"As if a magician's wand had touched him, the garland of roses transformed him into a vision of Oriental beauty.“ What would you need to write in order.

"As if a magician's wand had touched him, the garland of roses transformed him into a vision of Oriental beauty.“

What would you need to write in order to model this sentence?

OPENER, SENTENCE

Let’s practice from the POV of a pumpkin!

We will be able to writeWe will be able to writepassages of dialogue.passages of dialogue.

Glue our paste-in Glue our paste-in on the next clean on the next clean page in your LA page in your LA composition book!composition book!

Giving Your Character Life

Through the Spoken Word

• Use quotation marks to enclose a direct quotation – a person’s exact words.

– Our team leader says, “I try to practice every day.”

– “Let’s go home,” Jeanne suggested.

• A directly quoted sentence begins with a capital letter.

– Mrs. Talbot said, “PPlease get a pencil.”

– Kristina asked, “IIs it my turn?”

Split dialogueSplit dialogue

• When an expression identifying the speaker interrupts a quoted sentence, the second part of the quotation begins with a lowercase letter.

– “Will you take care of my lawn and pets,” asked Mr. Franklin, “wwhile I’m on vacation next month?”

* The expression identifying the speaker is called a speaker’s tag.speaker’s tag.

Split DialogueSplit Dialogue• If a quoted sentence is divided, a comma

usually follows the first part and comes before the second part.

• “Oh,” Donna commented, “he’s probably just saying that because he’s never had a cat.”

Quote at the Beginning…Quote at the Beginning…

• If a quotation mark comes at the beginning of a sentence, a comma, question mark, or exclamation point usually follows it.

– “Dogs make better pets than cats do,,” said Jared.

– “Have you ever had a cat??” Emily asked.– “No, and I never will!!” he replied.

Quote at the end…Quote at the end…

• If a quotation comes at the end of a sentence, a comma usually comes before it.

– Terra asked,, “What makes you say that?”

Punctuation inside QuotesPunctuation inside Quotes

• A period or a comma should alwaysalways be placed inside the quotation marks.

– “I can’t wait to see Shirley Caesar’s new video,,” James said. “It’s supposed to come out next week..”

The Exception to the RuleThe Exception to the Rule

• A question mark or an exclamation point should be placed inside closing quotation marks when the quotation itself is a question or an exclamation. Otherwise, it should be placed outside.– “What time will you be home from work, Mom??”

asked Michael.– Who said, “All the world’s a stage”??– “Stop!!” yelled the crossing patrol.– What a surprise to hear Susana say, “We’re moving

back to Puerto Rico in June”!!

Don’t Be Afraid to Use Don’t Be Afraid to Use Dialogue in Your Writing!Dialogue in Your Writing!

Just be sure to use it thoughtfully. Make every word a character says count. Never overuse dialogue. It

should be supplemental to the description, and not take over the

whole composition.

We are going to use reading to We are going to use reading to help us write our own dialogue help us write our own dialogue

passagespassages..Why is dialogue important?

• It breaks up the narrative. • Makes our writing lively.• Its useful for characterisation. • Excellent for showing reactions to events

and relationship between characters.• It helps to tell the story from different

views.

Beauty and the beast.Beauty and the beast.

“What would you like me to bring you this time?”

The eldest girl clapped her hands and said: “A pearl necklace for me, but it will have to be a long one with a silver clasp.”

Identify the narrative part of the text.

Who speaks first?

What does the dialogue tell you about the character of the oldest daughter.

Add the narrativeAdd the narrative

• Sometimes we can loose detail in our writing if we only use dialogue.

• Always add description to passages of dialogue so that your reader is not only hearing what is said but can see what is happening, where it is happening, or how our characters are behaving.

Improve the dialogue with a Improve the dialogue with a line of description.line of description.

‘All I want from you is that you return home safely.’

‘But I must bring you something,’ said the father.

Work with your shoulder partner to think of description.Work with your shoulder partner to think of description.

Beauty hugged her father close and whispered:

At this the other two sisters laughed and thought how stupid Beauty was not to ask for something.

Add the dialogue.Add the dialogue.

As the father travelled home, he was caught in a terrible storm. Soon he lost his way in the darkness. He came upon a large house where he could take shelter under the trees.

From somewhere nearby he heard a voice.

What does the voice say?

How does the father react to the voice?

Revising punctuation of speech.Revising punctuation of speech.

Add the “ ” ? ! or , . Capital letters

come inside called a voice

hello who’s there the father could see no one but the door was open

What happens next?What happens next?Write a passage with dialogue.Write a passage with dialogue.

• You are going to write the next section of this story.

• Retell the events listed on your support sheet.• Make sure you mix dialogue and description in

your passage.

• Use the punctuation description to help you.

Punctuating speechPunctuating speech“Then I must go without giving thanks,” thought the

father.Rules.• Speech must be opened “and closed”• Speech begins with a capital letter.• Report who is speaking- said ______ (use an

adverb) or use a synonym of said.• Use ! ? Or ,• Remember to use capitals for character names.• New speaker = new line.

The story continued…. Work in groups The story continued…. Work in groups to complete the story.to complete the story.Part A:

•The father hears voice- it asks him to come inside. •Father sees he has entered wealthy house- table ready with food. •A voice tells him to help himself.•Full-he falls asleep.Part B: •In the morning he searches to thank owner of house but sees no one. •Goes to gate, sees roses, remembers promise to youngest daughter, takes rose.•Angry wail heard, ugly creature appears, forces father to promise to give beast anything in world he asks for.•Tells him that whatever father first sees on return home he must give to beast. Father agrees.Part C:•Beauty rushes to meet father on return.•Sisters demand their gifts. Beauty only child to thank father for gift.•He tells Beauty her terrible future.

Complete quiz for “We should Complete quiz for “We should all be dead.”all be dead.”

Picture in your mind who you think wrote the novel, Picture in your mind who you think wrote the novel,

Frankenstein…Frankenstein…bet your picturing bet your picturing

wrong!wrong!

30 August 1797 – 30 August 1797 – 1 February 18511 February 1851

In 1816, the couple famously spent a summer with In 1816, the couple famously spent a summer with Lord Byron, John William Polidori, and Claire Lord Byron, John William Polidori, and Claire Clairmont near Geneva, Switzerland, where Mary Clairmont near Geneva, Switzerland, where Mary conceived the idea for her novel conceived the idea for her novel FrankensteinFrankenstein. The . The Shelleys left Britain in 1818 for Italy, where their Shelleys left Britain in 1818 for Italy, where their second and third children died before Mary second and third children died before Mary Shelley gave birth to her last and only surviving Shelley gave birth to her last and only surviving child, Percy Florence. In 1822, her husband child, Percy Florence. In 1822, her husband drowned when his sailing boat sank during a drowned when his sailing boat sank during a storm in the Bay of La Spezia. A year later, Mary storm in the Bay of La Spezia. A year later, Mary Shelley returned to England and from then on Shelley returned to England and from then on devoted herself to the upbringing of her son and a devoted herself to the upbringing of her son and a career as a professional author. The last decade of career as a professional author. The last decade of her life was dogged by illness, probably caused by her life was dogged by illness, probably caused by the brain tumor that was to kill her at the age of the brain tumor that was to kill her at the age of 53. 53.

FrankensteinFrankenstein by Mary by Mary ShelleyShelley• Mary Shelley started writing Frankenstein when she was Mary Shelley started writing Frankenstein when she was eighteen and the novel was published when she was only eighteen and the novel was published when she was only nineteen. The first edition was published anonymously in nineteen. The first edition was published anonymously in London in 1818. Shelley’s name appears on the second London in 1818. Shelley’s name appears on the second edition, published in France.edition, published in France.

•Frankenstein is considered to be one of the earliest Frankenstein is considered to be one of the earliest examples of science fiction. Frankenstein is enormously examples of science fiction. Frankenstein is enormously important as a prototype for science fiction and as an important as a prototype for science fiction and as an early feminist work. early feminist work.

Why do you think it was published

anonymously the first time?

Excerpt from the beginning of Chapter 5, Excerpt from the beginning of Chapter 5, FrankensteinFrankenstein, by , by

Mary ShelleyMary Shelley

““It was on a dreary night of November that I beheld It was on a dreary night of November that I beheld the accomplishment of my toils. With an anxiety that the accomplishment of my toils. With an anxiety that almost amounted to agony, I collected the almost amounted to agony, I collected the instruments of life around me, that I might infuse a instruments of life around me, that I might infuse a spark of being into the lifeless thing that lay at my spark of being into the lifeless thing that lay at my feet. It was already one in the morning; the rain feet. It was already one in the morning; the rain pattered dismally against the panes, and my candle pattered dismally against the panes, and my candle was nearly burnt out, when, by the glimmer of the was nearly burnt out, when, by the glimmer of the half-extinguished light, I saw the dull yellow eye of half-extinguished light, I saw the dull yellow eye of the creature open; it breathed hard, and a the creature open; it breathed hard, and a convulsive motion agitated its limbs. convulsive motion agitated its limbs.

What is the mood? What is the mood? How do you know?How do you know?

What is the tone? What is the tone? How do you know?How do you know?

““How can I describe my emotions at this catastrophe, or how How can I describe my emotions at this catastrophe, or how delineate the wretch whom with such infinite pains and care I delineate the wretch whom with such infinite pains and care I had endeavoured to form?...... had endeavoured to form?...... “… “… I had worked hard for nearly two years, for the sole I had worked hard for nearly two years, for the sole purpose of infusing life into an inanimate body. For this I had purpose of infusing life into an inanimate body. For this I had deprived myself of rest and health. I had desired it with an deprived myself of rest and health. I had desired it with an ardour that far exceeded moderation; but now that I had ardour that far exceeded moderation; but now that I had finished, the beauty of the dream vanished, and breathless finished, the beauty of the dream vanished, and breathless horror and disgust filled my heart. Unable to endure the horror and disgust filled my heart. Unable to endure the aspect of the being I had created, I rushed out of the room aspect of the being I had created, I rushed out of the room and continued a long time traversing my bed-chamber, and continued a long time traversing my bed-chamber, unable to compose my mind to sleep. At length lassitude unable to compose my mind to sleep. At length lassitude succeeded to the tumult I had before endured, and I threw succeeded to the tumult I had before endured, and I threw myself on the bed in my clothes, endeavouring to seek a few myself on the bed in my clothes, endeavouring to seek a few moments of forgetfulness” moments of forgetfulness”

Excerpt from the beginning of Chapter 5, Excerpt from the beginning of Chapter 5, FrankensteinFrankenstein, by , by

Mary ShelleyMary Shelley

FrankensteinFrankenstein by Mary by Mary ShelleyShelleyBook Reviewed by Sayan Mukherjee:Book Reviewed by Sayan Mukherjee:

Writing StyleWriting Style: “The book is written as a series of : “The book is written as a series of narratives in the first person; introduced as a series of narratives in the first person; introduced as a series of letters from an explorer to his sister, then as a recount letters from an explorer to his sister, then as a recount of Victor Frankenstein's tale. The language is of Victor Frankenstein's tale. The language is representative of English typical in the 19th century. representative of English typical in the 19th century. However it is quite simple and easy to understand and However it is quite simple and easy to understand and the prose is very free-flowing. The plot is built up the prose is very free-flowing. The plot is built up masterfully and the two main characters are remarkably masterfully and the two main characters are remarkably well sketched.”well sketched.”

My ThoughtsMy Thoughts: “I don't consider it to be so much of a : “I don't consider it to be so much of a horror novel than a tragedy. It is a beautiful work and horror novel than a tragedy. It is a beautiful work and an excellent exploration of the many motives, emotions an excellent exploration of the many motives, emotions and actions pervading the human mind. The book and actions pervading the human mind. The book appears simple enough at first glance and the appears simple enough at first glance and the characters easy to judge, however by the end the characters easy to judge, however by the end the reader is left wondering as to the real nature of ‘evil’ as reader is left wondering as to the real nature of ‘evil’ as it is called. Is the object intrinsically evil or does the it is called. Is the object intrinsically evil or does the presence of mitigating circumstances reduce its presence of mitigating circumstances reduce its degree? Most people who read it will be surprised to degree? Most people who read it will be surprised to see the contrast between Shelley's anguished, well-see the contrast between Shelley's anguished, well-spoken creature and the bumbling, dim-witted monster spoken creature and the bumbling, dim-witted monster dubbed 'Frankenstein' by the doltish creators of the dubbed 'Frankenstein' by the doltish creators of the television shows and movies.”television shows and movies.”

FrankensteinFrankenstein by Mary by Mary ShelleyShelley

FrankensteinFrankenstein by Mary by Mary ShelleyShelley

Who Really is the Who Really is the

Monster?Monster?Be prepared to complete the following after you read the play:Be prepared to complete the following after you read the play:

1.1. Was the creature the monster or was Victor? Using Was the creature the monster or was Victor? Using evidence from the play, write a strong claim about which evidence from the play, write a strong claim about which one was the monster. Use at least one piece of text one was the monster. Use at least one piece of text evidence in a quote to support your claim. Use two other evidence in a quote to support your claim. Use two other paraphrased pieces of evidence in your paragraph to paraphrased pieces of evidence in your paragraph to support your claim. support your claim.

2.2. Back to Basics: Literary Elements and Devices—work Back to Basics: Literary Elements and Devices—work together in your group to complete this worksheet.together in your group to complete this worksheet.

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