Formal and Explanation Writing Unit
Formal and ExplanationWriting Unit
Contents Introduction 3
List of resources 5
Framework objectives 6
Unit plan: week 1 8
Unit plan: week 2 9
Resource sheets
Lesson notes and transcripts for days 1, 2, 6 and 7 11
2a and 2b: Informal invitation OHT and annotations 17
2c and 2d: Formal invitation OHT and annotations 19
2e: Comparative grid OHT 21
3: Newspaper report OHT 22
4a and 4b: DVLA leaflet extract OHT and annotations 23
5a and 5b: Passport application OHT and annotations 25
6a and 6b: Informal letter of complaint OHT and annotations 27
6c and 6d: Formal letter of complaint OHT and annotations 29
7: Complaint scenario OHT 31
8a and 8b: Informal explanation OHT and annotations 32
8c and 8d: Formal explanation OHT and annotations 34
9a and 9b: Formal explanation OHT and annotations 36
9c: Flow chart OHT 39
9d: Car accident notes OHT 40
10a and 10b: Volcanoes OHT and annotations 41
11: Earthquakes (opening) OHT 44
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Year 6 Planning Exemplification 2002–2003Formal and Explanation Writing Unit
IntroductionPreparation for this unit
Prior to teaching this unit, it would be helpful for teachers to be familiar with the mark scheme
for the 2003 Key Stage 2 writing test. Changes to assessment 2003: sample material for Key
Stages 1 and 2 has been sent to all schools as a booklet and is also on the QCA website with
some additional sample material at www.qca.org.uk/ca/tests/2003sample.
The assessment focuses in the 2003 mark scheme are drawn together under strands: sentence
construction and punctuation, text structure and organisation, composition and effect. These
are the elements of writing covered by the word, sentence and text level objectives in the NLS
Framework for teaching.
Sentence construction and punctuation
• vary sentences for clarity, purpose and effect
• write with technical accuracy of syntax and punctuation in phrases, clauses and sentences
Text structure and organisation
• organise and present whole texts effectively, sequencing and structuring information,
ideas and events
• construct paragraphs and use cohesion within and between paragraphs
Composition and effect
• write imaginative, interesting and thoughtful texts
• produce texts which are appropriate to task, reader and purpose
The two word-level focuses are
• select appropriate and effective vocabulary
• use correct spelling
The vocabulary focus is assessed through all three strands and the spelling focus
is assessed through a separate spelling test.
Changes to assessment 2003: guidance for teachers (KS2 English) has also been sent
to all schools. In order to understand the mark scheme, this booklet suggests:
• comparing the 2002 sample materials with test papers from previous years;
• using a script of a longer writing task in the sample materials on the website, cutting
up the annotated notes and matching them to the appropriate places in the script;
• applying the strands from the mark scheme to the scripts;
• giving the children a sample longer task using a prompt from the website, and marking
a selection of pieces of writing with a colleague using the 2003 mark scheme.
The unit
In this unit on formal writing and explanations, the resources for analysing texts and for
demonstrating writing have been annotated under the three strand headings: sentence
construction and punctuation, text structure and organisation, composition and effect.
The unit extends children’s understanding of explanation writing and the use of formal language
features by comparing informal and formal texts; analysing and demonstrating written texts;
and supporting the children in writing their own formal texts and explanations. While reading
the texts, analysing them and participating in demonstration lessons the children will learn how
to construct sentences and paragraphs to achieve the effects needed to inform the reader. In the
plenary, the teacher will have the opportunity to respond to the children’s writing with the three
assessment strands in mind.
Written outcomes of the unit
• Formal invitation
• Glossary of formal words and phrases
• Formal explanation of the function of a library card
• Formal letter of complaint
• Two brief formal explanations
• An extended explanation of a process
Resources
The resources for the unit include lesson notes and transcripts for the first two days of each
week, texts for analysis and texts to use to demonstrate writing. Annotated versions of the texts
are also provided showing the effective features of the sample texts. These are notes for the
teacher to use as support during the analysis of the text with the children and as points to bring
out during teaching.
Resource sheets 2 and 3 are related to social events. The invitations provided on Resource
sheets 2a and 2b can be substituted to reflect other celebrations in our culturally diverse society.
Teachers may also wish to replace the report of a ball with a report of a different celebratory
event relevant to the lives of their pupils, or a fantasy event, e.g. Prince Charming’s ball.
Copies of the booklets from which Resource sheets 4a and 5a are taken can be obtained from
post offices. Teachers may wish to have copies of the authentic documents to show to pupils.
If possible they should also have some examples of different invitations to supplement those
in Resource sheets 2a and 2c.
Books, articles, CD-ROMs and Internet access to materials on earthquakes are needed
for the children to undertake research on day 8.
The two weeks of this unit can be taught as a fortnight of work or be split into two separate
weeks; alternatively, one week may be taught and not the other.
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List of resources
1 Lesson notes for days 1, 2, 6 and 7
Resources for day 1
2a Sample text: Informal invitation
2b Annotated informal invitation
2c Sample text: Formal invitation
2d Annotated formal invitation
2e Comparative grid
Resources for day 2
3 Sample text: Newspaper report of ball
Resources for day 3
4a Sample text: Extract from DVLA leaflet D100
What you need to know about driving licences
4b Annotated DVLA leaflet extract
Resources for day 4
5a Sample text: Extract from Passport Office leaflet
How to fill in your passport application form
5b Annotated Passport Office text
Resources for day 5
6a Sample text: Informal letter of complaint
6b Annotated informal letter of complaint
6c Sample text: Formal letter of complaint
6d Annotated formal letter of complaint
7 Complaint scenario
Resources for day 6
8a Sample text: Informal explanation
8b Annotated informal explanation
8c Sample text: Formal explanation
8d Annotated formal explanation
Resources for day 7
9a Accident – formal explanation
9b Annotated formal explanation
9c Flow chart
9d Notes for car accident
Resources for day 8
10a Sample text: Volcano explanation
10b Annotated volcano explanation
Resources for day 9
10a Sample text: Volcano explanation
11 Sample text: Earthquake explanation (opening)
Resources for day 10
10a Sample text: Volcano explanation
Formal writing – objectivesYear 6 Term 2Text
Pupils should be taught:
17 to read and understand examples of official language and its characteristic features,
e.g. through discussing consumer information, legal documents, layouts, use of footnotes,
instructions, parentheses, headings, appendices and asterisks;
20 to discuss the way standard English varies in different contexts, e.g. why legal language
is necessarily highly formalised, why questionnaires must be specific.
Sentence
Pupils should be taught:
1 to investigate further the use of active and passive verbs:
• secure the use of the terms active and passive;
• know how sentences can be reordered by changing from one to the other;
• identify examples of active and passive verbs in texts;
• experiment in transformation from active to passive and vice versa and study
the impact of this on meaning;
• consider how the passive voice can conceal the agent of a sentence,
e.g. the chicks were kept in an incubator;
2 to understand features of formal official language through, e.g:
• collecting and analysing examples, discussing when and why they are used;
• noting the conventions of the language, e.g. use of the impersonal voice, imperative
verbs, formal vocabulary;
• collecting typical words and expressions, e.g. ‘those wishing to …’ ‘hereby...’
‘forms may be obtained…’;
4 to revise work on contracting sentences:
• summary;
• note making;
• editing.
Word
Pupils should be taught:
4 to revise and consolidate work from previous four terms with particular emphasis on:
• learning and inventing spelling rules;
• inventing and using mnemonics for irregular or difficult spellings;
• unstressed vowel spellings in polysyllabic words;
5 to extend work on word origins and derivations from previous term. Use personal reading,
a range of dictionaries and previous knowledge to investigate words with common prefixes,
suffixes, word roots.
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Explanation – objectivesYear 6 Term 3Text
Pupils should be taught:
15 to secure understanding of the features of explanatory texts from Year 5 term 2;
17 to appraise a text quickly and effectively; to retrieve information from it; to find information
quickly and evaluate its value;
21 to divide whole texts into paragraphs, paying attention to the sequence of paragraphs
and to the links between one paragraph and the next, e.g. through the choice of appropriate
connectives;
22 to select the appropriate style and form to suit a specific purpose and audience,
drawing on knowledge of different non-fiction text types.
Sentence
Pupils should be taught:
1 to revise the language conventions and grammatical features of the different types
of text such as:
• narrative (e.g. stories and novels);
• recounts (e.g. anecdotes, accounts of observations, experiences);
• instructional texts (e.g. instructions and directions);
• reports (e.g. factual writing, description);
• explanatory texts (how and why);
• persuasive texts (e.g. opinions, promotional literature);
• discursive texts (e.g. balanced arguments);
3 to revise formal styles of writing:
• the impersonal voice;
• the use of the passive;
• management of complex sentences.
Word
Pupils should be taught:
1 to identify mis-spelt words in own writing; to keep individual lists (e.g. spelling logs);
to learn to spell them;
2 to use known spellings as a basis for spelling other words with similar patterns
or related meanings;
3 to use independent spelling strategies, including:
• building up spellings by syllabic parts, using known prefixes, suffixes and common
letter strings;
• applying knowledge of spelling rules and exceptions;
• building words from other known words, and from awareness of the meaning
or derivations of words;
• using dictionaries and IT spell-checks;
• using visual skills, e.g. recognising common letter strings and checking critical features
(i.e. does it look right, shape, length, etc.).
Unit plan: week 1
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Day
1 2 3 4 5
Gui
ded
Ind
epen
den
t wo
rk
In p
airs
, com
ple
te c
omp
arat
ive
grid
(see
Res
ourc
e sh
eet 2
e) o
f the
two
invi
tatio
ns, u
sing
the
key
info
rmat
ion
as a
pro
mp
t to
thei
r sea
rche
s.
Ext
ensi
on a
ctiv
ity: f
orm
al /i
nfor
mal
com
par
ativ
e vo
cab
ular
y.
Dra
win
g on
yes
terd
ay’s
form
alin
vita
tion,
writ
e a
form
al in
vita
tion
to th
e ev
ent i
n R
esou
rce
shee
t 3.
Chi
ldre
n us
e th
eir n
otes
and
ye
ster
day
’s c
omp
arat
ive
grid
/list
s to
sup
por
t the
ir w
ork.
Dra
win
g on
the
driv
ing
licen
ce te
xt
as m
odel
, chi
ldre
n co
mp
lete
the
writ
ing
of th
e ex
pla
natio
n of
lib
rary
car
ds
and
thei
r use
. Enc
oura
ge th
em to
use
wha
tth
ey k
now
ab
out f
orm
al la
ngua
ge a
ndla
yout
. Ext
ensi
on a
ctiv
ity: a
dd
a fu
rthe
rse
ctio
n on
the
use
of th
e sc
hool
lib
rary
usin
g fo
rmal
lang
uage
.
Giv
e ou
t pho
toco
pie
s of
pas
spor
t tex
t.
In p
airs
, hig
hlig
ht a
ny te
chni
cal /
form
alw
ord
s an
d p
hras
es. D
ecid
e w
hat
sim
ple
wor
d o
r phr
ase
coul
d re
pla
ce it
.U
se th
is to
cre
ate
glos
sary
/dic
tiona
ryen
trie
s. R
ecor
d th
ese
in th
e vo
cab
ular
yp
ages
of s
pel
ling
logs
.
Usi
ng th
e sc
enar
io p
rovi
ded
(Res
ourc
esh
eet 7
), as
k ch
ildre
n to
writ
e th
eir o
wn
brie
f let
ter o
f com
pla
int.
Enc
oura
geth
em to
aim
to c
omp
lete
this
in 2
0m
inut
es. G
ive
a le
tter
tem
pla
te s
how
ing
the
layo
ut s
o th
ey c
once
ntra
te o
n th
eco
nten
t of b
ody
of th
e le
tter
, not
the
lett
er fo
rmat
.
Ple
nary
Take
som
e co
mp
arat
ives
. Ask
chi
ldre
nto
iden
tify
the
feat
ures
of a
form
alin
vita
tion
with
exa
mp
les.
Ret
urn
tofo
rmal
phr
ases
/ wor
ds
iden
tifie
d e
arlie
r.D
emon
stra
tion-
writ
e a
glos
sary
/dic
tiona
ryen
try.
Giv
e re
st o
f phr
ases
as
hom
ewor
k.
Sha
re e
xam
ple
s of
chi
ldre
n’s
wor
k an
d a
sk o
ther
s to
ass
ess
use
of
pre
cise
det
ails
, for
mal
phr
ases
and
voca
bul
ary,
whe
ther
key
info
rmat
ion
incl
uded
, lay
out.
Sha
re s
ome
exam
ple
s of
the
writ
ing
and
look
for i
mp
erso
nal /
form
alel
emen
ts/ t
ext s
truc
ture
. Id
entif
y th
ep
assi
ve s
ente
nce
in R
esou
rce
shee
t 4a
and
brie
fly re
cap
the
prin
cip
les
(see
Uni
t 48
GfW
). U
sing
exa
mp
les
from
the
child
ren’
s w
ritin
g, p
ract
ise
rem
ovin
g th
e ag
ent f
rom
sen
tenc
es(tu
rnin
g ac
tive
sent
ence
s to
pas
sive
).D
iscu
ss th
e im
pac
t thi
s ha
s on
th
e w
ritin
g.
List
wor
ds
and
phr
ases
chi
ldre
n ha
veun
der
lined
. Ask
chi
ldre
n to
offe
r the
irgl
ossa
ry/d
ictio
nary
ent
ries.
Dis
cuss
whi
ch is
bes
t and
why
.
Chi
ldre
n ro
le-p
lay
read
ing
thei
r let
ters
alou
d. O
ther
s co
mm
ent o
n th
eir
effe
ctiv
enes
s an
d u
se o
f for
mal
lang
uage
.
Sha
red
text
, sen
tenc
e an
d w
ord
leve
l
Dis
cuss
invi
tatio
ns a
nd th
eir p
urp
ose.
Wha
t do
they
nee
d to
tell
you?
List
key
info
rmat
ion.
Sha
red
read
ing,
dis
cuss
ion
and
par
tial a
nnot
atio
n of
info
rmal
invi
tatio
n (R
esou
rce
shee
t 2a)
and
form
al in
vita
tion
(Res
ourc
esh
eet 2
c). A
dd
any
furt
her s
ugge
stio
ns to
key
info
rmat
ion.
Dis
cuss
the
diff
eren
t im
pac
t of e
ach
invi
tatio
n. B
egin
a c
omp
arat
ive
list o
f fea
ture
s.N
ote
form
al p
hras
es a
nd v
ocab
ular
y to
retu
rn to
in p
lena
ry.
Sha
red
read
ing
of th
e ac
coun
t of a
bal
l (R
esou
rce
shee
t 3).
Enc
oura
gere
call,
infe
renc
e an
d d
educ
tion
to id
entif
y ke
y in
form
atio
n. N
ote-
take
ke
y fa
cts
on w
hite
boa
rds.
Sp
ellin
g: M
ake
link
bet
wee
n ac
com
pan
ied
in R
esou
rce
shee
t 3 a
nd c
omp
any
(from
‘req
uest
the
com
pan
y’).
Cre
ate
wor
d fa
mily
from
root
wor
d.
Dis
cuss
whe
n fo
rmal
writ
ten
lang
uage
is e
ncou
nter
ed a
nd w
hy o
ffici
ald
ocum
ents
are
writ
ten
in s
uch
a w
ay. S
hare
d re
adin
g of
Res
ourc
e sh
eet
4a. C
heck
und
erst
and
ing,
esp
ecia
lly fo
rmal
phr
ases
, voc
abul
ary.
Ann
otat
e an
d d
iscu
ss fo
rmal
feat
ures
and
layo
ut. N
ote
text
str
uctu
re
of in
trod
uctio
n (w
hat l
icen
ce fo
r, d
etai
led
des
crip
tion
of a
lice
nce.
See
Res
ourc
e sh
eet 4
b).
Mak
e p
oint
that
form
al la
ngua
ge o
ccur
s in
man
yd
iffer
ent k
ind
s of
text
s. S
pel
ling:
Cha
lleng
e ch
ildre
n to
iden
tify
the
tric
kyp
art o
f sp
ellin
g lic
ence
and
a w
ay to
rem
emb
er th
e co
rrec
t sp
ellin
g. S
how
exam
ple
of l
ocal
lib
rary
car
d a
nd d
iscu
ss w
hat i
t is
for,
who
is e
ntitl
ed to
one,
wha
t it c
onsi
sts
of, w
hen
it is
pro
duc
ed a
nd w
ho c
an a
sk to
see
it.
Und
erta
ke d
emon
stra
tion
or s
hare
d w
ritin
g of
intr
oduc
tion
to a
leaf
let o
nlib
rary
car
ds
(ent
itlem
ent t
o b
ooks
, tap
es, v
ideo
s, C
Ds)
bas
ed o
n m
odel
from
Res
ourc
e sh
eet 4
a. S
tres
s us
e of
form
al, i
mp
erso
nal l
angu
age,
gene
ric s
tate
men
ts a
nd la
yout
.
Rem
ind
the
clas
s of
offi
cial
text
they
read
yes
terd
ay a
nd g
et th
em to
re
cap
cha
ract
eris
tics.
Rea
d fu
rthe
r exa
mp
le o
f offi
cial
text
(Res
ourc
esh
eet 5
a). D
iscu
ss a
nd id
entif
y th
e fe
atur
es it
sha
res
with
oth
er fo
rmal
text
s st
udie
d (s
ee R
esou
rce
shee
t 5b
).S
pel
ling:
Writ
e co
unte
rsig
natu
re, c
ount
ersi
gnat
orie
s. Id
entif
y th
e ro
otw
ord
. Chi
ldre
n w
rite
othe
r wor
ds
with
the
sign
root
, inc
lud
ing
pre
fixes
an
d s
uffix
es. C
reat
e jo
int s
ign
wor
d c
hart
.
Com
par
e th
e tw
o le
tter
s of
com
pla
int (
Res
ourc
e sh
eets
6a
and
6c)
.D
iscu
ss w
hy th
e fo
rmal
lett
er is
mor
e ef
fect
ive.
Iden
tify
the
feat
ures
of
form
al w
ritte
n te
xt u
sed
. Poi
nt o
ut th
e in
trod
uctio
n: p
rob
lem
out
lined
,d
etai
ls, r
esul
t wan
ted
; str
uctu
re o
f the
par
agra
phs
(see
Res
ourc
e sh
eets
6b a
nd 6
d).
Ora
lly, t
urn
one
or tw
o se
nten
ces
from
Res
ourc
e sh
eet 6
a in
to p
assi
ve s
ente
nces
and
dis
cuss
imp
act.
Poi
nt o
ut th
at to
o m
any
pas
sive
sen
tenc
es c
an s
ound
pom
pou
s. In
trod
uce
the
ind
epen
den
t ta
sk b
y re
adin
g th
e sc
enar
io a
nd d
emon
stra
tion-
writ
e a
few
op
enin
gse
nten
ces.
Mod
el fo
rmal
tone
/use
of l
angu
age.
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Unit plan: week 2D
ay
6 7 8 9 10
Gui
ded
Ind
epen
den
t wo
rk
Chi
ldre
n co
ntin
ue to
writ
e th
e fo
rmal
exp
lana
tion
to th
e he
adte
ache
r.E
ncou
rage
them
to in
clud
e fo
rmal
phr
ases
and
voc
abul
ary
and
to th
ink
abou
t the
str
uctu
re o
f the
exp
lana
tion.
Giv
e p
aral
lel n
otes
(Res
ourc
e sh
eet
9d) t
o gr
oup
s of
3. C
hild
ren
role
-pla
ygi
ving
thei
r exp
lana
tion
of th
e ac
cid
ent
to th
e p
olic
e co
nsta
ble
. The
n jo
intly
com
pos
e th
e op
enin
g of
a fo
rmal
acco
unt o
f the
inci
den
t whi
ch s
houl
din
clud
e a
pas
sive
sen
tenc
e.
Rem
ind
chi
ldre
n of
not
e ta
king
mod
elle
d y
este
rday
. Chi
ldre
n m
ake
note
s on
wha
t cau
ses
eart
hqua
kes.
Boo
ks o
n ea
rthq
uake
s, le
afle
ts, C
D-
RO
Ms,
Inte
rnet
ava
ilab
le fo
r res
earc
h.
Chi
ldre
n co
ntin
ue w
ritin
g th
e op
enin
gan
d n
ext f
ew p
arag
rap
hs, u
sing
the
par
agra
ph
list t
o gu
ide
them
.
Chi
ldre
n co
mp
lete
writ
ing
eart
hqua
keex
pla
natio
n te
xt.
Ple
nary
Sha
re R
esou
rce
shee
t 8c
with
them
as
one
pos
sib
le fo
rmal
lett
er. L
ook
at fo
rmal
feat
ures
, str
uctu
re a
ndse
que
nce,
how
end
ed, u
se o
f tem
por
alan
d c
ausa
l con
nect
ives
. How
is it
diff
eren
t fro
m th
e in
form
al v
ersi
on?
Ask
them
to s
hare
thei
r ow
n le
tter
s w
ith a
writ
ing
resp
onse
par
tner
and
dec
ide
if th
ey c
an im
pro
ve th
eir l
ette
rsin
the
light
of t
his
exam
ple
/dis
cuss
ion.
Sha
re w
ritte
n ve
rsio
ns a
nd c
omp
are.
Look
for f
orm
al fe
atur
es a
nd
pas
sive
voi
ce.
Sho
w s
ome
of c
hild
ren’
s no
tes
on O
HT
and
ask
them
to e
xpla
in th
e ra
tiona
leb
ehin
d h
ow th
ey h
ave
orga
nise
d th
eir
note
s. C
heck
they
ind
icat
e ca
usal
and
seq
uent
ial r
elat
ions
hip
s. Id
entif
y an
yte
chni
cal w
ord
s co
mm
on to
bot
hvo
lcan
oes
and
ear
thq
uake
s an
d re
cap
spel
ling
stra
tegi
es.
Ret
urn
to te
chni
cal w
ord
s d
iscu
ssed
on
Wed
nesd
ay a
nd s
ee w
ho c
an re
call
how
to s
pel
l the
m u
sing
sp
ellin
g st
rate
gies
dis
cuss
ed. A
sk th
em to
pro
ofre
ad th
ese
wor
ds
in th
eir o
wn
writ
ing.
Sha
re s
ome
exam
ple
s of
the
child
ren’
sw
ritin
g an
d a
sk th
em to
iden
tify
the
feat
ures
of e
xpla
natio
n te
xt a
nd fo
rmal
text
s th
ey d
isp
lay.
Sha
red
text
, sen
tenc
e an
d w
ord
leve
l
Sha
red
read
ing
of in
form
al e
xpla
natio
n (R
esou
rce
shee
t 8a)
. Dis
cuss
an
d e
nsur
e ch
ildre
n un
der
stan
d th
e ca
usal
, acc
umul
ativ
e se
que
nce.
Ask
whe
ther
it is
a fo
rmal
or i
nfor
mal
exp
lana
tion
and
how
they
kno
w.
Ann
otat
e in
form
al fe
atur
es. G
et th
em to
reca
p fe
atur
es o
f for
mal
lang
uage
. Not
e th
at e
ven
in th
is in
form
al e
xpla
natio
n th
e st
ruct
ure
is
of s
tate
men
t of w
hat i
s go
ing
to b
e ex
pla
ined
, fol
low
ed b
y se
que
nce
of e
vent
s w
ith c
ausa
l lin
ks. L
ook
at th
e co
mp
lex
sent
ence
‘The
n, w
hen
I tol
d h
im o
ff, m
y m
um…
’Try
mov
ing
sub
ord
inat
e cl
ause
aro
und
usi
ngw
hite
boa
rds.
Dis
cuss
pun
ctua
tion.
Dis
cuss
how
this
exp
lana
tion
mig
ht
be
writ
ten
if it
was
a fo
rmal
exp
lana
tion
to a
hea
dte
ache
r. W
hat w
ould
b
e th
e sa
me/
diff
eren
t? D
emon
stra
tion-
writ
e th
e op
enin
g p
arag
rap
h of
lett
erto
hea
dte
ache
r (R
esou
rce
shee
ts 8
c an
d 8
d).
Sha
red
read
ing
of s
choo
l acc
iden
t exp
lana
tion
(Res
ourc
e sh
eet 9
a).
Dis
cuss
str
uctu
re a
nd fo
rmal
feat
ures
. Ask
chi
ldre
n to
iden
tify
com
ple
xse
nten
ces
and
exp
erim
ent w
ith m
ovin
g cl
ause
s. D
iscu
ss h
ow c
omp
lex
sent
ence
s al
low
you
to a
dd
pre
cise
det
ail t
o a
sent
ence
and
why
this
isim
por
tant
in e
xpla
natio
ns. S
elec
t the
pas
sive
sen
tenc
e in
the
text
and
reca
p p
rinci
ple
s (G
fW U
nits
45/
48).
Dis
cuss
why
hea
dte
ache
r mig
ht h
ave
used
pas
sive
voi
ce h
ere
– no
age
nt, n
ot a
scrib
ing
bla
me
/neu
tral
. Sho
who
w th
is a
ccou
nt c
ould
be
writ
ten
as a
ser
ies
of n
otes
ont
o a
flow
cha
rt(R
esou
rce
shee
t 9c)
, whi
ch s
how
s th
e p
aral
lel s
erie
s of
eve
nts.
Rea
d te
xt o
n vo
lcan
oes
(Res
ourc
e sh
eet 1
0a).
Poi
nt o
ut th
at th
e p
revi
ous
two
exp
lana
tions
hav
e b
een
pas
t ten
se (a
s ex
pla
inin
g ev
ents
that
hav
eha
pp
ened
). W
hat t
ense
is th
is?
Why
? A
naly
se a
nd a
nnot
ate
stru
ctur
al
and
lang
uage
feat
ures
of e
xpla
natio
n. L
ist t
echn
ical
voc
abul
ary
and
ask
child
ren
to s
ugge
st s
trat
egie
s th
ey c
ould
use
to re
mem
ber
how
to s
pel
lth
ese
wor
ds.
Exp
lain
ind
epen
den
t tas
k an
d m
odel
how
to q
uick
ly a
sses
sa
boo
k fo
r its
use
fuln
ess.
Rer
ead
the
volc
ano
open
ing
par
agra
ph
(Res
ourc
e sh
eet 1
0a).
Dem
onst
ratio
n-w
rite
the
open
ing
sent
ence
s of
an
eart
hqua
keex
pla
natio
n, ta
king
con
tent
from
the
child
ren’
s no
tes
or u
sing
Res
ourc
esh
eet 1
1 as
a m
odel
. Tal
k ab
out f
orm
al a
nd te
chni
cal l
angu
age/
tens
e/us
eof
pas
sive
sen
tenc
es a
s yo
u co
mp
ose.
Dis
cuss
wha
t fol
low
ing
par
agra
phs
of t
he e
xpla
natio
n m
ight
con
tain
an
d p
rod
uce
a lis
t of p
arag
rap
hs.
Use
vol
cano
text
(Res
ourc
e sh
eet 1
0a) t
o d
iscu
ss th
e en
din
g of
exp
lana
tion
text
. Dra
w a
tten
tion
to th
e ‘d
ual’
end
ing,
i.e.
the
end
ing
of th
e ca
usal
/seq
uent
ial e
xpla
natio
n b
ut a
lso
som
e ge
nera
l com
men
ts
to ro
und
off
the
text
.C
reat
e w
ord
fam
ily fr
om e
rup
t(er
uptio
n, ru
ptu
re, d
isru
pt,
etc
.).
Resources
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Year 6 Planning Exemplification 2002–2003Formal and Explanation Writing Unit
Lesson notes for day 1 Background
If possible have available examples of real invitations in a variety of forms and registers – from
formal to informal – for a range of events. Also have available for later in the week a collection
of official leaflets and pamphlets that pupils might encounter such as those in libraries, surgeries
and post offices.
Whole class
• Ask the class about their experiences of receiving invitations. After discussion, ask
what key information an invitation needs to tell you and why. Scribe suggestions.
• Make the point that invitations to the same event can be framed in different ways.
Show Resource sheet 2a on an OHT and read together.
• Using Resource sheet 2b, identify the key information as scribed on your list, annotating this
on Resource sheet 2a. Can they add any further key information from their reading
of Resource sheet 2a (e.g. dress code)?
• Show Resource sheet 2c on OHT. Read together and check children understand that
it is for the same event and gives the same information in a different way.
• Discuss how the invitations are different and the impact of each. Introduce the concept
of formal/informal.
• Using Resource sheet 2d, annotate the formal words, phrases and layout of Resource
sheet 2c.
• Model filling in an example of contrasting language used in Resource sheet 2a
and Resource sheet 2c on a comparative grid (see Resource sheet 2e).
Independent time
• Ask children to work in pairs to highlight key information on both invitations and complete
the comparative grid. They should first identify words and phrases relating to the key
information identified on the class list but can add anything further if they wish.
• As an extension activity they can write definitions for some of the formal words and phrases
identified or they could analyse other invitation texts if you have collected examples.
Plenary
• Use suggestions from the children’s work to complete more of the grid started in the shared
work. Then ask them to summarise some of the differences between formal and informal
texts (choice of vocabulary, contractions, slang words and colloquial phrases not used,
stock phrases, e.g. ‘request the pleasure of the company’, ‘RSVP’).
• Use demonstration-writing to model how to create a glossary entry for one of the stock
phrases, e.g. ‘coming of age’. Others can then be undertaken for homework.
Transcript day 1Put your hand up if you know what these are …… .Yes. Who’s received aninvitation of some kind? Tell us about it …… . OK, so lots of invitations, to lotsof different events. Now just talk to your partner for a minute and decide whatvital information does an invitation have to contain? What do you need to knowif the invitation is going to work properly? …… Let’s have some suggestions …… .Well, we’ve got quite a list here. What is it to? Who from? Who to? Where? When(date)? When (time)? What is being celebrated? …… Is it always a celebration?
Lesson notes and transcripts for days 1, 2, 6 and 7
…… OK, often but not always. Now we’re going to look at some invitations.Here’s the first one. Let’s read it together ……
Good. Do you think these people know each other well? …… Why do you thinkthat? …… Yes. It’s friendly isn’t it? They are related to each other. How do youknow? …… And yes, it’s got the word ‘favourite’. Does it answer all the questionson our list? Have a minute with your partner to check …… Yes, you’re right.All those and more information. What other information is there? …… It tells youwhat to wear and what’s going to happen. Why is it helpful to know there isgoing to be food? …… and dancing? …… and what to wear? …… Yes, that’s right.We call it the ‘dress code’. So the dress code for you at school is your uniform.It says what you can or cannot wear. Have you seen a dress code mentionedanywhere? …… Yes, some pubs say ‘No trainers’. Let’s add dress code, food,and events (e.g. dancing) to our list of key information.
Right. That’s one invitation. Let’s look at another invitation and read it together…… Well done. It sounds very different but what’s the connection between thesetwo? …… Yes, it’s the same event …… and the same people …… Yes, the sameinvitation but written in a very different way. How are they different? …… Yes,I suppose you could say ‘posher’. Can you explain what you mean? …… So giveme an example …… Joe and Joseph/Ellie and Eleanor. We say one is formal andthe other informal. That’s one of our objectives for this week. Looking at formallanguage and when we might use it or see it being used.
What’s the formal phrase in this invitation, that means we would like you tocome? …… Decide with your partner …… Come and underline it. Yes, ‘requeststhe pleasure of the company of’. That’s not something you say every day is it.I request the pleasure of your company to walk to school with me. Would yousay that? No, you’d say I’d like you to walk to school with me.
We’ll look at some more formal phrases and words in a minute but with yourpartner just check that this formal invitation contains all our key informationand does it add any more? …… Gives those and more – more details – the halladdress …… ‘RSVP’ …… What does that mean? …… Yes, it’s from the French‘Répondez s’il vous plaît’ – reply, if you please. Does the informal invitation askfor a reply? …… OK, underline it for me.
We’ll list these two examples under formal/informal and start a comparative chart…… Let’s do one more comparison …… Who is it to? And what’s the comparisonin how that is expressed? …… nicknames and …… full names. First name only and…… surnames. You’re going to carry on with this comparison in pairs in a fewminutes but we’ll just do one more thing together first.
With your partner I want you to identify all the words and phrases in this invitationthat you think are formal or posh as Sam called it …… Right, let’s underline them.Barry? …… Well we’ve got quite a few, haven’t we. You’re going to go off andwork on the comparative chart and you’ll match up some of these formal wordsand phrases with words and phrases in the informal invitation. That will help youwork out what they mean and we’ll check it out when we get back together.
Let’s just check you’re all clear what I want you to do with the chart I’m handingout? …… Fine, off you go.
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Year 6 Planning Exemplification 2002–2003Formal and Explanation Writing Unit
Lesson notes and transcripts for days 1, 2, 6 and 7
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Year 6 Planning Exemplification 2002–2003Formal and Explanation Writing Unit
Lesson notes for day 2Shared work
• Ask the children to recall the key information needed on an invitation and check against
the list created yesterday.
• Ask them to recall features of a formal invitation and some of the stock phrases.
• Undertake a shared read of the ball report (Resource sheet 3a).
• Ask the children to reread it bearing in mind the key information needed on an invitation.
• In pairs, ask them to record this key information in note form on whiteboards. Use the list
to structure their notes. Using Resource sheet 3b, check their boards.
• Select one or two pairs and ask them to explain how they have organised their notes
and why. An efficient way to do this would be to use the key information list but there
may be other suggestions.
• Explain independent task (to create the formal invitation for this event) using formal
words/phrases/layout.
• Take some of the homework, glossary definitions of formal phrases /words if this was
set as a homework task.
• Write the word accompanied (from Resource sheet 3a) and ask the children to identify
the prefix/suffix /root word. Remind them of company from Resource sheet 2c.
• Create the word family from the root word, stressing the linking meaning of together,
being with others.
Independent work
• Using their notes, the children write a formal invitation for the event. They must include
some of the stock phrases identified in Resource sheet 2c and must think about layout.
• An extension activity is to write an informal invitation for the same event.
Plenary
Share examples and assess against Resource sheet 2c to see if correct information is included,
formal language used and layout considered.
Transcript day 2Everyone settled? Fine. Now, who can remind me what we did yesterday? ……Great. You have remembered a lot. And how did that relate to our objectivesfor this week? …… That’s right, formal language. We’re going to carry on thinkingabout that all week and today we’re also going to create a word family to helpus with our spelling.
Let’s carry on thinking about invitations first of all. You’ve reminded me of thelist of key information that invitations include. Have any of you read accountsof parties or other celebrations in magazines or seen them on television? ……Yes, award parties …… your mum’s ‘OK’ magazine, Jubilee parties reported inlocal newspapers. Yes, that kind of thing. Well here’s an account of a big event.Let’s read it together ……
Good. Read it through again to yourself and give me a nod when you’ve gotto the end …… Excellent. I wonder what the invitation to that ball looked like.Any thoughts? Formal? Informal? …… Right. Why do you think that …… ?Anything else?……Thick card and gold printing …… That’s likely …… Yes, couldbe. Well lots of ideas. You sound as though you have a clear picture in your heads.
Lesson notes and transcripts for days 1, 2, 6 and 7
Now here’s our list of key information from yesterday. Can you read it through forme, Amyl? What we need to know from an invitation. …… Very good. What doesdress code mean? …… That’s right. Now I want you to work with a partner andmake notes from this account to gather all this key information on our list. Youmight have to think carefully and work some of it out as it isn’t always obvious.Reread the text if you don’t find the answer straightaway. Ask yourself if it’shidden in there. Remember notes – just the minimum amount you need. Nothingextra. You’ve a few minutes for this so go back to your desks and make the notesin your jottings book. Then we’ll get back together ……
Fine. I’m not going to go through it all – just a couple. OK, so how do you knowwhen it finished? It doesn’t tell you directly …… Brilliant, you worked it out fromthe four hours of dancing. Do you all see how Sally got that answer? What aboutfood? Was there anything to eat? How do you know? And finally what about dresscode? And your evidence for that? ……
Now in independent work you are going to use your notes and your work fromyesterday to write a formal invitation to this ball. You’ll have to include some of the formal words and phrases we looked at yesterday and which you thoughtabout for homework. Let’s quickly run through the homework ……
So you’re all set to write the formal invitation but just before you do that let’sspend a few minutes on our spelling objective. Have a look at this word from theaccount – ‘accompanied’. Can anyone mark off the prefix and suffix? …… So whatabout the ‘i’? Will the word still end in ‘i’? So if we take off the ‘ed’ it becomes ……Yes, it goes back to a ‘y’.
What word are we left with? – ‘company’. Remember that from yesterday? ……requests …… the pleasure of the ‘company’ …… So here’s our root word‘company’. What does it mean ? …… Being together, with other people …… Yes,it can be a business too, a group of people who work together …… Or a companyin the army, a certain number of soldiers. Any other words that have company ora bit of company in them? …… companion, accompanists, companiable, …..unaccompanied. What happened to the ‘y’? How does that change? Is there a rule? … compare (Yes, that’s about at least two things, isn’t it.) comparable, comparative.
Why do you think there is a double ‘c’ in ‘accompanied’? Well done, Len. Whichother word have you learned with the ‘ac’ prefix? Yes, ‘accommodation’ – manypeople get that word wrong.
Excellent. You’ve done very well. If any more crop up during the week we can addthem. Remember, this bit is the root. How many letter ‘c’, ‘m’ and ‘n’? What does itmean? See if you can remember these meaning links to help you with spelling.
OK, off you go now and do your invitations. Everyone clear about what they have to do? Think about the formal language and layout. Use your notes and anything from yesterday.
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Year 6 Planning Exemplification 2002–2003Formal and Explanation Writing Unit
Lesson notes and transcripts for days 1, 2, 6 and 7
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Year 6 Planning Exemplification 2002–2003Formal and Explanation Writing Unit
Lesson notes for day 6 Whole class
• Undertake shared reading of Resource sheet 8a. Ensure children can identify
causal relationships within the text and how the sequential series of events
is also a cumulative explanation.
• Discuss the informal language features within this text and annotate
(see Resource sheet 8b).
• Ask them to recall formal language features and relate to text being studied,
e.g. formal language – might use ‘difficult’ day rather than ‘bad’ day.
• Point out the explanation structure and annotate. Note how the use of paragraphs
relates to new stages in the explanation.
• Look at the complex sentence ‘Then, when I told him off, my mum…’. Ask children
to identify the subordinate clause and its punctuation.
• On whiteboards, ask the children to rewrite the sentence moving the subordinate clause.
• Show me. Get children to explain the punctuation of their new sentence.
• Discuss how this explanation might be written if it was a formal explanation
to a headteacher. What would be the same/different?
• Demonstration-write the opening paragraph of letter to heateacher (using Resource sheets
8c and 8d).
Independent time
• Ask the children to continue to write/complete the formal explanation to the headteacher.
• Encourage them to include formal phrases and vocabulary.
• Stress the use of logical and sequential structure of this explanation and how this
is reflected in the use of paragraphs.
Plenary
• Show Resource sheet 8c on the OHT, as one possible formal letter.
• Get them to identify formal features
– structure
– sequence
– how the explanation is ended
– use of temporal and causal connectives
– use of paragraphs
• Ask how this version is different from the informal version.
• Ask them to share their own letters with a writing response partner and decide if they
can improve their letters in the light of this example/discussion.
• If time, share some of the revisions they have made and reasons why.
Lesson notes and transcripts for days 1, 2, 6 and 7
Lesson notes for day 7Shared work
• Ask the children to read the school accident explanation (Resource sheet 9a).
• Discuss the text and ensure they understand the sequence of events and causal links.
Some of these are implied e.g. the slowing down of the bike/light injuries.
• Ask them if this is a formal explanation or an informal one. Ask them to identify formal
features (Resource sheet 9b) and annotate these.
• Ask them to identify the explanation structure and any language features of an explanation
text. Annotate these. Note: Some of this explanation is in the past tense as it is describing
an accident that has happened. The last two paragraphs relate to a process and are in
the present tense.
• Ask the children to identify some complex sentences. Discuss how these allow you
to add precise detail and why this is important in explanations.
• Ask them in pairs to move some of the clauses around, writing on their whiteboards.
Use ‘show me’ to check punctuation.
• Select the passive sentence The funnelling of the children… and recap how sentences
in the passive voice vary from those in the active voice.
• Discuss why the headteacher might have used the passive voice here (no agent, not
ascribing blame, avoiding responsibility).
• Show how this accident could be written as parallel notes of the series of events
(Resource sheet 9c) before giving out copies of Resource sheet 9d to groups of three.
• Quickly read Resource sheet 9d before setting children off on their independent work.
Independent work
• Two children take on the role of Driver A and Driver B. The third child is a police constable.
First they role-play explaining their actions to the police. Then they must collaborate
to write a formal report that will be submitted to the court, explaining the accident.
• An extension activity is to write an informal explanation for the same event.
Plenary
• Children role-play reading out their explanation to the court. Others assess for formality
and accuracy.
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Year 6 Planning Exemplification 2002–2003Formal and Explanation Writing Unit
Lesson notes and transcriptsfor days 1, 2, 6 and 7
Resource sheet 5c
OHT for analysisResource sheet Resource sheet 2aInformal invitation: OHT
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Year 6 Planning Exemplification 2002–2003Formal and Explanation Writing Unit
Phone 7659034 3 The AvenueWoodgreen
4.9.02
Dear Joe and Claire,
Just a quick note to say we are having a party nextmonth (on Saturday 12th) for Ysanne’s eighteenthbirthday. We mentioned it to you on holiday but this is just to confirm that it’s all going ahead. We hope you and the kids can all come, as we know she’d wanther Uncle Joe, Aunty Claire and her favourite cousins to be there. There’s going to be a mixture of familyand her friends, so it will be quite a big ‘do’. We’dbetter get saving!
We’ve hired the village hall and there’ll be a buffet and a disco. It’ll start at about 7.30ish. We thought itwould be fun to get really dressed up, so dig out yourbest outfits. They can be as posh as you like.
Can you let us know if all of you can make it? Weneed to let the caterers know how many there will be.
Love Ellie and Sam
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Resource sheet 2bInformal invitation: annotations
Sen
tenc
e st
ruct
ure
and
pun
ctua
tio
n
Pho
ne 7
6590
343
The
Ave
nue
Woo
dgre
en
4.9.
02
Dea
r Jo
e an
d C
laire
,
Just
a q
uick
not
e to
say
we
are
havi
ng a
par
ty
next
mon
th (
on S
atu
rday
12t
h) fo
r Y
sann
e’s
eigh
teen
th b
irth
day.
We
men
tione
d it
to y
ou o
n
holid
ay b
ut th
is is
just
to c
onfir
m th
at i
t’s a
ll go
ing
ahea
d.W
e ho
pe y
ou a
nd th
e ki
ds c
an a
ll co
me,
as w
e kn
ow s
he’d
wan
t her
Unc
le J
oe,A
unty
Cla
ire
and
her
favo
urite
cou
sins
to b
e th
ere.
The
re’s
goin
g to
be
a m
ixtu
re o
ffa
mily
and
her
frie
nds,
so
it w
ill b
e qu
ite a
big
‘do’
.We’
d be
tter
get s
avin
g!
We’
ve h
ired
the
villa
ge h
all a
nd th
ere’
ll be
a b
uffe
t
and
a di
sco.
It’ll
star
t at a
bout
7.3
0ish
.We
thou
ght i
t wou
ld b
e fu
n to
get
rea
lly d
ress
ed u
p,
so d
ig o
ut y
our
best
out
fits.
The
y ca
n be
as
posh
as y
ou li
ke.
Can
you
let u
s kn
ow if
all o
fyo
u ca
n m
ake
it? W
e
need
to le
t the
ca
tere
rs k
now
how
man
y th
ere
will
be.
Love
Elli
e an
d S
am
Text
str
uctu
re a
nd o
rgan
isat
ion
Com
plex
sent
ence
s (gi
ving
reas
ons)
Vari
ety o
f pun
ctua
tion
in
clud
ing
apos
trop
hes f
or o
miss
ion
and
posse
ssion
Info
rmal
voc
abul
ary:
•Co
lloqu
ial p
hras
es•
Slan
g•
Pers
onal
gre
etin
g an
d si
gnat
ures
(n
ame
cont
ract
ions
)
Ope
ns w
ith
a •
dire
ct st
atem
ent o
f eve
nt(c
ruci
al to
und
erst
andi
ng w
hat f
ollo
ws)
Idea
s ord
ered
into
3 p
arag
raph
s•
invi
tati
on•
even
ts•
requ
est f
or re
spon
se
Refe
renc
es b
ack
to p
revi
ous p
arag
raph
s (i
nvit
e, b
uffe
t) g
ives
clo
sure
Follo
wed
by
•in
vita
tion
to it
•
reas
ons t
o at
tend
Ad
apta
tion
Info
rmal
lang
uage
, inc
lud
ing
cont
ract
ions
,
collo
qui
al la
ngua
ge/p
hras
es a
nd s
lang
,
all c
reat
e in
form
al e
ffect
.
Pre
dom
inan
ce o
f per
sona
l pro
noun
s
emp
hasi
ses
intim
acy.
Co
mp
osi
tio
n an
d e
ffec
t
Vie
wp
oin
t
Fam
iliar
, fam
ilial
tone
mai
ntai
ned
thro
ugho
ut.
Sty
le
Con
scio
us u
se o
f sla
ng p
hras
es a
nd ‘j
okey
’
com
men
t ap
pro
pria
te to
info
rmal
text
.
Year 6 Planning Exemplification 2002–2003Formal and Explanation Writing Unit
Resource sheet 5c
OHT for analysisResource sheet Resource sheet 5c
OHT for analysis
Mr Samuel Jones & Mrs Eleanor Jones
request the pleasure of the company of
Joseph & Claire Jones and family
at a coming of age party for their daughter Ysanne
on Saturday, 12th October 200219.30 – midnight.
Buffet supper and discotheque Formal Dress Woodgreen Village Hall RSVP by Sept. 28th Woodgreen Telephone 7659034
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Sen
tenc
e st
ruct
ure
and
pun
ctua
tio
n
Mr
Sam
uel J
ones
& M
rs E
lean
or J
ones
requ
est t
he p
leas
ure
ofth
e co
mpa
ny o
f
Jose
ph &
Cla
ire J
ones
and
fam
ily
at a
com
ing
ofag
e pa
rty
for
thei
r da
ught
er
Ysa
nne
on S
atu
rday
12t
h O
ctob
er 2
002
19.3
0 –
mid
nigh
t.
Bu
ffet
su
pper
an
d d
isco
th
equ
e Fo
rma
l D
ress
Wood
gre
en V
illa
ge
Ha
ll
RSV
P b
y Se
pt. 2
8th
Wood
gre
en
Tel
eph
on
e 7
65
90
34
Text
str
uctu
re a
nd o
rgan
isat
ion
One
long
com
poun
d se
nten
ce
Wor
ds in
full
rath
er th
an in
col
loqu
ial t
erm
s
Titl
es a
nd fu
ll na
mes
/ su
rnam
es u
sed
Stoc
k fo
rmal
phr
ases
Form
al/l
egal
isti
c na
me
for t
he e
vent
Ope
ns w
ith
nam
es o
f hos
t and
gue
sts
befo
re st
atin
g ev
ent
Prec
ise
deta
ils g
iven
Use
of a
ccep
ted
acro
nym
Idea
s ord
ered
via
layo
ut ra
ther
th
an p
arag
raph
ing
Ad
apta
tion
Use
of l
angu
age,
incl
udin
g tit
les,
sto
ck p
hras
es,
crea
tes
form
al e
ffect
.
Co
mp
osi
tio
n an
d e
ffec
t
Vie
wp
oin
t
Dis
tant
form
al to
ne m
aint
aine
d th
roug
hout
.
Sty
le
Follo
ws
conv
entio
ns fu
lly.
Font
use
d fo
r em
pha
sis.
Resource sheet 2dFormal invitation: annotations
Resource sheet Resource sheet 2eComparative grid: OHT
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Year 6 Planning Exemplification 2002–2003Formal and Explanation Writing Unit
Compare what it actually says in each invitation
Informal invitation Formal invitation
Who to?
Who from?
For what event?
When?
Year 6 Planning Exemplification 2002–2003Formal and Explanation Writing Unit
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August 14th
Greenwood EchoGreenwood Town Hallwas thronged withpartygoers last night for the annual CharitySummer Ball. Localcelebrities mingled withthe guests as they dancedto the music of theSwingtime Jazz Quartetor the gentler rhythms of The Blue DanubeDance Band.
Following the champagnereception in the CouncilChamber at 7.30, guestsenjoyed wandering in the gardens before thedancing got under way at 9 o’clock. The host andhostess, Mr Alex and MrsJackie Allery, led off thedancing. Mrs Allery waslooking magnificent in afloor-length gown of redsilk whilst Mr Alex Allery
was sporting the CBE he was recently awardedin the New Year’s honourslist. Joining Mr and MrsAllery at their supper table were their invitedguests, Councillor ArunBhavara accompanied byhis wife Sunita, Dr BrianEdwards and Mrs JoyEdwards and Mr and MrsJoseph Jones.
The next four hours of non-stop dancing,fun and feasting wasenjoyed by all and thisyear’s ball was atremendous success.The raffle, with prizesgenerously donated by local businesses,raised £4000 for thecharity appeal.
Resource sheet 3Newspaper report: OHT
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Year 6 Planning Exemplification 2002–2003Formal and Explanation Writing Unit
YOUR DRIVING LICENCE
This booklet contains general information about driving licences.A licence shows entitlement to drive:• motor cars,• motorcycles,• medium/ large vehicle (3500 kg or over),• minibuses, and • buses.However, each category must be applied for,and tested, separately.
1 PHOTOCARD DRIVING LICENCES
DVLA now only issues photocard driving licences.This is to ensure road safety by eliminating impersonation at driving tests and ensuring the person driving a vehicleis qualified to do so.
The licence comes in two parts:• a photocard; showing
– the driver’s photograph and signature which is electronicallycopied from the application form,
– categories of vehicles the driver is entitled to drive.• a paper counterpart; showing
– details of any endorsements,– in the case of a full licence holder, any provisional
entitlement held.
Note: You must produce both the photocard and counterpart ifrequested by the police or a court.You should also present both partswhen taking a driving test. You may find that other organisations suchas car hire firms and insurance companies will ask to see both parts.
Taken from leaflet D100 What you need to know about driving licences
Available from post offices
Resource sheet 4aDVLA leaflet extract: OHT
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Sen
tenc
e st
ruct
ure
and
pun
ctua
tio
nY
OU
R D
RIV
ING
LIC
EN
CE
Th
is b
oo
klet
co
nta
ins
gen
eral
info
rmat
ion
ab
ou
t d
rivi
ng
lice
nce
s.A
lice
nce
sh
ow
s en
titl
emen
t to
dri
ve:
•m
oto
r ca
rs,
•m
oto
rcyc
les,
•m
ediu
m/ l
arg
e ve
hic
le (3
500
kg o
r o
ver)
,•
min
ibu
ses,
and
•
bu
ses.
Ho
wev
er,e
ach
cat
ego
ry m
ust
be
app
lied
for,
and
test
ed,s
epar
atel
y.
1P
HO
TOC
AR
D D
RIV
ING
LIC
EN
CE
S
DV
LA n
ow o
nly
issu
es p
hoto
card
driv
ing
licen
ces.
Thi
sis
to e
nsur
e ro
ad s
afet
y by
elim
ina
ting
impe
rson
atio
n a
tdr
ivin
g te
sts
and
ensu
ring
the
pers
on d
rivin
g a
vehi
cle
is q
ualif
ied
to d
o so
.T
he li
cenc
e co
mes
in tw
o pa
rts:
•a
phot
ocar
d;sh
owin
g–
the
driv
er’s
pho
tog
raph
and
sig
natu
re w
hich
isel
ectr
onic
ally
cop
ied
from
the
appl
ica
tion
form
,–
cate
gorie
s of
vehi
cles
the
driv
er is
ent
itled
to d
rive.
•a
pape
r co
unte
rpar
t;sh
owin
g–
deta
ils o
fan
y en
dors
emen
ts,
–in
the
case
of
a fu
ll lic
ence
hol
der,
any
prov
isio
nal
entit
lem
ent h
eld.
No
te:Y
ou
mu
st p
rod
uce
bo
th th
e p
ho
toca
rd a
nd
co
un
terp
art i
fre
qu
este
d b
y th
e p
olic
e o
r a
cou
rt.
You
sh
ou
ld a
lso
pre
sen
t bo
th p
arts
wh
en ta
kin
g a
dri
vin
g te
st.Y
ou
may
fin
d th
at o
ther
org
anis
atio
ns,
such
as
car
hir
e fi
rms
and
insu
ran
ce c
om
pan
ies,
will
ask
to s
ee b
oth
par
ts.
Text
str
uctu
re a
nd o
rgan
isat
ion
Form
al fe
atur
es in
clud
ing:
•w
ords
in fu
ll fo
r cla
rity
•sp
ecifi
c de
tail
s•
use
of a
cron
yms
•fo
rmal
voc
abul
ary r
athe
r th
an e
very
day w
ords
•ge
neri
c pa
rtic
ipan
ts•
tech
nica
l voc
abul
ary
Use
of p
assi
ve v
oice
to g
ive
dist
ance
d fo
rmal
tone
Use
of m
odal
ver
bs to
indi
cate
mor
e te
ntat
ive
stat
emen
t
Com
plex
sent
ence
s to
add
spec
ific
deta
il
Ran
ge o
f pun
ctua
tion
incl
udin
g co
lons
an
d se
mic
olon
s, bu
llet p
oint
s and
com
mas
Expl
anat
ion
stru
ctur
e•
Stat
es w
hat i
t is
•W
hy u
sed
•Gi
ves e
xten
ded
deta
il
Layo
ut u
sed
to in
dica
te te
xtua
l str
uctu
re
•H
eadi
ngs u
sed
for c
lari
ty•
Hea
ding
s div
ide
sect
ions
like
par
agra
phs
•Bu
llets
subd
ivid
e se
ctio
ns
Prin
t fea
ture
s use
d fo
r em
phas
is•
Upp
er c
ase
for h
eadi
ngs
•Bo
ld fo
r im
port
ant i
nfor
mat
ion
•Co
lour
for e
mph
asis
Ad
apta
tion
Form
ally
cre
ated
via
rang
e of
lang
uage
feat
ures
,
incl
udin
g te
chni
cal a
nd fo
rmal
voc
abul
ary.
Co
mp
osi
tio
n an
d e
ffec
t
Vie
wp
oin
t
Imp
erso
nal t
one
thro
ugho
ut. A
dd
ress
ed to
gene
ral r
ead
er a
nd in
volv
es g
ener
ic p
artic
ipan
ts.
Sty
le
Layo
ut e
mp
hasi
ses
offic
ial s
tatu
s.
Resource sheet 4bDVLA leaflet extract: annotations
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Note 10 Countersignature
If the application requires countersigning, the applicationform must be completed before it is countersigned.
A countersignature is usually only needed if the applicationis for a first passport or to replace a lost, stolen or missingpassport. A countersignature may be needed if theapplication is for the renewal or extension of a passport and the appearance of the holder has changedconsiderably, for example if the passport was issued when they were a small child.
After the form has been completed in full, this section shouldbe completed and signed by a professional person, or aperson of standing in the community who has known you forat least two years, is resident in the UK, and holds a currentBritish passport. Examples of suitable countersignatoriesinclude Bank or Building Society Officials, Police Officers,established Civil Servants, Ministers of Religion, andpersons with professional qualifications (such as teachers,accountants, engineers, solicitors, etc). Further examplesare available on our website www.passport.gov.uk or fromthe Passport Adviceline on 0870 521 0410.
The countersignatory must hold a current Britishpassport, the number of which must be entered in the relevant space in Section 10.
Please note that a relative cannot countersign the application.From How to fill in your Passport Application form. P7
Resource sheet 5aPassport application: OHT
Year 6 Planning Exemplification 2002–2003Formal and Explanation Writing Unit
Sen
tenc
e st
ruct
ure
and
pun
ctua
tio
nN
ote
10
Co
un
ters
ign
atu
re
Ifth
e ap
plic
atio
n re
quire
s co
unte
rsig
ning
,the
app
lica
tion
form
mus
t be
com
plet
ed b
efor
e it
is c
ount
ersi
gned
.
A c
ount
ersi
gna
ture
is u
sual
ly o
nly
need
ed if
the
appl
ica
tion
is fo
r a
first
pas
spor
t or
to r
epla
ce a
lost
,sto
len
or m
issi
ng p
assp
ort.
A c
ount
ersi
gna
ture
may
be
need
ed
ifth
e ap
plic
atio
n is
for
the
rene
wal
or
exte
nsio
n of
a
pass
port
and
the
appe
aran
ce o
fth
e ho
lder
has
cha
nged
cons
ider
ably
,for
exa
mpl
e if
the
pass
port
was
issu
ed w
hen
they
wer
e a
smal
l chi
ld.
Afte
r th
e fo
rm h
as b
een
com
plet
ed in
full,
this
sec
tion
shou
ld b
e co
mpl
eted
and
sig
ned
by a
pro
fess
iona
l per
son,
or a
per
son
ofst
andi
ng in
the
com
mun
ity w
ho h
as k
now
n
you
for
at l
east
two
year
s,is
res
iden
t in
the
UK
,and
hol
ds
a cu
rren
t Brit
ish
pass
port
.Exa
mpl
es o
fsu
itabl
e
coun
ters
igna
torie
s in
clud
e B
ank
or B
uild
ing
Soc
iety
Off
icia
ls,P
olic
e O
ffic
ers,
esta
blis
hed
Civ
il S
erva
nts,
Min
iste
rs o
fR
elig
ion,
and
pers
ons
with
pro
fess
iona
l
qual
ifica
tions
(su
ch a
s te
ache
rs,a
ccou
ntan
ts,e
ngin
eers
,
solic
itors
,etc
).F
urth
er e
xam
ples
are
ava
ilabl
e on
our
web
site
ww
w.p
assp
ort.g
ov.u
k or
from
the
Pas
spor
t
Adv
icel
ine
on 0
870
521
0410
.
Th
e co
un
ters
ign
ato
ry m
ust
ho
ld a
cu
rren
t Bri
tish
pas
spo
rt,t
he
nu
mb
er o
fw
hic
h m
ust
be
ente
red
in
the
rele
van
t sp
ace
in S
ecti
on
10.
Ple
ase
note
tha
t a r
ela
tive
cann
ot c
ount
ersi
gn
the
appl
ica
tion.
Text
str
uctu
re a
nd o
rgan
isat
ion
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Use
of m
odal
ver
bs to
indi
cate
m
ore
tent
ativ
e st
atem
ent
Form
al fe
atur
es in
clud
ing:
•fo
rmal
voc
abul
ary r
athe
r tha
n ev
eryd
ay w
ords
•pr
ecise
voc
abul
ary w
ith
lega
l im
plic
atio
ns•
wor
ds in
full
for c
lari
ty•
spec
ific
deta
ils
•ge
neri
c pa
rtic
ipan
ts
Com
plex
sent
ence
to a
dd sp
ecifi
c de
tail
Ran
ge o
f pun
ctua
tion
incl
udin
g co
mm
as in
list
Rhe
tori
cal u
se o
f ‘pl
ease
’Fo
rmal
stoc
k ph
rase
Cont
ent d
ivid
ed in
to p
arag
raph
s, ea
ch p
rese
ntin
g a
new
idea
Prin
t fea
ture
s use
d fo
r em
phas
is•
Hea
ding
s•
Bold
for i
mpo
rtan
t inf
orm
atio
n•
Colo
ur fo
r em
phas
is
Ad
apta
tion
Form
ally
cre
ated
via
rang
e of
lang
uage
feat
ures
,
incl
udin
g te
chni
cal a
nd fo
rmal
voc
abul
ary.
Co
mp
osi
tio
n an
d e
ffec
t
Vie
wp
oin
t
Imp
erso
nal t
one
thro
ugho
ut. A
dd
ress
ed to
gene
ral r
ead
er a
nd in
volv
es g
ener
ic p
artic
ipan
ts.
Sty
le
Layo
ut e
mp
hasi
ses
offic
ial s
tatu
s.
Expl
anat
ion
stru
ctur
e•
Expl
ains
whe
n si
gnat
ure
need
ed•
How
it sh
ould
be
done
•Gi
ves d
etai
ls
Resource sheet 5bPassport application: annotations
Resource sheet 5c
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3 The AvenueWoodgreen
7.10.02
Dear Customer Services,
Your train service is awful. I was really late for my plane so you should give me my money back.
We could have had more information. We didn’t reallyknow what was happening. You should have newertrains and then they wouldn’t break down. I was veryupset and I think you should do better.
My ticket is with this letter. Please send me a chequefor the fare.
Yours sincerelyJoe Jones
Year 6 Planning Exemplification 2002–2003Formal and Explanation Writing Unit
Resource sheet 6bInformal letter of complaint: annotations
Sen
tenc
e st
ruct
ure
and
pun
ctua
tio
n
3 T
he A
venu
e
Woo
dgre
en
7.10
.02
Dea
r C
usto
mer
Ser
vice
s,
Your
trai
n se
rvic
e is
aw
ful.
I was
rea
lly la
te fo
r
my
plan
e so
you
sho
uld
give
me
my
mon
ey b
ack.
We
coul
d ha
ve h
ad m
ore
info
rma
tion.
We
didn
’t
real
ly k
now
wha
t was
hap
peni
ng.Y
ou s
houl
d
have
new
er tr
ains
and
then
they
wou
ldn’
t bre
ak
dow
n.I w
as v
ery
upse
t and
I th
ink
you
shou
ld
do b
ette
r an
d gi
ve m
e m
y m
oney
bac
k.
My
ticke
t is
with
this
lette
r.P
leas
e se
nd m
e
a ch
eque
for
the
fare
.
Your
s si
ncer
ely,
Joe
Jone
s
Text
str
uctu
re a
nd o
rgan
isat
ion
Use
of s
impl
e ad
verb
and
adj
ecti
ve
Sim
ple
and
com
poun
d se
nten
ces s
o ca
usal
link
s no
t ful
ly d
evel
oped
Lack
of d
etai
l lea
ds to
am
bigu
ity
Info
rmal
con
trac
tion
Info
rmal
nam
e
Sim
ple
punc
tuat
ion
3 pa
ragr
aphs
•In
trod
ucti
on•
Dev
elop
men
t•
Requ
est f
or a
ctio
n bu
t not
dev
elop
ed
Ad
apta
tion
Info
rmal
lang
uage
, inc
lud
ing
cont
ract
ions
,
ever
yday
voc
abul
ary,
insu
lt.
Pre
dom
inan
ce o
f per
sona
l pro
noun
s
emp
hasi
ses
intim
acy.
Co
mp
osi
tio
n an
d e
ffec
t
Vie
wp
oin
t
Str
ong
per
sona
l res
pon
se m
aint
aine
d.
Sty
le
Und
erd
evel
oped
sty
le, l
acki
ng in
det
ails
that
wou
ld a
dd
con
vict
ion
to th
e co
mp
lain
t.
Lett
er n
ot se
t out
form
ally
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Resource sheet 5c
OHT for analysisResource sheet Resource sheet 6cFormal letter of complaint: OHT
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Year 6 Planning Exemplification 2002–2003Formal and Explanation Writing Unit
Customer Services 3 The AvenueCoastrail PLC WoodgreenWoodford 7.10.02WF3 2MT
Dear Sir or Madam,
On Friday 4 October 2002, I travelled on the 09.36 from Woodgreen to Gatwick. The train was due to arrive in Gatwick at 11.00 but was anhour and twenty minutes late on arrival due to the train’s engine failing.We had to wait for the arrival of another engine to push us into the nextstation, where we had to change onto another train.
As a consequence of this late arrival, I was late for my flight check-inand was only allowed onto the plane thanks to the cooperation of theairline staff. Needless to say I was made very distressed and anxiousby this failure of your service. The anxiety was made worse by the lackof information we were given by your train staff.
I understand that the engine that failed dates from the 1960s. In spite of maintenance programmes, such old rolling stock must be unreliable.I am very surprised that your company continues to use such oldequipment. I think it increases your responsibility for the delay.
I am enclosing my ticket for the journey. I expect a full refund of the fareand some monetary compensation for the inconvenience and anxiety I suffered as a result of your inadequate service. I shall expect yourcheque within fourteen days of this letter.
Yours faithfully
J. M. Jones
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Resource sheet 6dFormal letter of complaint: annotations
Sen
tenc
e st
ruct
ure
and
pun
ctua
tio
nTe
xt s
truc
ture
and
org
anis
atio
n
Com
plex
sent
ence
s to
add
spec
ific
deta
il
Form
al fe
atur
es in
clud
ing:
•sp
ecifi
c de
tail
s•
form
al v
ocab
ular
y rat
her
than
eve
ryda
y wor
ds•
voca
bula
ry w
ith
lega
l im
plic
atio
ns
Ran
ge o
f pun
ctua
tion
incl
udin
g co
mm
as in
com
plex
sent
ence
s
Emph
atic
ver
bs g
ive
auth
orit
y
Form
al st
ock
phra
se
Para
grap
hs in
trod
uce
new
idea
s/in
form
atio
n•
Intr
oduc
tion
– d
etai
ls of
pro
blem
•Re
sult
of p
robl
em•
Stat
es v
iew
poin
t•
Stat
es a
ctio
n re
quir
ed
Cohe
sion
via
cau
sal l
inks
Refe
renc
es b
ack
•to
1st
par
agra
ph•
to 1
st a
nd 2
nd p
arag
raph
s
Ad
apta
tion
Use
of l
angu
age,
incl
udin
g tit
les,
sto
ck p
hras
es,
etc.
, cre
ates
form
al e
ffect
.
Co
mp
osi
tio
n an
d e
ffec
t
Vie
wp
oin
t
Form
al s
tanc
e m
aint
aine
d th
roug
hout
but
per
sona
l ton
e al
so e
vid
ent.
Sty
le
Follo
ws
form
al c
onve
ntio
ns.
Font
use
d fo
r em
pha
sis.
Lett
er se
t out
form
ally
, wit
h fo
rmal
op
enin
gs a
nd c
losu
res
Cus
tom
er S
ervi
ces
3 T
he A
venu
e
Coa
stra
il P
LCW
oodg
reen
Woo
dfor
d 7.
10.0
2
WF
3 2M
T
Dea
r S
ir or
Mad
am,
On
Frid
ay 4
Oct
ober
200
2,I t
rave
lled
on th
e 09
.36
from
Woo
dgre
en to
Ga
twic
k.T
he tr
ain
was
due
to a
rriv
e in
Ga
twic
k a
t 11.
00 b
ut w
as a
n ho
ur
and
twen
ty m
inut
es la
te o
n ar
rival
due
to th
e tr
ain’
s en
gine
faili
ng.W
e ha
d
to w
ait f
or th
e ar
rival
of
anot
her
engi
ne to
pus
h us
into
the
next
sta
tion,
whe
re w
e ha
d to
cha
nge
onto
ano
ther
trai
n.
As
a co
nseq
uenc
e of
this
late
arr
ival
,I w
as la
te fo
r m
y fli
ght c
heck
-in a
nd
was
onl
y al
low
ed o
nto
the
plan
e th
anks
to th
e co
oper
atio
n of
the
airl
ine
staf
f.
Nee
dles
s to
say
I w
as m
ade
very
dis
tres
sed
and
anxi
ous
by th
is fa
ilure
ofyo
ur s
ervi
ce.T
he a
nxie
ty w
as m
ade
wor
se b
y th
e la
ck o
fin
form
atio
n
we
wer
e gi
ven
by y
our
trai
n st
aff.
I und
erst
and
tha
t the
eng
ine
tha
t fai
led
date
s fr
om th
e 19
60s.
In s
pite
ofm
aint
enan
ce p
rog
ram
mes
,suc
h ol
d ro
lling
sto
ck m
ust b
e un
relia
ble.
I am
ver
y su
rpris
ed th
at y
our
com
pany
con
tinue
s to
use
suc
h ol
d eq
uipm
ent.
I thi
nk it
incr
ease
s yo
ur r
espo
nsib
ility
for
the
dela
y.
I am
enc
losi
ng m
y tic
ket f
or th
e jo
urne
y.I e
xpec
t a fu
ll re
fund
of
the
fare
and
som
e m
onet
ary
com
pens
atio
n fo
r th
e in
conv
enie
nce
and
anxi
ety
I suf
fere
d
as a
res
ult o
fyo
ur in
adeq
uate
ser
vice
.
I sha
ll ex
pect
you
r ch
eque
with
in fo
urte
en d
ays
ofth
is le
tter.
Your
s fa
ithfu
lly,
J.M
.Jon
es
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Resource sheet 7Complaint scenario: OHT
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Year 6 Planning Exemplification 2002–2003Formal and Explanation Writing Unit
Something to complain about
You went out for a meal on Saturday lunchtime withthree friends, as a birthday treat. You wanted to go on your own with your friends. You have been to thecafé before with adults and have had a nice meal.
When you got there the waiter put you at a tabletucked in a tiny alcove, even though there were lots of empty tables. It was crowded with four people at it.They were very slow to serve you and you had to waita long time. When your meal arrived the chips wereburnt. The waiter must have known but did not sayanything. They did not offer you any sauces or breadalthough you noticed that they did give these to adultseating in the café. You did not have a pudding thereand left to get an ice cream elsewhere as you felt so unwelcome. You were not being silly or noisy.
You were very disappointed and upset and thoughtthey were only treating you that way because you were young people. When you got home yourmum suggested you should write to the owner and complain.
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Resource sheet 8aInformal explanation: OHT
I’m in real trouble because I’m late for school again.Oh, it’s been a really bad morning – everything wentwrong. I’m fed up. My family are so irritating.
My greedy brother took all the cereal and ate itbefore we noticed. Then, when I told him off, my mum got cross with me for causing an argument in the morning. Was that fair or was that fair? I had to run to the corner shop to get some more as my mum said I had to eat something.
We would still have just been on time but then mystupid brother couldn’t find his reading book and we all had to rush round the house looking for it. It was under the settee ‘cos he drops everything on the floor.
So by then we were late already and then the carwouldn’t start. My mum got in a real strop andshouted at me again because I said I’d be late and Mr Jones had warned me that if I was late once more I’d be in big trouble. It’s not my fault.
Luckily our next-door neighbour offered us a lift but because we were later than usual the traffic wasawful. And he only dropped us at the end of the roadso we had to walk the last bit, which took an extrafive minutes.
My mum went with my brother to explain but she saidI was big enough to explain for myself. Is that fair oris that fair?
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Year 6 Planning Exemplification 2002–2003Formal and Explanation Writing Unit
Resource sheet 8bInformal explanation: annotations
Sen
tenc
e st
ruct
ure
and
pun
ctua
tio
nI’
m in
rea
l tro
uble
bec
ause
I’m
late
for
sch
ool a
gain
.O
h, it
’s be
en a
rea
lly b
ad m
orni
ng –
ever
ythi
ng w
ent
wron
g. I
’m f
ed u
p. M
y fa
mily
are
so
irri
tati
ng.
My
gree
dy b
roth
er t
ook
all t
he c
erea
l and
ate
it b
efor
ewe
not
iced
. The
n, w
hen
I to
ld h
im o
ff, m
y m
um g
otcr
oss
with
me
for
caus
ing
an a
rgum
ent
in t
he m
orni
ng.
Was
tha
t fa
ir o
r wa
s th
at f
air?
I h
ad t
o ru
n to
the
corn
er s
hop
to g
et s
ome
mor
e as
my
mum
sai
d I
had
to e
at s
omet
hing
.
We
woul
d st
ill h
ave
just
bee
n on
tim
e bu
t th
en m
yst
upid
bro
ther
cou
ldn’
t fi
nd h
is r
eadi
ng b
ook
and
we
all h
ad t
o ru
sh r
ound
the
hou
se lo
okin
g fo
r it
. It
was
unde
r th
e se
ttee
‘cos
he
drop
s ev
eryt
hing
on
the
floo
r.
So b
y th
en w
e we
re la
te a
lrea
dy a
nd t
hen
the
car
woul
dn’t
star
t. M
y m
um g
ot in
a r
eal s
trop
and
sho
uted
at m
e ag
ain
beca
use
I sa
id I
’d b
e la
te a
nd M
r Jo
nes
had
warn
ed m
e th
at if
I w
as la
te o
nce
mor
e I’
d be
inbi
gtr
oubl
e. I
t’s n
ot m
y fa
ult.
Luck
ily o
ur n
ext-
door
nei
ghbo
ur o
ffer
ed u
s a
lift
but
beca
use
we w
ere
late
r th
an u
sual
the
tra
ffic
was
awfu
l. A
nd h
e on
ly d
ropp
ed u
s at
the
end
of
the
road
so
we
had
to w
alk
the
last
bit
, whi
ch t
ook
an e
xtra
fi
ve m
inut
es.
My
mum
wen
t wi
th m
y br
othe
r to
exp
lain
to
his
teac
her
but
she
said
I w
as b
ig e
noug
h to
exp
lain
for
mys
elf.
Is
tha
t fa
ir o
r is
tha
t fa
ir?
Text
str
uctu
re a
nd o
rgan
isat
ion
Caus
al c
onne
ctiv
es
Com
plex
sent
ence
, add
s det
ail
Tem
pora
l con
nect
ives
Rhe
tori
cal q
uest
ion
Info
rmal
lang
uage
•Co
ntra
ctio
ns•
Slan
g•
Catc
hphr
ases
Vari
ety o
f pun
ctua
tion
incl
udin
g:•
com
mas
mar
king
subo
rdin
ate
clau
ses
•da
sh•
ques
tion
mar
ks
Follo
wed
by s
peci
fic e
vent
s and
thei
r con
sequ
ence
sN
ew p
arag
raph
s use
d to
sign
al a
furt
her r
easo
n
Caus
al a
nd ti
me
links
bac
k to
pre
viou
s par
agra
phs
End
of c
ausa
l exp
lana
tion
Fina
l par
agra
ph ro
unds
off
text
Ad
apta
tion
Lang
uage
cho
ice,
cat
chp
hras
es, e
tc.
app
rop
riate
to in
form
al te
xt.
Pre
dom
inan
ce o
f per
sona
l pro
noun
s
emp
hasi
ses
intim
acy.
Co
mp
osi
tio
n an
d e
ffec
t
Vie
wp
oin
t
Con
sist
ent a
ttitu
de
and
tone
thro
ugho
ut –
not t
o b
lam
e, o
ther
s at
faul
t.
Sty
le
Use
of r
heto
rical
que
stio
n to
gai
n
sym
pat
hy/a
pp
eal t
o th
e re
ader
.
Intr
oduc
tion
sets
up
expl
anat
ion
and
give
s ge
nera
l rea
sons
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Resource sheet 8cFormal explanation: OHT
Dear Mrs Elliot,
Mr Jones told me to write a letter to you explaining why I was late for school this morning. He has asked me to do this as I have been late five times this month.
I was late again this morning because several things wentwrong and each of them made me a little bit later. Eachproblem only caused a few minutes delay but altogetherthey caused me to be twenty minutes late.
Firstly, I was late eating my breakfast as we had run out of the only cereal I will eat. This meant I had to go to thecorner shop to get some more as my mother does not likeme to come to school without eating breakfast. She says it is not good for me to go without food until lunchtime.
We then had to find my brother’s reading book. This wasimportant as he needs to practise reading every day and so he must bring his book back to school. As my brother is untidy, I often have to help him find things he has lost.
Our car not starting caused the major loss of time. Wewould have been even later if we had had to walk but luckilywe got a lift most of the way. We did have to walk for the lastpart of the journey and so this added extra time. Also thetraffic was very busy and this made the journey a slow one.
I apologise for being late again. We will try to set the alarmclock for half an hour earlier as Mr Jones has suggested.
Yours sincerely,Sam Briggs
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Resource sheet 8dFormal explanation: annotations
Sen
tenc
e st
ruct
ure
and
pun
ctua
tio
nD
ear
Mrs
Elli
ot,
Mr
Jone
s to
ld m
e to
writ
e a
lette
r to
you
exp
lain
ing
why
I was
late
for
scho
ol th
is m
orni
ng.H
e ha
s as
ked
me
to
do th
is a
s I h
ave
been
late
five
tim
es th
is m
onth
.
I was
late
aga
in th
is m
orni
ng b
ecau
se s
ever
al th
ings
wen
t
wro
ng a
nd e
ach
ofth
em m
ade
me
a lit
tle b
it la
ter.
Eac
h
prob
lem
onl
y ca
used
a fe
w m
inut
es d
elay
but
alto
geth
er
they
cau
sed
me
to b
e tw
enty
min
utes
late
.
Firs
tly,I
was
late
ea
ting
my
brea
kfas
t as
we
had
run
out
ofth
e on
ly c
erea
l I w
ill e
at.
Thi
s m
eant
I ha
d to
go
to th
e
corn
er s
hop
to g
et s
ome
mor
e as
my
mot
her
does
not
like
me
to c
ome
to s
choo
l with
out e
atin
g br
eakf
ast.
She
say
s
it is
not
goo
d fo
r m
e to
go
with
out f
ood
until
lunc
htim
e.
We
then
had
to fi
nd m
y br
othe
r’s r
eadi
ng b
ook.
Thi
s w
as
impo
rtan
t as
he n
eeds
to p
ract
ise
read
ing
ever
y da
y an
d
so h
e m
ust b
ring
his
book
bac
k to
sch
ool.
As
my
brot
her
is u
ntid
y,I o
ften
have
to h
elp
him
find
thin
gs h
e ha
s lo
st.
The
maj
or lo
ss o
ftim
e w
as c
ause
d by
our
car
not
sta
rtin
g.
We
wou
ld h
ave
been
eve
n la
ter
ifw
e ha
d ha
d to
wal
k bu
t
luck
ily w
e go
t a li
ft m
ost o
fth
e w
ay.W
e di
d ha
ve to
wal
k
for
the
last
par
t of
the
jour
ney
and
so th
is a
dded
ext
ra
time.
Als
o th
e tr
affic
was
ver
y bu
sy a
nd th
is m
ade
the
jour
ney
a sl
ow o
ne.
I apo
logi
se fo
r be
ing
late
aga
in.W
e w
ill tr
y to
set
the
alar
m
cloc
k fo
r ha
lfan
hou
r ea
rlie
r as
Mr
Jone
s ha
s su
gges
ted.
Your
s si
ncer
ely,
Sam
Brig
gs
Text
str
uctu
re a
nd o
rgan
isat
ion
Caus
al c
onne
ctiv
es
Com
plex
sent
ence
, add
s det
ail
Tem
pora
l con
nect
ives
Passi
ve se
nten
ce
Form
al la
ngua
ge•
Titl
e an
d su
rnam
e•
Voca
bula
ry c
hoic
e
Vari
ety o
f pun
ctua
tion
incl
udin
g co
mm
as m
arki
ngsu
bord
inat
e cl
ause
s, po
ssessi
ve a
post
roph
e
Gene
ral e
xpla
nati
on
New
par
agra
phs u
sed
for s
peci
fic e
vent
s an
d th
eir c
onse
quen
ces
End
of c
ausa
l exp
lana
tion
Fina
l par
agra
ph ro
unds
off
text
and
refe
rs b
ack
toop
enin
g pa
ragr
aph
Ad
apta
tion
Lang
uage
cho
ice,
lett
er s
tyle
ap
pro
pria
te
to fo
rmal
text
.
Ap
pea
l to
head
teac
her t
hrou
gh s
tres
sing
imp
orta
nce
of re
adin
g.
Co
mp
osi
tio
n an
d e
ffec
t
Vie
wp
oin
t
Con
sist
ent a
ttitu
de
and
tone
thro
ugho
ut.
Sty
le
Wel
l str
uctu
red
into
par
apgr
aphs
.
Coh
esio
n m
aint
aine
d th
roug
h us
e of
cau
sal
and
tech
nica
l lin
ks.
Intr
oduc
tion
sets
up
expl
anat
ion
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Resource sheet 9aFormal explanation: OHT
The accident took place at 8.45 outside PetersonPrimary School and involved a child (A) riding a biketo school, in collision with a child (B) entering theinfant school. No serious injuries were caused butChild B sustained a grazed knee and Child A scrapedhis arm. Injuries were dealt with within the schoolmedical room and no further treatment was required.The bike suffered minor scratching to the paintwork.
Causes of the accident as determined byheadteacher’s investigation.
The accident appears to have been caused by:• inattention from Child A;• unexpected movement by Child B;• many children entering the school site via
one gateway;• no marked separation of cyclists and pedestrians.
At 08.40 Child B arrived at the school gateaccompanied by her mother. The pair did not enter the gate, but stopped on the pavement outside theschool to talk to a neighbour. The mother was holdingChild B’s hand but after a few minutes let go of it.Child B saw a classmate in the school playgroundand, without warning, ran through the gate headingdiagonally towards the playground.
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Resource sheet Formal explanation: OHT (continued)
Child A had left home at 8.40 to cycle to school as usual. As he approached the gate he passed a group of friends and slowed down. Turning into the school gate, he twisted his head to shout back to these friends and so was not aware of the childrunning in front of him. The resulting collisionknocked Child B over. Child A fell off his bike as a result of an abrupt stop caused by applying hisbrakes hard. He fell to one side thus scraping his rightarm. Fortunately he was wearing a cycle helmet andso suffered no head injuries.
The funnelling of all children into one entry pointcauses some crowding. This is potentially dangerousand the possibility of further entry points should be explored.
There is no clear distinction between road andpavement at the school entrance and so it is likely that cycles and pedestrians will use the same space.Clear cycle paths should be demarcated or cyclesshould be rerouted into the vehicle entrance to the school.
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Resource sheet 9bFormal explanation: annotations
Sen
tenc
e st
ruct
ure
and
pun
ctua
tio
nTe
xt s
truc
ture
and
org
anis
atio
nT
he a
ccid
ent t
ook
plac
e at
8.4
5 ou
tsid
e P
eter
son
Prim
ary
Sch
ool a
nd in
volv
ed
a ch
ild (A
) rid
ing
a bi
ke to
sch
ool,
in c
ollis
ion
with
a c
hild
(B) e
nter
ing
the
infa
nt
scho
ol.N
o se
rious
inju
ries
wer
e ca
used
but
Chi
ld B
sus
tain
ed a
gra
zed
knee
and
Chi
ld A
scr
aped
his
arm
.Inj
urie
s w
ere
deal
t with
with
in th
e sc
hool
med
ical
roo
m
and
no fu
rthe
r tre
atm
ent w
as r
equi
red.
The
bik
e su
ffer
ed m
inor
scr
atch
ing
to
the
pain
twor
k.
Cau
ses
ofth
e ac
cide
nt a
s de
term
ined
by
head
teac
her’s
inve
stig
atio
n.
The
acc
iden
t app
ears
to h
ave
been
cau
sed
by:
•in
atte
ntio
n fr
om C
hild
A;
•un
expe
cted
mov
emen
t by
Chi
ld B
;
•m
any
child
ren
ente
ring
the
scho
ol s
ite v
ia o
ne g
ate
way
;
•no
mar
ked
sepa
ratio
n of
cycl
ists
and
ped
estr
ians
.
At 0
8.40
Chi
ld B
arr
ived
at t
he s
choo
l ga
te a
ccom
pani
ed b
y he
r m
othe
r.T
he p
air
did
not e
nter
the
gate
,but
sto
pped
on
the
pave
men
t out
side
the
scho
ol to
talk
to a
nei
ghbo
ur.T
he m
othe
r w
as h
oldi
ng C
hild
B’s
han
d bu
t afte
r a
few
min
utes
let g
o of
it.C
hild
B s
aw a
cla
ssm
ate
in th
e sc
hool
pla
ygro
und
and
with
out w
arni
ng
ran
thro
ugh
the
gate
,hea
ding
dia
gona
lly to
war
ds th
e pl
ayg
roun
d.
Chi
ld A
had
left
hom
e a
t 8.4
0 to
cyc
le to
sch
ool a
s us
ual.
As
he a
ppro
ache
d
the
gate
he
pass
ed a
gro
up o
ffr
iend
s an
d sl
owed
dow
n.Tu
rnin
g in
to th
e sc
hool
gate
,he
twis
ted
his
head
to s
hout
bac
k to
thes
e fr
iend
s an
d so
was
not
aw
are
of
the
child
run
ning
in fr
ont o
fhi
m.T
he r
esul
ting
colli
sion
kno
cked
Chi
ld B
ove
r.C
hild
A fe
ll of
fhi
s bi
ke a
s a
resu
lt of
an a
brup
t sto
p ca
used
by
appl
ying
his
bra
kes
hard
.
He
fell
to o
ne s
ide
thus
scr
apin
g hi
s rig
ht a
rm.F
ortu
nate
ly h
e w
as w
earin
g a
cycl
e
helm
et a
nd s
o su
ffer
ed n
o he
ad in
jurie
s.
The
chi
ldre
n ar
e fu
nnel
led
into
one
ent
ry p
oint
and
this
cau
ses
som
e cr
owdi
ng.
Thi
s is
pot
entia
lly d
ange
rous
and
the
poss
ibili
ty o
ffu
rthe
r en
try
poin
ts s
houl
d
be e
xplo
red.
The
re is
no
clea
r di
stin
ctio
n be
twee
n ro
ad a
nd p
avem
ent a
t the
sch
ool e
ntra
nce
and
so it
is li
kely
tha
t cyc
les
and
pede
stria
ns w
ill u
se th
e sa
me
spac
e.C
lear
cyc
le
path
s sh
ould
be
dem
arca
ted
or c
ycle
s sh
ould
be
rero
uted
into
the
vehi
cle
entr
ance
to th
e sc
hool
.
Caus
al c
onne
ctiv
es
Com
plex
sent
ence
, add
s det
ail
Tem
pora
l con
nect
ives
Passi
ve se
nten
ce
Form
al la
ngua
ge•
Ano
nym
ous a
gent
s•
Voca
bula
ry c
hoic
e
Vari
ety o
f pun
ctua
tion
incl
udin
g co
lon
and
sem
icol
ons,
com
mas
m
arki
ng su
bord
inat
e cl
ause
s, po
ssessi
veap
ostr
ophe
Titl
e se
ts u
p ex
plan
atio
nPa
ra 1
Sum
mar
y exp
lana
tion
, pro
vide
s out
line
for w
hat f
ollw
s
New
par
agra
phs u
sed
for s
peci
fic e
vent
san
d th
eir c
onse
quen
ces
Fina
l 2 p
arag
raph
s rou
nd o
ff ex
plan
atio
nby
mov
ing
from
spec
ific
inci
dent
to w
ider
prob
lem
s. Re
com
men
dati
ons g
ive
som
ese
nse
of c
losu
re
Ad
apta
tion
Lang
uage
cho
ice,
lett
er s
tyle
ap
pro
pria
te
to fo
rmal
text
.
Co
mp
osi
tio
n an
d e
ffec
t
Vie
wp
oin
t
Dis
tanc
ed im
per
sona
l vie
wp
oint
mai
ntai
ned
thro
ugho
ut (a
lthou
gh fo
rtun
atel
y im
plie
s so
me
emot
iona
l eng
agem
ent).
Sty
le
Wel
l str
uctu
red
into
par
agra
phs
. Coh
esio
n
mai
ntai
ned
thro
ugh
use
of c
ausa
l and
tech
nica
l
links
bet
wee
n st
ruct
ured
and
bul
lete
d li
st.
Intr
oduc
tion
con
text
uali
ses
the
expl
anat
ion
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Resource sheet 9cFlow chart: OHT
Notes of the accident at Peterson Primary School
COLLISION
Child A
Arrives at school gate with mother
Stands at gate holdingmother’s hand
Lets go of mother’s hand
Sees friend and runsthrough gate
Child B
Leaves home to cycle to school
Sees friend asapproaches school gate
Slows down
Turns head to greet friendas turns into school gate
CAR A CAR B
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Resource sheet 9dCar accident notes: OHT
Tuesday 20th
08.55 Driver A notes carwindows iced up because of frost. Scrapes them but not completely clear
09.05 Leaves home. 5 minslate so drives quickly but roadusually very quiet until meetsmain road
09.08 Road curves. Driver A is dazzled by low sun.Sun low in the sky because it is winter
09.09 Bumps into stationarycar in middle of the road
Monday 19th
23.00 Driver B arrives home tired from long car journey. Petrol stationshut so decides to fill up in morningrather than drive to 24-hour garage
Tuesday 20th
08.45 Sets off from home. Listening to radio. Does not notice petrol gaugealmost on empty
08.55 Stuck in traffic jam.Engine idling
09.05 Car judders and splutters.Notices petrol gauge. Knows there is a garage nearby. Turns off mainroad into quiet side road
09.06 Car comes to a stop in middleof quiet road. Out of petrol
09.07 Gets out of car and phones for help from mobile. Does not puthazard flashers on
09.09 A car comes round the bend and clips the back ofthe stopped car
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What causes volcanoes?
A volcano is created at any place on a planet’s surface where some material from the inside of the planet makes its way up to the planet’s surface in the form of an eruption. A volcanic eruption iscaused by several factors: the structure of the Earth,the movements of the Earth’s crust, the viscosityand gas-content of magma within the Earth, and the build-up of gas pressure.
The structure of the Earth is significant because the different parts of the planet are of differentthicknesses and subject to different pressures.The Earth is made up of three main layers: the core, the mantle and the outer crust.
The outer crust is rigid and is 5 to 10 km thick underthe oceans and 32 to 70 km thick under the land.Compared to the rest of the planet, this crust is verythin – like the outer skin on an apple. This means it is relatively fragile.
Directly under the outer crust is the mantle, the largestlayer of the Earth. The mantle is extremely hot, but formost of the time it stays in a solid form. In certaincircumstances, however, the mantle material melts,forming magma that makes its way through the outercrust. Magma is fluid, molten rock. It is partly liquid,partly solid and partly gaseous. Depending on the
Resource sheet 10aVolcanoes: OHT
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Resource sheet 10aVolcanoes: OHT (continued)
combination of these three elements, magma can beunder a great deal of gas pressure. As the pressurebuilds up, this results in the magma being forced outthrough the core.
Different combinations of pressure and viscosity inthe magma cause different types of eruptions. If theviscosity and the gas pressure are low, lava will flowslowly onto the Earth’s surface when the volcanoerupts, with minimal explosion. However, if thereis a lot of pressure, this will cause an eruption withan explosive launch of material into the air.
As it will take millions of years for the Earth’s structure to change, earthquakes will continue tohappen. Scientists can now predict when volcanoesmight erupt but there is still nothing we can do to stopthem happening.
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Sen
tenc
e st
ruct
ure
and
pun
ctua
tio
nTe
xt s
truc
ture
and
org
anis
atio
n
Resource sheet 10bVolcanoes: annotations
Wh
at c
ause
s vo
lcan
oes
?
A v
olca
no is
cre
ate
d a
t any
pla
ce o
n a
plan
et’s
sur
face
whe
re s
ome
ma
teria
l fro
m
the
insi
de o
fth
e pl
anet
mak
es it
s w
ay u
p to
the
plan
et’s
sur
face
in th
e fo
rm o
fan
erup
tion.
A v
olca
nic
erup
tion
is c
ause
d by
sev
eral
fact
ors:
the
stru
ctur
e of
the
Ear
th,
the
mov
emen
ts o
fth
e E
arth
’s c
rust
,the
vis
cosi
ty a
nd g
as-c
onte
nt o
fm
agm
a w
ithin
the
Ear
th,a
nd th
e bu
ild-u
p of
gas
pres
sure
.
The
str
uctu
re o
fth
e E
arth
is s
igni
fican
t bec
ause
the
diff
eren
t par
ts o
fth
e pl
anet
are
ofdi
ffer
ent t
hick
ness
es a
nd s
ubje
ct to
diff
eren
t pre
ssur
es.T
he E
arth
is m
ade
up o
fth
ree
mai
n la
yers
:the
cor
e,th
e m
antle
and
the
oute
r cr
ust.
The
out
er c
rust
is r
igid
and
is 5
to 1
0 km
thic
k un
der
the
ocea
ns a
nd 3
2 to
70
km
thic
k un
der
the
land
.Com
pare
d to
the
rest
of
the
plan
et,t
his
crus
t is
very
thin
–
like
the
oute
r sk
in o
n an
app
le.T
his
mea
ns it
is r
ela
tivel
y fr
agile
.
Dire
ctly
und
er th
e ou
ter
crus
t is
the
man
tle,t
he la
rges
t lay
er o
fth
e E
arth
.
The
man
tle is
ext
rem
ely
hot,
but f
or m
ost o
fth
e tim
e it
stay
s in
a s
olid
form
.
In c
erta
in c
ircum
stan
ces,
how
ever
,the
man
tle m
ate
rial m
elts
,for
min
g m
agm
a
tha
t mak
es it
s w
ay th
roug
h th
e ou
ter
crus
t.M
agm
a is
flui
d,m
olte
n ro
ck.I
t is
part
ly
liqui
d,pa
rtly
sol
id a
nd p
artly
gas
eous
.Dep
endi
ng o
n th
e co
mbi
natio
n of
thes
e th
ree
elem
ents
,mag
ma
can
be u
nder
a g
rea
t dea
l of
gas
pres
sure
.As
the
pres
sure
bui
lds
up,t
his
resu
lts in
the
mag
ma
bein
g fo
rced
out
thro
ugh
the
core
.
Diff
eren
t com
bina
tions
of
pres
sure
and
vis
cosi
ty in
the
mag
ma
caus
e di
ffer
ent t
ypes
ofer
uptio
ns.I
fth
e vi
scos
ity a
nd th
e ga
s pr
essu
re a
re lo
w,l
ava
will
flow
slo
wly
ont
o
the
Ear
th’s
sur
face
whe
n th
e vo
lcan
o er
upts
,with
min
imal
exp
losi
on.H
owev
er,i
f
ther
e is
a lo
t of
pres
sure
,thi
s w
ill c
ause
an
erup
tion
with
an
expl
osiv
e la
unch
of
ma
teria
l int
o th
e ai
r.
As
it w
ill ta
ke m
illio
ns o
fye
ars
for
the
Ear
th’s
str
uctu
re to
cha
nge,
eart
hqua
kes
will
con
tinue
to h
appe
n.S
cien
tists
can
now
pre
dict
whe
n vo
lcan
oes
mig
ht e
rupt
but t
here
is s
till n
othi
ng w
e ca
n do
to s
top
this
hap
peni
ng.
Caus
al c
onne
ctiv
es
Spec
ific
deta
ils
Com
plex
sent
ence
, add
s det
ail
Gene
ric,
not
spec
ific
Form
al la
ngua
ge•
Voca
bula
ry c
hoic
e•
Tech
nica
l ter
ms
Vari
ety o
f pun
ctua
tion
incl
udin
g co
mm
as m
arki
ng su
bord
inat
e cl
ause
s, co
mm
as in
list
, pos
sessi
veap
ostr
ophe
, col
on
Para
1Ex
plai
ns w
hat a
vol
cano
is, t
hen
sum
mar
y exp
lana
tion
of c
ause
s pr
ovid
es o
utlin
e fo
r wha
t fol
low
s
New
par
agra
phs u
sed
to e
labo
rate
on
spec
ific
fact
ors
Elab
orat
es o
n in
form
atio
n in
pre
cedi
ng p
arag
raph
Fina
l par
agra
ph ro
unds
off
expl
anat
ion
by a
ddin
g so
me
gene
ral r
emar
ks
Ad
apta
tion
Use
of t
echn
ical
term
s, fo
rmal
voc
abul
ary
and
phr
ases
, sp
ecifi
c d
etai
ls.
Co
mp
osi
tio
n an
d e
ffec
t
Vie
wp
oin
t
Imp
erso
nal,
form
al to
ne m
aint
aine
d th
roug
hout
.
Sty
le
Som
e at
tem
pts
to m
ake
acce
ssib
le to
non
-
scie
ntifi
c re
ader
thro
ugh
use
of a
nalo
gy (a
pp
le).
Titl
e se
ts u
p ex
plan
atio
n
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Resource sheet 11Earthquakes (opening): OHT
What causes an earthquake?
An earthquake is a vibration that travels through the Earth’s crust. If buildings shake as a heavy trucktravels down a street it is, technically, a mini-earthquake. However, it would not measure veryhighly on the Richter scale (the scale used to measureearthquakes). Earthquakes are caused by manythings such as:• meteor impacts • volcanic eruptions• underground explosions (an underground nuclear
test, for example) • collapsing structures (such as a collapsing mine).
The majority of naturally occurring earthquakeshowever are caused by movements of the earth’s plates.