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Research PaperFinal Draft Notes

NYC Home

ImprovementProject

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+Final Draft Notes

n First we will go over the “PerformanceIndicators” on the rubric, and look at some

suggestions and examples from a papern We will go over citations and proper

documentation of evidence

n Finally, we will go over some generalformatting tips and suggestions for thefinal draft of your research paper

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+Performance Indicator #1 –Viewpoint

 To get a mark of “Outstanding,” youneed:

n Compelling thesis or question

n Coherent, complex, sophisticated arguments supportorganizing idea/thesis

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+ Performance Indicator #1 –Viewpoint

Some suggestions to improve yourwriting:

n Look at each sentence in your paper and ask yourself:

Does it connect to the inquiry question?

Does the sentence belong in the paragraph that it is in?

Is it written simply and is it easy to understand?

n Look at your word choices. Are you using academicwords? Are you defining them for your reader?

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+Performance Indicator #2 –Effective Use of Evidence

 To get a mark of “Outstanding,” youneed:

n Specific, relevant, and highly persuasive evidence from

both primary and secondary sources

n Uses quotations and paraphrasing appropriately

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+ Performance Indicator #2 –Effective Use of Evidence

Some suggestions to improve yourwriting:

n Be specific in your writing. Look at the two examples

below. The first sentence is too general and does notparaphrase appropriately. The second is specific andappropriately paraphrases from an attributed source.

Bad…

Good…

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+Performance Indicator #3 –Effective Organization

 To get a mark of “Outstanding,” youneed:

n Clear introduction presents thesis in a highly engaging,

compelling manner

n Consistent, effective transitions

n Distinct conclusion that supports idea/general thesis

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+ Performance Indicator #3 –Effective Organization

Some suggestions to improve yourwriting:

n Look at your introductory paragraph and ask yourself:

Does it convey the problem that you are trying to show?

Does it contain a fact as a “hook” for your reader?

Does it display the actual inquiry question?

Does it preview what the paper will be exploring?

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+ Performance Indicator #3 –Effective Organization

Some suggestions to improve yourwriting:

n Use your topic sentences as transitions. Do not use

“headings” to transition between ideas. Look at the twoexamples below.

Bad…

Good…

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+ Performance Indicator #3 –Effective Organization

Some suggestions to improve yourwriting:

n Look at your concluding paragraph and ask yourself:

Does it reflect on the solutions that you have proposedto the inquiry question?

Does it show a plan for future or additional research?

Does it connect to the introductory paragraph?

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+Performance Indicator #4 –Understanding of Context

 To get a mark of “Outstanding,” youneed:

n Ideas and voice reflect a highly informed awareness of the

larger historical, political, or cultural context surroundingquestions addressed in the paper.

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+ Performance Indicator #4 –Understanding of Context

Some suggestions to improve yourwriting:

n Look back at the facts and details that you have included

in the research paper and ask yourself:

Do you use facts and details from different sources?

Did you incorporate the question(s) that the reviewersasked in the first and second drafts?

Are your sources relevant (from the last 5 years) andapplicable to the context (New York City, New York,U.S.A.)?

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+Performance Indicator #5 –Strong, Engaged Student Voice

 To get a mark of “Outstanding,” youneed:

n Confident, highly fluid writing style

n Well developed original ideas that are engaging andarticulate

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+ Performance Indicator #5 –Strong, Engaged Student Voice

Some suggestions to improve yourwriting:

n Make each sentence—and each word—specific and

meaningful. Look at the two examples below.

Bad…

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+Performance Indicator #6 –Conventions

 To get a mark of “Outstanding,” youneed:

n Grammar and punctuation nearly flawless

n Appropriate documentation of sources

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+ Performance Indicator #6 –Conventions

Some suggestions to improve yourwriting:

n As best as possible, make sure that your sentences are

grammatically accurate. Keep them simple! Look at thetwo examples below for some ideas.

Bad…

Good…

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+ Performance Indicator #6 –Conventions

Some suggestions to improve yourwriting:

n  To use “appropriate documentation,” we will need to talk

about this in three steps:

1) When to use a citation in your research paper

2) How to cite the source in the sentence

3) How to attribute the source in the WORKS CITEDpage

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+ Performance Indicator #6 –Conventions

Some suggestions to improve yourwriting:

n 1) When to use a citation in your research paper

Look at this selection:

 This sentence needs to be “cited” because it contains a factthat needs be substantiated. Also, it is the first time thatthis fact is mentioned in the research paper.

Let’s rewrite and cite this sentence…

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+ Performance Indicator #6 –Conventions

Some suggestions to improve yourwriting:

n 1) When to use a citation in your research paper

Here is a better way to phrase and cite that fact:

Notice that the sentence now contains an objective fact andincludes a citation (KIDS COUNT Data Center, 2012) thatshows where and when that fact was recorded.

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+ Performance Indicator #6 –Conventions

Some suggestions to improve yourwriting:

n 2) How to cite the source in the sentence

Look at this sentence:

Notice that the the citation is in parentheses ( ) and itcorresponds to what is found on the WORKS CITED page. Italso includes the year of publication. Finally, notice that theperiod comes after the citation (KIDS COUNT Data Center,2012).

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+ Performance Indicator #6 –Conventions

Some suggestions to improve yourwriting:

n 3) How to cite the source in the WORKS CITED page

We will use an adapted MLA format to cite in the researchpaper and the WORKS CITED page.

I am more interested in you knowing when and what to citerather than how and in what format you cite.

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+ Performance Indicator #6 –Conventions

Some suggestions to improve yourwriting:

n 3) How to cite the source in the WORKS CITED page

Here is an example of a two sources in a WORKS CITEDpage:

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+ Performance Indicator #6 –Conventions

Some suggestions to improve yourwriting:

n 3) How to cite the source in the WORKS CITED page

Here are several websites that will help you generate yoursources:

http://www.easybib.com/

http://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/747/1/

http://library.albany.edu/usered/cite/citing.html

P f I di 6

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+ Performance Indicator #6 –Conventions

Some suggestions to improve yourwriting:

n 3) How to cite the source in the WORKS CITED page

 The WORKS CITED page should be a separate page all toitself and should be the last page of your document.

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+Submitting the Final Draftn  The final draft of your research paper is due Friday, May

4*

n  You should save it as a Word document

n Save it as, “Title-Student Names”

n Send it to my email at jtroge@inths.org 

n  You will need to get a copy of the paper and the assessedrubric to include in your portfolio

* If you are presenting your portfolio on this day, you willneed to get your final draft in earlier in the week to getassessed

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