Fep writing presentation 2013

Foundation of Freshman Eng-lish Writing

In-class Writing Exam Preparation

Paragraph AssessmentStep 1 Pre-writing Get topic from instructor Brainstorm ideas about topic Narrow your focus

Step 2 Planning Write topic sentence Create brainstorming map Complete an outline

Step 3 Drafting Write the first (rough draft)

Step 4 Editing Don’t look at your paragraph for at least one day Read your paragraph carefully Mark any mistakes or other problems; make notes as you read

Step 5 Revising Fix the mistakes from Step 4 Write next draft of your paragraph

Follow these steps as you start working on your paragraph. Page

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library

cafeteria

lower tuition

higher teacher pay

more English books

healthier foodbetter teachers

happy teachers

organize bookscheaper food

less stress for family

more new booksmore clothes

more time to

prepare lessons

new car

buy more things

What should Soongsil do to be a better university?

Step 1 Brainstorm

Step 1 Brainstorm

Write down as many ideas as you can about

the topic. Page 69

Subject (from Instructor): What should Soongsil do to be a better university?

Paragraph AssessmentStep 1 Pre-writing Get topic from instructor Brainstorm ideas about topic Narrow your focus

Step 2 Planning Write topic sentence Create brainstorming map Complete an outline

Step 3 Drafting Write the first (rough draft)

Step 4 Editing Don’t look at your paragraph for at least one day Read your paragraph carefully Mark any mistakes or other problems; make notes as you read

Step 5 Revising Fix the mistakes from Step 4 Write next draft of your paragraph

Remember to check the

appropriate box as you complete each step.

library

cafeteria

lower tuition

higher teacher pay

more English books

healthier foodbetter teachers

happy teachers

organize bookscheaper food

less stress for family

more new booksmore clothes

more time to

prepare lessons

new car

buy more things

What should Soongsil do to be a better university?

Step 1 Brainstorm

Look for groups of similar ideas.

Group 1library

organize books

more English books

more new books

Group 2lower tuition

less stress for family

Group 3higher teacher pay

better teachers

buy more things

time to prepare lessons

happy teachers

more clothes, car

Group 4cafeteria

healthier food

cheaper food

Step 1 Narrow your Focus

Group similar ideas from your brainstorming and write them here. Then choose one group

with the topic that you are most interested in. Page 70

Group 1library

organize books

more English books

more new books

Group 2lower tuition

less stress for family

Group 3higher teacher pay

better teachers

buy more things

time to prepare lessons

happy teachers

more clothes, car

Group 4cafeteria

healthier food

cheaper food

Step 1 Narrow your Focus

Group similar ideas from your brainstorming and write them here. Then choose one group

with the topic that you are most interested in. Page 70

Paragraph AssessmentStep 1 Pre-writing Get topic from instructor Brainstorm ideas about topic Narrow your focus

Step 2 Planning Write topic sentence Create brainstorming map Complete an outline

Step 3 Drafting Write the first (rough draft)

Step 4 Editing Don’t look at your paragraph for at least one day Read your paragraph carefully Mark any mistakes or other problems; make notes as you read

Step 5 Revising Fix the mistakes from Step 4 Write next draft of your paragraph

Topic Sentence: (In my opinion / I believe that / There are several reasons why…)

_________________________________________________________________

Three supporting details:

Detail 1 ____________________________________________

Detail 2 ____________________________________________

Detail 3 ____________________________________________

Subject (from Instructor): ____________________________________________

Step 2 Write a Topic Sentence

Review the subject, your brainstorming and focus

notes. Then, write a topic sentence. Page 71

Topic Sentence: (In my opinion / I believe that / There are several reasons why…)

_________________________________________________________________

Three supporting details:

Detail 1 ____________________________________________

Detail 2 ____________________________________________

Detail 3 ____________________________________________

Subject (from Instructor): What should Soongsil do to be a better university?

Step 2 Write a Topic Sentence

In a persuasive paragraph, the topic sentence is

generally your opinion about the subject.

Topic Sentence: (In my opinion / I believe that / There are several reasons why…)

_________________________________________________________________

Three supporting details:

Detail 1 ____________________________________________

Detail 2 ____________________________________________

Detail 3 ____________________________________________

Subject (from Instructor): What should Soongsil do to be a better university?

Step 2 Write a Topic Sentence

Group 3higher teacher pay

better teachers

buy more things

time to prepare lessons

happy teachers

more clothes, car

Topic Sentence: (In my opinion / I believe that / There are several reasons why…)

In my opinion, Soongsil should increase teachers’ pay to be a better university.

Three supporting details:

Detail 1 ____________________________________________

Detail 2 ____________________________________________

Detail 3 ____________________________________________

Subject (from Instructor): What should Soongsil do to be a better university?

Step 2 Write a Topic Sentence

Topic Sentence: (In my opinion / I believe that / There are several reasons why…)

In my opinion, Soongsil should increase teachers’ pay to be a better university.

Three supporting details:

Detail 1 ____________________________________________

Detail 2 ____________________________________________

Detail 3 ____________________________________________

Subject (from Instructor): What should Soongsil do to be a better university?

Step 2 Write a Topic Sentence

Group 3higher teacher pay

better teachers

buy more things

time to prepare lessons

happy teachers

more clothes, car

Topic Sentence: (In my opinion / I believe that / There are several reasons why…)

In my opinion, Soongsil should increase teachers’ pay to be a better university.

Three supporting details:

Detail 1 ___buy more things____________________________

Detail 2 ____________________________________________

Detail 3 ____________________________________________

Subject (from Instructor): What should Soongsil do to be a better university?

Step 2 Write a Topic Sentence

Topic Sentence: (In my opinion / I believe that / There are several reasons why…)

In my opinion, Soongsil should increase teachers’ pay to be a better university.

Three supporting details:

Detail 1 ___buy more things____________________________

Detail 2 ___happy teachers_____________________________

Detail 3 ____________________________________________

Subject (from Instructor): What should Soongsil do to be a better university?

Step 2 Write a Topic Sentence

Group 3higher teacher pay

better teachers

buy more things

time to prepare lessons

happy teachers

more clothes, car

Topic Sentence: (In my opinion / I believe that / There are several reasons why…)

In my opinion, Soongsil should increase teachers’ pay to be a better university.

Three supporting details:

Detail 1 ___buy more things____________________________

Detail 2 ___happy teachers_____________________________

Detail 3 ___better teachers_____________________________

Subject (from Instructor): What should Soongsil do to be a better university?

Step 2 Write a Topic Sentence

Group 3higher teacher pay

better teachers

buy more things

time to prepare lessons

happy teachers

more clothes, car

Paragraph AssessmentStep 1 Pre-writing Get topic from instructor Brainstorm ideas about topic Narrow your focus

Step 2 Planning Write topic sentence Create brainstorming map Complete an outline

Step 3 Drafting Write the first (rough draft)

Step 4 Editing Don’t look at your paragraph for at least one day Read your paragraph carefully Mark any mistakes or other problems; make notes as you read

Step 5 Revising Fix the mistakes from Step 4 Write next draft of your paragraph

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Step 2 Create a Brain Map

buy more things

better teachers

Soongsil should increase teachers’ pay to be a better university.

happy teachers

more time to prepare lessons

new car

more clothes

higher qualifications

better for students

higher grades

good impression

confident teachers

get to school faster

satisfied teachers happy students

students benefit

Write the 3 main details and any examples or facts from your brainstorm and focus notes on this map. This will help you to visualize your

paragraph. Page 72

Topic Sentence

Paragraph AssessmentStep 1 Pre-writing Get topic from instructor Brainstorm ideas about topic Narrow your focus

Step 2 Planning Write topic sentence Create brainstorming map Complete an outline

Step 3 Drafting Write the first (rough draft)

Step 4 Editing Don’t look at your paragraph for at least one day Read your paragraph carefully Mark any mistakes or other problems; make notes as you read

Step 5 Revising Fix the mistakes from Step 4 Write next draft of your paragraph

Step 2 Complete an Outline

I. IntroductionA. (opening statement)

_______________________________________________i.

_________________________________________________________ii.

________________________________________________________B. (topic sentence)

___________________________________________________C. Preview

i. (detail 1) _________________________________________________

ii. (detail 2) _________________________________________________

iii. (detail 3) ________________________________________________

II. (Detail 1) _______________________________________________________________A.

________________________________________________________________i.

_________________________________________________________ii.

________________________________________________________B.

________________________________________________________________i.

_________________________________________________________ii.

________________________________________________________C.

________________________________________________________________i.

_________________________________________________________ii.

________________________________________________________

Create your outline here. Use key words and

phrases. You do not have to write complete

sentences. Page 73

III (Detail 2) ______________________________________________________________A.

_______________________________________________________________i.

________________________________________________________ii.

________________________________________________________B.

_______________________________________________________________i.

________________________________________________________ii.

________________________________________________________C.

_______________________________________________________________i.

________________________________________________________ii.

________________________________________________________

IV. (Detail 3) ______________________________________________________________A.

_______________________________________________________________i.

________________________________________________________ii.

________________________________________________________B.

_______________________________________________________________i.

________________________________________________________ii.

________________________________________________________C.

_______________________________________________________________i.

________________________________________________________ii.

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V. ConclusionA. (summary)

______________________________________________________B. (challenge)

______________________________________________________C. (memento)

______________________________________________________

There are many lines for details. You may not need all of them. Use only those

that you need.

Step 2 Complete an Outline

I. IntroductionA. (opening statement) _________improving Soongsil is important_____________

i. _________________________________________________________

ii. ________________________________________________________

B. (topic sentence) Soongsil should increase teachers’ pay to be a better university._______

C. Previewi. (detail 1) _______________ buy more

things____________________________ii. (detail 2) _______________happy

teachers_____________________________iii. (detail 3) _______________better teachers

____________________________

II. (Detail 1) _______________ buy more things____________________________________________

A. ____new car_______________________________________________________________

i. _____________saves time___________________________________________

ii. ________________________________________________________

B. ____get to school faster______________________________________________________

i. _____________public transportation slower______________________________

ii. ________________________________________________________

C. ____more time to prepare lessons______________________________________________

i. _________________________________________________________

ii. ________________________________________________________

You should write your topic sentence in full sentence

form.

III. (Detail 2) _________________happy teachers__________________________________________A. _____more

clothes_________________________________________________________i.

________________________________________________________ii.

________________________________________________________B. _____good

impression_______________________________________________________i.

________________________________________________________ii.

________________________________________________________C. _____confident

teachers_____________________________________________________i.

________________________________________________________ii.

________________________________________________________

IV (Detail 3) ________________better teachers____________________________________________

A. ____higher qualifications_____________________________________________________

i. ________________________________________________________

ii. ________________________________________________________

B. ____better for students______________________________________________________

i. ________________________________________________________

ii. ________________________________________________________

C. ____higher grades__________________________________________________________

i. ________________________________________________________

ii. ________________________________________________________

V. ConclusionA. (summary)

______________________________________________________B. (challenge) ___________contact

university_____________________________________C. (memento) ___________small step big

difference_______________________________

Paragraph AssessmentStep 1 Pre-writing Get topic from instructor Brainstorm ideas about topic Narrow your focus

Step 2 Planning Write topic sentence Create brainstorming map Complete an outline

Step 3 Drafting Write the first (rough draft)

Step 4 Editing Don’t look at your paragraph for at least one day Read your paragraph carefully Mark any mistakes or other problems; make notes as you read

Step 5 Revising Fix the mistakes from Step 4 Write next draft of your paragraph

Paragraph – first draft

Paragraph – first draft

_______________________ (title)

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Write the first draft of the paragraph you have been

planning here. Page 75

Higher Pay for Teachers

Many student agree that improving Soongil University is important. In my opinion, Soongsil should increase teachers’ pay to be a better university. There are several reason for my opinion; teachers could buy more things, they would be happier and they would become better teachers. first,_____ teachers could buy more things. It is a fact that public transportation takes three times as long to reach a destination. However, if teachers were able to buy a new car, they could get to school much faster. This would allow them more time to prepare better lessons. Secondly, teachers would be happier because they could buy more clothes. According to experts, people who dress well make a good impression and are more confident. The_____ university and Soongsil students would benefit greatly if their teachers were happy good looking and confident. Finally, better teachers with higher____ qualifications could be hired. This would definitely help students to get____ higher grades. There is no doubt that students want an improved university. Making it possible for a teachers to buy more helps them to become better and happier. If teachers are satisfied, students will benefit in many ways. Contact the university today and ask for higher pay_ for teachers. It’s a small step to take to make a big difference._______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________

Paragraph – first draft

Do not worry about making mistakes. The first draft does not need to be perfect. Focus on developing your ideas and

support for your topic sentence.

Paragraph AssessmentStep 1 Pre-writing Get topic from instructor Brainstorm ideas about topic Narrow your focus

Step 2 Planning Write topic sentence Create brainstorming map Complete an outline

Step 3 Drafting Write the first (rough draft)

Step 4 Editing Don’t look at your paragraph for at least one day Read your paragraph carefully Mark any mistakes or other problems; make notes as you read

Step 5 Revising Fix the mistakes from Step 4 Write next draft of your paragraph

Higher Pay for Teachers

Many student agree that improving Soongil University is important. In my opinion, Soongsil should increase teachers’ pay to be a better university. There are several reason for my opinion; teachers could buy more things, they would be happier and they would become better teachers. first,_____ teachers could buy more things. It is a fact that public transportation takes three times as long to reach a destination. However, if teachers were able to buy a new car, they could get to school much faster. This would allow them more time to prepare better lessons. Secondly, teachers would be happier because they could buy more clothes. According to experts, people who dress well make a good impression and are more confident. The_____ university and Soongsil students would benefit greatly if their teachers were happy good looking and confident. Finally, better teachers with higher____ qualifications could be hired. This would definitely help students to get____ higher grades. There is no doubt that students want an improved university. Making it possible for a teachers to buy more helps them to become better and happier. If teachers are satisfied, students will benefit in many ways.__ Contact the university today and ask for higher pay_ for teachers. It’s a___ small step to take to make a big difference.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________

Paragraph – first draft

Now you will read through your paragraph and look

for mistakes.

Step four – editing

Structural Edits Logical Edits All sentences end with . ! ? The topic sentence is strong

and easy to understand. All sentences have a subject and

verb; subject-verb agreement (I go, she goes)

The introduction is interesting to the reader.

The first word of every sentence, proper names, and abbreviations are capitalized. Check for problems with I, it, if, in, and is.

The title is clear, strong, related to the paragraph.

Each new paragraph is indented. Every sentence is directly related to the topic sentence.

There are no fragments or clauses without sentences. Check any sentence that starts with Because, Since, or So to be certain it is okay.

Facts, statistics, and other factual data have the source listed (According to the Oxford International Dictionary…)

Plural nouns are used when referring to general things. (I like kittens. Students need to study.)

Details are interesting and related to the topic.

They’re, their, there are all used correctly.

The supporting ideas are arranged in the best order (strongest last, chronological, etc)

For example, for instance, like, and such as are used correctly.

The conclusion has a summary of the main ideas.

Adjectives and nouns are not confused. (She has an activity active personality.)

The conclusion has a strong closing statement (memento).

Pronouns are used instead of repeating nouns. (The monkey is in the tree. The monkey It is very cute.)

Use this checklist to help you with this process. Page

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Higher Pay for Teachers

Many student agree that improving Soongil University is important. In my opinion, Soongsil should increase teachers’ pay to be a better university. There are several reason for my opinion; teachers could buy more things, they would be happier and they would become better teachers. first,_____ teachers could buy more things. It is a fact that public transportation takes three times as long to reach a destination. However, if teachers were able to buy a new car, they could get to school much faster. This would allow them more time to prepare better lessons. Secondly, teachers would be happier because they could buy more clothes. According to experts, people who dress well make a good impression and are more confident. The_____ university and Soongsil students would benefit greatly if their teachers were happy good looking and confident. Finally, better teachers with higher____ qualifications could be hired. This would definitely help students to get____ higher grades. There is no doubt that students want an improved university. Making it possible for a teachers to buy more helps them to become better and happier. If teachers are satisfied, students will benefit in many ways.__ Contact the university today and ask for higher pay for teachers. It’s a___ small step to take to make a big difference.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________

Paragraph – first draft

There are 6 mistakes. Can you find them?

Higher Pay for Teachers

Many student s agree that improving Soongil University is______ important. In my opinion, Soongsil should increase teachers’ pay to be a__ better university. There are several reason s for my opinion; teachers could buy more things, they would be happier and they would become better teachers. first, teachers could buy more things. It is a fact that public_____ transportation takes three times as long to reach a destination. However, if teachers were able to buy a new car, they could get to school much faster. This would allow them more time to prepare better lessons. Secondly,____ teachers would be happier because they could buy more clothes. According to experts, people who dress well make a good impression and are more__ confident. The university and Soongsil students would benefit greatly if their teachers were happy, good looking and confident. Finally, better teachers with higher qualifications could be hired. This would definitely help students to get higher grades. There is no doubt that students want an improved___ university. Making it possible for a teachers to buy more helps them______ to become better and happier. If teachers are satisfied, students will_____ benefit in many ways. Contact the university today and ask for higher pay_ for teachers. It’s a small step to take to make a big difference._______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________

Paragraph – first draft

Paragraph AssessmentStep 1 Pre-writing Get topic from instructor Brainstorm ideas about topic Narrow your focus

Step 2 Planning Write topic sentence Create brainstorming map Complete an outline

Step 3 Drafting Write the first (rough draft)

Step 4 Editing Don’t look at your paragraph for at least one day Read your paragraph carefully Mark any mistakes or other problems; make notes as you read

Step 5 Revising Fix the mistakes from Step 4 Write next draft of your paragraph

Higher Pay for Teachers

Many students agree that improving Soongil University is______ important. In my opinion, Soongsil should increase teachers’ pay to be a__ better university. There are several reasons for my opinion; teachers could buy more things, they would be happier and they would become better teachers. First, teachers could buy more things. It is a fact that public_____ transportation takes three times as long to reach a destination. However, if teachers were able to buy a new car, they could get to school much faster. This would allow them more time to prepare better lessons. Secondly,____ teachers would be happier because they could buy more clothes. According to experts, people who dress well make a good impression and are more__ confident. The university and Soongsil students would benefit greatly if their teachers were happy, good looking and confident. Finally, better teachers with higher qualifications could be hired. This would definitely help students to get higher grades. There is no doubt that students want an improved___ university. Making it possible for teachers to buy more helps them________ to become better and happier. If teachers are satisfied, students will_____ benefit in many ways. Contact the university today and ask for higher pay_ for teachers. It’s a small step to take to make a big difference._______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________

Step five – revising | second draft

Paragraph AssessmentStep 1 Pre-writing Get topic from instructor Brainstorm ideas about topic Narrow your focus

Step 2 Planning Write topic sentence Create brainstorming map Complete an outline

Step 3 Drafting Write the first (rough draft)

Step 4 Editing Don’t look at your paragraph for at least one day Read your paragraph carefully Mark any mistakes or other problems; make notes as you read

Step 5 Revising Fix the mistakes from Step 4 Write next draft of your paragraph