess the merits of a certain situationdecision it is essential to have full knowledge of all contributing factors In thisparticular caseWithout this information the argument remains unsubstantiated and open to debate
4 Going from the templates to full‐fledged essays
ESSAY QUESTION The following appeared in the editorial section of a national news magazine[b]
The rating system for electronic games is similar to the movie rating system in that it provides consumers with a quick referenceso that they can determine if the subject matter and contents are appropriate This electronic game rating system is not workingbecause it is self regulated and the fines for violating the rating system are nominal As a result an independent body shouldoversee the game industry and companies that knowingly violate the rating system should be prohibited from releasing a gamefor two years
Discuss how well reasoned you find this argument Point out flaws in the arguments logic and analyze the arguments underlyingassumptions In addition evaluate how supporting evidence is used and what evidence might counter the arguments conclusionYou may also discuss what additional evidence could be used to strengthen the argument or what changes would make theargument more logically sound
YOUR RESPONSE
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The argument claims that the electronic games rating system although similar to the movie rating system is notworking because it is self regulated and violation fines are nominal Hence the gaming rating system should beoverseen by an independent body Stated in this way the argument fails to mention several key factors on the basis ofwhich it could be evaluated The conclusion relies on assumptions for which there is no clear evidence Therefore theargument is rather weak unconvincing and has several flaws
First the argument readily assumes that because the electronic game rating system is self regulated it is not workingwell This statement is a stretch and not substantiated in any way There are numerous examples in other areas ofbusiness or commerce where the entities are self regulated and rather successful For instance FIA the Formula1racing organization is self regulated Yet the sport is very popular and successful drawing millions of spectatorsaround the world each year Tickets are rather expensive races are shown on pay‑per‑view and nearly all drivers arepaid very well Another example is the paralleled movie rating system that the argument mentions The author fails toclarify whether it is working well but it is clear that the movie rating system is pretty well received by people whooften base their decisions to go see a movie with kids or not on the movie rating It has never been a case whensomeone would feel cheated by the movie rating and express disappointment afterwards Since the movie ratingsystem is also self regulated it follows that this regulatory method is working pretty well and it is not obvious how itcan be the reason for the poor electronic game rating system The argument would have been much clearer if itexplicitly gave examples of how the self regulatory system led to bad ratings and customer dissatisfaction
Second the argument claims that any violation fees for bad electronic game ratings are nominal It thus suggests thatthis is yet another reason for the rating system not working This is again a very weak and unsupported claim as theargument does not demonstrate any correlation between the monetary amount of the fines and the quality of theelectronic game rating system In fact the argument does not even draw a parallel with the mentioned movie ratingsystem and its violation fines If any such correlation had been shown for the movie rating system which supposedlyworks well then the author would have sounded a bit more convincing In addition if the argument provided evidencethat low violation fines lead to electronic game manufacturers to ignore any regulations with respect to the game
walker Re How to get 60 AWAmy guide [permalink] 22 May 2008 0640
rating system the argument could have been strengthened even further
Finally the argument concludes that an independent body should oversee the game industry and companies thatviolate the rating system should be punished From this statement again it is not at all clear how an independentregulatory body can do a better job than a self regulated one Without supporting evidence and examples from otherbusinesses where independent regulatory bodies have done a great job one is left with the impression that the claimis more of a wishful thinking rather than substantive evidence As a result this conclusion has no legs to stand on
In summary the argument is flawed and therefore unconvincing It could be considerably strengthened if the authorclearly mentioned all the relevant facts In order to assess the merits of a certain situation it is essential to have fullknowledge of all contributing factors
5 Final tips
During the tutorial type in a few sentences in the mock essay window to get used to the keyboardAgain during the tutorial jot down on your notebook the basic structure of your essays or the opening sentences in case youget too nervous and forget them when the clock starts tickingWrite as much as you can Try to write at least 500 words per essayAlways have the e‐rater in mind as your potential reviewer Remember that the human rater will make every effort to gradejust like the e‐rater In that sense keep your structure and volume in mind over actual qualitycontentBe careful of spelling mistakes Double check words that you normally know you misspell (eg exercise) Try to finish 2‐3minutes before time is up so you can slowly re‐read your essay for the purposes of spell checking Do not reorganizedeletesentencesparagraphs with less than 2 min leftNo matter how great you thought your essays went try to stay humble and focused ‐ remember this was just a warm‐up andthe real stuff hasnt started yet
Good luck
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Great stuff chineseburned much obligedIf you have any additional material that might be useful kindly post italthough your guide looks sufficient +1
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to add to chineseburn veritas tells you in paragraph 5 (before conclusion and after 3rd point) to add what wouldhave made the arguement issues stronger (analyze the arguement) or to criticize your own arguement (issuesquestion) They say to write 6 paragraphs
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Here is an essay I wrote for a PR Test ‐ Graded a 60 (normally they grade harder than real thing)
Prompt ldquoThe autonomy of any country is based on the strength of its borders if the number of illegal immigrants entering acountry cannot be checked both its economy and national identity are endangered Because illegal immigrants pose such threatsevery effort must be made to return them to their country of originrdquo
Assignment Discuss how well‐reasoned you find this argument In your discussion be sure to analyze the line of reasoning and theuse of evidence in the argument For example you may need to consider what questionable assumptions underlie the thinking andwhat alternative explanations or counterexamples might weaken the conclusion You can also discuss what sort of evidence wouldstrengthen or refute the argument what changes in the argument would make it more logically sound and what if anythingwould help you better evaluate its conclusion
This argument relies heavily on unverified assumptions and has a very extreme conclusion The author fails to make logicalconnections between the evidence provided and the conclusion that all illegal aliens must be returned to their country of origin
The first problem with the argument is that it suffers from multiple unsubstantiated claims The first evidence that is given tosupport the extreme conclusion is that the autonomy of any country is based on the strength of its borders This statement is alsoextreme because it infers that every countries autonomy could be ranked by the strength of its borders There are many Europeancountries that have very little strength exerted at the borders but still maintain autonomy The author should clarify thisstatement by grouping countries together or using a more vague statement that would include most countries but not all
The next statement in the argument is conditional phrase stating that the more illegal immigrants that enter a country the worseoff the economy and national identity will be While this statement might be true for some countries it is certainly not true for allcountries The very foundation of early US society was based on immigrant labor and culture that brought from over the sea Thereare still many countries whose economy is heavily dependent on immigrant labor Even though many economist feel this statementis true in the US today most would disagree that this statement is true of all countries
The final portion of the authors argument is the conclusion The conclusion states that the because of disadvantages mentionedearlier all illegal immigrants must be returned to their country of origin Although this statement might appear to be a logicalconclusion of this extreme argument it fails to take extra information into account The author doesnt give any indication on howextreme these problems will be or how costly it will be to return the amount of illegal aliens to their home country What if thecost to the economy was half the amount that it would cost to send all of the immigrants back to their country of origin Theauthor could use some monetary figures to prove that some savings would be incurred if all illegal immigrants were deported
In conclusion the argument suffers from logical flaws and makes an extreme conclusion based on unproven assumptions Theaddition of hard examples and connections between the statements would prove to strengthen the argument
This just shows you how you dont have to write great to get a good score
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to add to chineseburn veritas tells you in paragraph 5 (before conclusion and after 3rd point) to add what wouldhave made the arguement issues stronger (analyze the arguement) or to criticize your own arguement (issuesquestion) They say to write 6 paragraphs
I used verita for the essays tooIn fact I was most nervous about the AWAs then anything elseI skipped paragraph 5 in the verita guide since the it leaves me too little time to proof readAnyways just received my score today and got a 55 good enough
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Verry useful post I hope that it will help me to improve my 45 score You must be rewarded Kudos
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Extremely helpful
However just wanted to note that 500 words is quite a bit I think 450 words is still pretty good (enough to get a 60)
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The only addendum I would add here is that you do not necessarily need to make 3 points I made 2 points on an essay and still gota 6 If you dont make 3 points though make sure you write a lot about the 2 points Word count is important i think
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Thanks mate The structure part of your guide was very helpful
I didnt read past section 3 and it was good enough to take me from a 45 in late 2003 to a 60 a few days ago (Im surprised theychurned out a score that fast) Unfortunately that is only an 87 now
My conclusion paragraphs were very short too and my intros werent that long either My three body paragraphs were very longthough Therefore if I have anything to add to this for other test takers it is literally restate the argumentissue and take aposition and move on Dont bother with fluff and save that for the body as that seems to be what they are looking for Same withthe conclusion A couple sentences seems to suffice (ie dont restate anything just say for the reasons stated above)
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rating system the argument could have been strengthened even further
Finally the argument concludes that an independent body should oversee the game industry and companies thatviolate the rating system should be punished From this statement again it is not at all clear how an independentregulatory body can do a better job than a self regulated one Without supporting evidence and examples from otherbusinesses where independent regulatory bodies have done a great job one is left with the impression that the claimis more of a wishful thinking rather than substantive evidence As a result this conclusion has no legs to stand on
In summary the argument is flawed and therefore unconvincing It could be considerably strengthened if the authorclearly mentioned all the relevant facts In order to assess the merits of a certain situation it is essential to have fullknowledge of all contributing factors
5 Final tips
During the tutorial type in a few sentences in the mock essay window to get used to the keyboardAgain during the tutorial jot down on your notebook the basic structure of your essays or the opening sentences in case youget too nervous and forget them when the clock starts tickingWrite as much as you can Try to write at least 500 words per essayAlways have the e‐rater in mind as your potential reviewer Remember that the human rater will make every effort to gradejust like the e‐rater In that sense keep your structure and volume in mind over actual qualitycontentBe careful of spelling mistakes Double check words that you normally know you misspell (eg exercise) Try to finish 2‐3minutes before time is up so you can slowly re‐read your essay for the purposes of spell checking Do not reorganizedeletesentencesparagraphs with less than 2 min leftNo matter how great you thought your essays went try to stay humble and focused ‐ remember this was just a warm‐up andthe real stuff hasnt started yet
Good luck
_________________Chinese Democracy is misunderstoodat your nearest BestBuy
Best AWA guide here how‐to‐get‐6‐0‐awa‐my‐guide‐64327html
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Here is an essay I wrote for a PR Test ‐ Graded a 60 (normally they grade harder than real thing)
Prompt ldquoThe autonomy of any country is based on the strength of its borders if the number of illegal immigrants entering acountry cannot be checked both its economy and national identity are endangered Because illegal immigrants pose such threatsevery effort must be made to return them to their country of originrdquo
Assignment Discuss how well‐reasoned you find this argument In your discussion be sure to analyze the line of reasoning and theuse of evidence in the argument For example you may need to consider what questionable assumptions underlie the thinking andwhat alternative explanations or counterexamples might weaken the conclusion You can also discuss what sort of evidence wouldstrengthen or refute the argument what changes in the argument would make it more logically sound and what if anythingwould help you better evaluate its conclusion
This argument relies heavily on unverified assumptions and has a very extreme conclusion The author fails to make logicalconnections between the evidence provided and the conclusion that all illegal aliens must be returned to their country of origin
The first problem with the argument is that it suffers from multiple unsubstantiated claims The first evidence that is given tosupport the extreme conclusion is that the autonomy of any country is based on the strength of its borders This statement is alsoextreme because it infers that every countries autonomy could be ranked by the strength of its borders There are many Europeancountries that have very little strength exerted at the borders but still maintain autonomy The author should clarify thisstatement by grouping countries together or using a more vague statement that would include most countries but not all
The next statement in the argument is conditional phrase stating that the more illegal immigrants that enter a country the worseoff the economy and national identity will be While this statement might be true for some countries it is certainly not true for allcountries The very foundation of early US society was based on immigrant labor and culture that brought from over the sea Thereare still many countries whose economy is heavily dependent on immigrant labor Even though many economist feel this statementis true in the US today most would disagree that this statement is true of all countries
The final portion of the authors argument is the conclusion The conclusion states that the because of disadvantages mentionedearlier all illegal immigrants must be returned to their country of origin Although this statement might appear to be a logicalconclusion of this extreme argument it fails to take extra information into account The author doesnt give any indication on howextreme these problems will be or how costly it will be to return the amount of illegal aliens to their home country What if thecost to the economy was half the amount that it would cost to send all of the immigrants back to their country of origin Theauthor could use some monetary figures to prove that some savings would be incurred if all illegal immigrants were deported
In conclusion the argument suffers from logical flaws and makes an extreme conclusion based on unproven assumptions Theaddition of hard examples and connections between the statements would prove to strengthen the argument
This just shows you how you dont have to write great to get a good score
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Wow Chineseburned this makes the AWA much easier to attack +5Much obliged
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to add to chineseburn veritas tells you in paragraph 5 (before conclusion and after 3rd point) to add what wouldhave made the arguement issues stronger (analyze the arguement) or to criticize your own arguement (issuesquestion) They say to write 6 paragraphs
I used verita for the essays tooIn fact I was most nervous about the AWAs then anything elseI skipped paragraph 5 in the verita guide since the it leaves me too little time to proof readAnyways just received my score today and got a 55 good enough
Id say probably the only good thing verita guide for is the AWA _________________明日やろうばかやろう
24 wrote
Your East Coast bias is worse than ESPN
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Verry useful post I hope that it will help me to improve my 45 score You must be rewarded Kudos
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Extremely helpful
However just wanted to note that 500 words is quite a bit I think 450 words is still pretty good (enough to get a 60)
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Thank You chineseburned +1 (unfortunately the kudos feature is turned off for some reason) _________________You have to find it No one else can find it for you ‐ Bjorn Borg
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The only addendum I would add here is that you do not necessarily need to make 3 points I made 2 points on an essay and still gota 6 If you dont make 3 points though make sure you write a lot about the 2 points Word count is important i think
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Thanks mate The structure part of your guide was very helpful
I didnt read past section 3 and it was good enough to take me from a 45 in late 2003 to a 60 a few days ago (Im surprised theychurned out a score that fast) Unfortunately that is only an 87 now
My conclusion paragraphs were very short too and my intros werent that long either My three body paragraphs were very longthough Therefore if I have anything to add to this for other test takers it is literally restate the argumentissue and take aposition and move on Dont bother with fluff and save that for the body as that seems to be what they are looking for Same withthe conclusion A couple sentences seems to suffice (ie dont restate anything just say for the reasons stated above)
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Great stuff chineseburned much obligedIf you have any additional material that might be useful kindly post italthough your guide looks sufficient +1
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to add to chineseburn veritas tells you in paragraph 5 (before conclusion and after 3rd point) to add what would have made thearguement issues stronger (analyze the arguement) or to criticize your own arguement (issues question) They say to write 6paragraphs
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to add to chineseburn veritas tells you in paragraph 5 (before conclusion and after 3rd point) to add what wouldhave made the arguement issues stronger (analyze the arguement) or to criticize your own arguement (issuesquestion) They say to write 6 paragraphs
I include this in the conclusions 5 or 6 paragraphs doesnt matter as long as the word count is there _________________Chinese Democracy is misunderstoodat your nearest BestBuy
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Here is an essay I wrote for a PR Test ‐ Graded a 60 (normally they grade harder than real thing)
Prompt ldquoThe autonomy of any country is based on the strength of its borders if the number of illegal immigrants entering acountry cannot be checked both its economy and national identity are endangered Because illegal immigrants pose such threatsevery effort must be made to return them to their country of originrdquo
Assignment Discuss how well‐reasoned you find this argument In your discussion be sure to analyze the line of reasoning and theuse of evidence in the argument For example you may need to consider what questionable assumptions underlie the thinking andwhat alternative explanations or counterexamples might weaken the conclusion You can also discuss what sort of evidence wouldstrengthen or refute the argument what changes in the argument would make it more logically sound and what if anythingwould help you better evaluate its conclusion
This argument relies heavily on unverified assumptions and has a very extreme conclusion The author fails to make logicalconnections between the evidence provided and the conclusion that all illegal aliens must be returned to their country of origin
The first problem with the argument is that it suffers from multiple unsubstantiated claims The first evidence that is given tosupport the extreme conclusion is that the autonomy of any country is based on the strength of its borders This statement is alsoextreme because it infers that every countries autonomy could be ranked by the strength of its borders There are many Europeancountries that have very little strength exerted at the borders but still maintain autonomy The author should clarify thisstatement by grouping countries together or using a more vague statement that would include most countries but not all
The next statement in the argument is conditional phrase stating that the more illegal immigrants that enter a country the worseoff the economy and national identity will be While this statement might be true for some countries it is certainly not true for allcountries The very foundation of early US society was based on immigrant labor and culture that brought from over the sea Thereare still many countries whose economy is heavily dependent on immigrant labor Even though many economist feel this statementis true in the US today most would disagree that this statement is true of all countries
The final portion of the authors argument is the conclusion The conclusion states that the because of disadvantages mentionedearlier all illegal immigrants must be returned to their country of origin Although this statement might appear to be a logicalconclusion of this extreme argument it fails to take extra information into account The author doesnt give any indication on howextreme these problems will be or how costly it will be to return the amount of illegal aliens to their home country What if thecost to the economy was half the amount that it would cost to send all of the immigrants back to their country of origin Theauthor could use some monetary figures to prove that some savings would be incurred if all illegal immigrants were deported
In conclusion the argument suffers from logical flaws and makes an extreme conclusion based on unproven assumptions Theaddition of hard examples and connections between the statements would prove to strengthen the argument
This just shows you how you dont have to write great to get a good score
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Wow Chineseburned this makes the AWA much easier to attack +5Much obliged
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to add to chineseburn veritas tells you in paragraph 5 (before conclusion and after 3rd point) to add what wouldhave made the arguement issues stronger (analyze the arguement) or to criticize your own arguement (issuesquestion) They say to write 6 paragraphs
I used verita for the essays tooIn fact I was most nervous about the AWAs then anything elseI skipped paragraph 5 in the verita guide since the it leaves me too little time to proof readAnyways just received my score today and got a 55 good enough
Id say probably the only good thing verita guide for is the AWA _________________明日やろうばかやろう
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Verry useful post I hope that it will help me to improve my 45 score You must be rewarded Kudos
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Extremely helpful
However just wanted to note that 500 words is quite a bit I think 450 words is still pretty good (enough to get a 60)
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The only addendum I would add here is that you do not necessarily need to make 3 points I made 2 points on an essay and still gota 6 If you dont make 3 points though make sure you write a lot about the 2 points Word count is important i think
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Thanks mate The structure part of your guide was very helpful
I didnt read past section 3 and it was good enough to take me from a 45 in late 2003 to a 60 a few days ago (Im surprised theychurned out a score that fast) Unfortunately that is only an 87 now
My conclusion paragraphs were very short too and my intros werent that long either My three body paragraphs were very longthough Therefore if I have anything to add to this for other test takers it is literally restate the argumentissue and take aposition and move on Dont bother with fluff and save that for the body as that seems to be what they are looking for Same withthe conclusion A couple sentences seems to suffice (ie dont restate anything just say for the reasons stated above)
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Here is an essay I wrote for a PR Test ‐ Graded a 60 (normally they grade harder than real thing)
Prompt ldquoThe autonomy of any country is based on the strength of its borders if the number of illegal immigrants entering acountry cannot be checked both its economy and national identity are endangered Because illegal immigrants pose such threatsevery effort must be made to return them to their country of originrdquo
Assignment Discuss how well‐reasoned you find this argument In your discussion be sure to analyze the line of reasoning and theuse of evidence in the argument For example you may need to consider what questionable assumptions underlie the thinking andwhat alternative explanations or counterexamples might weaken the conclusion You can also discuss what sort of evidence wouldstrengthen or refute the argument what changes in the argument would make it more logically sound and what if anythingwould help you better evaluate its conclusion
This argument relies heavily on unverified assumptions and has a very extreme conclusion The author fails to make logicalconnections between the evidence provided and the conclusion that all illegal aliens must be returned to their country of origin
The first problem with the argument is that it suffers from multiple unsubstantiated claims The first evidence that is given tosupport the extreme conclusion is that the autonomy of any country is based on the strength of its borders This statement is alsoextreme because it infers that every countries autonomy could be ranked by the strength of its borders There are many Europeancountries that have very little strength exerted at the borders but still maintain autonomy The author should clarify thisstatement by grouping countries together or using a more vague statement that would include most countries but not all
The next statement in the argument is conditional phrase stating that the more illegal immigrants that enter a country the worseoff the economy and national identity will be While this statement might be true for some countries it is certainly not true for allcountries The very foundation of early US society was based on immigrant labor and culture that brought from over the sea Thereare still many countries whose economy is heavily dependent on immigrant labor Even though many economist feel this statementis true in the US today most would disagree that this statement is true of all countries
The final portion of the authors argument is the conclusion The conclusion states that the because of disadvantages mentionedearlier all illegal immigrants must be returned to their country of origin Although this statement might appear to be a logicalconclusion of this extreme argument it fails to take extra information into account The author doesnt give any indication on howextreme these problems will be or how costly it will be to return the amount of illegal aliens to their home country What if thecost to the economy was half the amount that it would cost to send all of the immigrants back to their country of origin Theauthor could use some monetary figures to prove that some savings would be incurred if all illegal immigrants were deported
In conclusion the argument suffers from logical flaws and makes an extreme conclusion based on unproven assumptions Theaddition of hard examples and connections between the statements would prove to strengthen the argument
This just shows you how you dont have to write great to get a good score
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Wow Chineseburned this makes the AWA much easier to attack +5Much obliged
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to add to chineseburn veritas tells you in paragraph 5 (before conclusion and after 3rd point) to add what wouldhave made the arguement issues stronger (analyze the arguement) or to criticize your own arguement (issuesquestion) They say to write 6 paragraphs
I used verita for the essays tooIn fact I was most nervous about the AWAs then anything elseI skipped paragraph 5 in the verita guide since the it leaves me too little time to proof readAnyways just received my score today and got a 55 good enough
Id say probably the only good thing verita guide for is the AWA _________________明日やろうばかやろう
24 wrote
Your East Coast bias is worse than ESPN
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Extremely helpful
However just wanted to note that 500 words is quite a bit I think 450 words is still pretty good (enough to get a 60)
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The only addendum I would add here is that you do not necessarily need to make 3 points I made 2 points on an essay and still gota 6 If you dont make 3 points though make sure you write a lot about the 2 points Word count is important i think
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Thanks mate The structure part of your guide was very helpful
I didnt read past section 3 and it was good enough to take me from a 45 in late 2003 to a 60 a few days ago (Im surprised theychurned out a score that fast) Unfortunately that is only an 87 now
My conclusion paragraphs were very short too and my intros werent that long either My three body paragraphs were very longthough Therefore if I have anything to add to this for other test takers it is literally restate the argumentissue and take aposition and move on Dont bother with fluff and save that for the body as that seems to be what they are looking for Same withthe conclusion A couple sentences seems to suffice (ie dont restate anything just say for the reasons stated above)
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Here is an essay I wrote for a PR Test ‐ Graded a 60 (normally they grade harder than real thing)
Prompt ldquoThe autonomy of any country is based on the strength of its borders if the number of illegal immigrants entering acountry cannot be checked both its economy and national identity are endangered Because illegal immigrants pose such threatsevery effort must be made to return them to their country of originrdquo
Assignment Discuss how well‐reasoned you find this argument In your discussion be sure to analyze the line of reasoning and theuse of evidence in the argument For example you may need to consider what questionable assumptions underlie the thinking andwhat alternative explanations or counterexamples might weaken the conclusion You can also discuss what sort of evidence wouldstrengthen or refute the argument what changes in the argument would make it more logically sound and what if anythingwould help you better evaluate its conclusion
This argument relies heavily on unverified assumptions and has a very extreme conclusion The author fails to make logicalconnections between the evidence provided and the conclusion that all illegal aliens must be returned to their country of origin
The first problem with the argument is that it suffers from multiple unsubstantiated claims The first evidence that is given tosupport the extreme conclusion is that the autonomy of any country is based on the strength of its borders This statement is alsoextreme because it infers that every countries autonomy could be ranked by the strength of its borders There are many Europeancountries that have very little strength exerted at the borders but still maintain autonomy The author should clarify thisstatement by grouping countries together or using a more vague statement that would include most countries but not all
The next statement in the argument is conditional phrase stating that the more illegal immigrants that enter a country the worseoff the economy and national identity will be While this statement might be true for some countries it is certainly not true for allcountries The very foundation of early US society was based on immigrant labor and culture that brought from over the sea Thereare still many countries whose economy is heavily dependent on immigrant labor Even though many economist feel this statementis true in the US today most would disagree that this statement is true of all countries
The final portion of the authors argument is the conclusion The conclusion states that the because of disadvantages mentionedearlier all illegal immigrants must be returned to their country of origin Although this statement might appear to be a logicalconclusion of this extreme argument it fails to take extra information into account The author doesnt give any indication on howextreme these problems will be or how costly it will be to return the amount of illegal aliens to their home country What if thecost to the economy was half the amount that it would cost to send all of the immigrants back to their country of origin Theauthor could use some monetary figures to prove that some savings would be incurred if all illegal immigrants were deported
In conclusion the argument suffers from logical flaws and makes an extreme conclusion based on unproven assumptions Theaddition of hard examples and connections between the statements would prove to strengthen the argument
This just shows you how you dont have to write great to get a good score
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Wow Chineseburned this makes the AWA much easier to attack +5Much obliged
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+1 if you can dig up more examples that would be greatly appreciated _________________
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to add to chineseburn veritas tells you in paragraph 5 (before conclusion and after 3rd point) to add what wouldhave made the arguement issues stronger (analyze the arguement) or to criticize your own arguement (issuesquestion) They say to write 6 paragraphs
I used verita for the essays tooIn fact I was most nervous about the AWAs then anything elseI skipped paragraph 5 in the verita guide since the it leaves me too little time to proof readAnyways just received my score today and got a 55 good enough
Id say probably the only good thing verita guide for is the AWA _________________明日やろうばかやろう
24 wrote
Your East Coast bias is worse than ESPN
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Extremely helpful
However just wanted to note that 500 words is quite a bit I think 450 words is still pretty good (enough to get a 60)
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Thank You chineseburned +1 (unfortunately the kudos feature is turned off for some reason) _________________You have to find it No one else can find it for you ‐ Bjorn Borg
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The only addendum I would add here is that you do not necessarily need to make 3 points I made 2 points on an essay and still gota 6 If you dont make 3 points though make sure you write a lot about the 2 points Word count is important i think
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Thanks mate The structure part of your guide was very helpful
I didnt read past section 3 and it was good enough to take me from a 45 in late 2003 to a 60 a few days ago (Im surprised theychurned out a score that fast) Unfortunately that is only an 87 now
My conclusion paragraphs were very short too and my intros werent that long either My three body paragraphs were very longthough Therefore if I have anything to add to this for other test takers it is literally restate the argumentissue and take aposition and move on Dont bother with fluff and save that for the body as that seems to be what they are looking for Same withthe conclusion A couple sentences seems to suffice (ie dont restate anything just say for the reasons stated above)
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to add to chineseburn veritas tells you in paragraph 5 (before conclusion and after 3rd point) to add what wouldhave made the arguement issues stronger (analyze the arguement) or to criticize your own arguement (issuesquestion) They say to write 6 paragraphs
I used verita for the essays tooIn fact I was most nervous about the AWAs then anything elseI skipped paragraph 5 in the verita guide since the it leaves me too little time to proof readAnyways just received my score today and got a 55 good enough
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Verry useful post I hope that it will help me to improve my 45 score You must be rewarded Kudos
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Extremely helpful
However just wanted to note that 500 words is quite a bit I think 450 words is still pretty good (enough to get a 60)
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The only addendum I would add here is that you do not necessarily need to make 3 points I made 2 points on an essay and still gota 6 If you dont make 3 points though make sure you write a lot about the 2 points Word count is important i think
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Thanks mate The structure part of your guide was very helpful
I didnt read past section 3 and it was good enough to take me from a 45 in late 2003 to a 60 a few days ago (Im surprised theychurned out a score that fast) Unfortunately that is only an 87 now
My conclusion paragraphs were very short too and my intros werent that long either My three body paragraphs were very longthough Therefore if I have anything to add to this for other test takers it is literally restate the argumentissue and take aposition and move on Dont bother with fluff and save that for the body as that seems to be what they are looking for Same withthe conclusion A couple sentences seems to suffice (ie dont restate anything just say for the reasons stated above)
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Thanks mate The structure part of your guide was very helpful
I didnt read past section 3 and it was good enough to take me from a 45 in late 2003 to a 60 a few days ago (Im surprised theychurned out a score that fast) Unfortunately that is only an 87 now
My conclusion paragraphs were very short too and my intros werent that long either My three body paragraphs were very longthough Therefore if I have anything to add to this for other test takers it is literally restate the argumentissue and take aposition and move on Dont bother with fluff and save that for the body as that seems to be what they are looking for Same withthe conclusion A couple sentences seems to suffice (ie dont restate anything just say for the reasons stated above)
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