Beginning structure: 1. invovle two techniques---wordy, too long a guidance 2. poor guidance---a gap 3. turning to exposition 4. too concrete.

Beginning structure: 1. invovle two techniques---wordy, too long a guid

ance 2. poor guidance---a gap 3. turning to exposition 4. too concrete for a beginning 5. logically unexhausted 6. digression

Thanks to the enhancement of the living standard, numerous people are willing to travel and surge into the places of historical interest during peak travel seasons. Therefore, whether famous sites of historical interest should charge higher during busy sesons arouses fierce discussion among the public. Some people consider that it is not an appropriate approach to charging more while others approve of charging more. Here, in this essay, I would like to describe both sides in details.

As the high-speed development of tourism, more and more people like to go around and visit those famous Chinese sites of historical interests. According to recently reports, some Chinese famous sites of historical interests charge higher fee during peak travel seasons. Some people take it for granted that is is good for us. However, others hold that there is no necessary to do that. The historical interests represent the history of our country and everyone has the right to visit them. For my part, we cannot afford the advantages while we criticize disadvantages.

With the raising interest in Chinese culture, more and more foreigners like to travel in China, where rapid growth has been witnessed in tourism. It is true that tourism can play an important role in booming national economy. And those tourist resorts are considering that shall we increase some sites of interest charge fees during peak travel season. People view this isse vary from one to another. Here I will argue whether the advantages of increasing the fees.

Nowadays, with the rapid development of society and economy, more and more people choose to travel at vocationl after a long period of harworking.They go to some historical interest to relax themselves. Their visits, on the one hand, can enrich their life and enlarge their eyesight. On the other hand, too many visits, especially during peak travel seasons, can also cause some problems. Here, this essay wil outline some arguments for and against Chinese sites of historical interest charge higher fees during peak travel seasons.

With the fast development of society and economy, people have a lot of time and money to visit famous Chinese sites of historical interest. However, too many visits, especially during peak travel seasons when there are more visitors, have caused so many problems. One solution to this is to charge higher a fee during this time, which…

Nowadays, with the improvement of living standard, more and more Chinese people have the chance to go out instead of staying at home during holidays. They often go to the famous Chinese sites of historical interest, which contributes to the dense population in those sites, so some people are thinking about charging higher fees during peak travel seasons. However, some people are in favor of the act, while others not. In this essay,…

Nowadays, tourism enjoys a very high popularity and Chinese sites of historical interest ae patronized by more and more tourists. But in recent years those Chinese sites of historical interest tend to charge higher fees during peak travel seasons…

Nowadays, it is more and more common that travelling fees of some popular sitess are higher during the boom season, especially of some historical sites as well as places owing splendid landscapes and fantastic scenery. …

Language Wording Sentencing Coherence between sentences

wording

formality,accuracy, diversity, stability

formality

1. people have a lot of time and money to… 2. many people are talking about it. 3. some sites just charge higher fees… 4. let’s talk about some merits.

accuracy

1. to our indignation, many travel agencies take this opportunity to bid up fees during peak travel seasons.

2. during peak travel season, Chinese sites of historical interest always raise their prices.

Diversity

Stability

1. with the promotion of reform and opening up policy, many Chinese sites of historical interest are thriving.

Sentences --- formality, diversity, focused, coherence

1. with the development of economy and the improvement of living standard, people become more and more eager to travel to learn about the world.

2. China’s places of historical interests have attracted more and more tourists both from home and abroad because of the long history of China.

Recently, more and more people are flooding into the famous historical places of interest during the peak travel season. Thus, these sites are condisering charing a higher fee during the high season, which sparks a heat debate in public.

Thanks to the enhancement of the living standard, numerous people ae willing to travel and surge into the places of historical interest during peak travel seasons.

Coherence between sentences

1. with the boom of the tourism in China, it is true that a large number of people tend to flood into the famous sites, expecially the famous Chinese sites of historical interest during the peak travel seaons. As a result, the issure that wheter the famous Chinese sites of historical interest should charge higher fees during the peak travel seaons. Has been heatedly discussed recently.

With the rapid development of tourism industry, it has become quite popular for quite some people to go to some historical sites to relax themselves after a long period of heavy load of working. Generally speaking, the sites of historical interests will charge higher fees durng peak travel seaons. Recently, a controversial viewpoint torwards historical sites’ higher charge that whether such action should be welcomed or not. …

Beginning ---topic sentence

1. I will examine whether famous Chinese sites of historical interest should charge high fees during peak travel seasons or not.

Body--- para. Topic sentence and para. Coherence

Topic setences within para.

The way to present points: orderly, no overlapping, logical reasoning.

1. first, charging higher fees can limit the number of tourists… second, as the increase of tourists, the fees of maintain the sites are higher. They have to charge higher fees to protect the sites of historical interest.

To begin with, …help to protect those sites. Then, we can use the money to maintain

and restore those sites.

For one thing, due to the higher fees charged during peak travel season, the number of visitors will decrease so as to minimize the influence on local traffic, local people’s normal life peace and local environment.

For another, this extra money can be used to improve quality of local people’s life and local environment.

Key words stand out right after transitionals

1. to begin with, by icreasing the fees during peak travel seasons, the tourists’ number will drop, which in turn protect these historical sites from being excessively damaged.

What’s more, the loss of profit caused by the decresed of the number of the visitors is more obvious than the benefits obtained from the extra money charged during busy travel season compared with usual.

Firstly, it is not necessary to raise the price.

Finally, higher fees mean worsening abuse of power.