EXPOSITORY ESSAY - SCIENCE FAIR PROJECT- Student details: Name ……..Hsinju Chiang…………………... Class M. 4/1 ................. Number .....3................... Weebly ID www.30146.weebly.com ....... Mobile number ……....087-1418147…………..….. Email [email protected].......... Published file name expository_science_formative (Hsinju-Egg in a Bottle) Table of Contents 1. TABLE OF CONTENTS 2. FORMATIVE REQUIREMENTS COVER 3. BRAINSTORM / RESEARCH (ideas, reference paper, mind-map) 4. EXAMPLE OF PROJECT (cut/paste from reference paper.) 5. GRAPHIC ORGANIZER (flow chart) 6. ESSAY MAP 7. ORIGINAL DRAFT: (Name of peer who revised) 8. REVISED DRAFT: (Name of peer who edited) 9. PUBLISHED WORK- ORIGINAL 10. RUBRIC (self graded) 11. PUBLISHED WORK - TEACHER’S COMMENTS Publishing Checklist PREVIEW PUBLISHED ON HOMEPAGE COMMENTS POSTED TO LEARNING GROUP’S BLOGS REFERENCES AND CITING COMPLETE Comments: 10
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EXPOSITORY ESSAY - SCIENCE FAIR PROJECT-
Student details: Name ……..Hsinju Chiang…………………... Class M. 4/1 ................. Number .....3 ................... Weebly ID www.30146.weebly.com ....... Mobile number ……....087-1418147…………..….. Email [email protected] .......... Published file name expository_science_formative (Hsinju-Egg in a Bottle)
Table of Contents 1. TABLE OF CONTENTS
2. FORMATIVE REQUIREMENTS COVER 3. BRAINSTORM / RESEARCH (ideas, reference paper, mind-map) 4. EXAMPLE OF PROJECT (cut/paste from reference paper.) 5. GRAPHIC ORGANIZER (flow chart) 6. ESSAY MAP 7. ORIGINAL DRAFT: (Name of peer who revised) 8. REVISED DRAFT: (Name of peer who edited) 9. PUBLISHED WORK- ORIGINAL 10. RUBRIC (self graded) 11. PUBLISHED WORK - TEACHER’S COMMENTS
Publishing Checklist PREVIEW PUBLISHED ON HOMEPAGE
COMMENTS POSTED TO LEARNING GROUP’S BLOGS REFERENCES AND CITING COMPLETE
Question What happens when air molecules expand? Hypothesis I think that air pressure will make the egg fit through the neck of a bottle. Materials Hard-boiled egg A glass bottle Piece of paper Matches Procedure 1. Hard boil an egg. 2. Take the shell off the egg. 3. Light a small piece of paper and drop it into the bottle. 4. Put the egg on the neck of the bottle. Results The egg popped into the bottle. Conclusion The fire makes the air molecules move further apart and expand. The pressure pulls the egg into the bottle.
References: Haynes, J. (2006). River Edge Public Schools River Edge, N.J. Tampa, Florida
Comment [n1]:
Some lost opportunities with Presentation elements.
I think that air pressure will make the egg fit through the mouth of a bottle.
- Hard-boiled egg - A glass bottle - Piece of paper - Matches
1. Hard boil an egg. 2. Take the shell off the egg. 3. Light a small piece of paper and drop it into the bottle. 4. Put the egg on the mouth of the bottle.
The egg popped into the bottle.
The fire makes the air molecules move further apart and expand. The pressure pulls the egg into the bottle.
Size of egg and size of mouth of bottle
Comment [n3]: Nice mind-map.
GRAPHIC ORGANIZER
TOPIC:
Egg in Bottle
LAST: Conclusion
The fire makes the air molecules move further apart and expand. The pressure pulls the egg into the bottle.
FIRST: Question / problem
What happens when air molecules expand?
NEXT: Hypothesis
I think that air pressure will make the egg fit through the mouth of a bottle.
NEXT: Materials
Hard-boiled egg A glass bottle Piece of paper Matches
NEXT: Procedure
1. Hard boil an egg. 2. Take the shell off the egg. 3. Light a small piece of paper and drop it into the bottle. 4. Put the egg on the mouth of the bottle.
NEXT: Table / Graph
To show results in form of presentation the data.
NEXT: Analysis of Result
The egg popped into the bottle.
NEXT: Constant & variable
Variable: Size of egg Size of mouth of bottle
Comment [n4]:
I like the strong highlighted identification of each stage of the process.
ESSAY MAP
Introduction
Hook, Background,
Purpose of Writing,
Main ideas
Main Ideas
Support P.O.W. Fact,
Explain, Define, Other
elements
Main idea 2
Hypothesis
\
Main idea 4
Procedure
Main idea 6
Analysis of Result
Main idea 3
Materials you
need
Main idea 5
Variable of the
experiment
Main idea 7
Presentation
Main idea 8
Conclusion
Have you ever tried to
put a bigger thing into a
smaller mouth’s
container? If you
haven’t, let’s try with
me. I’m going to explain
process of a science
experiment from the
beginning to the end
through the materials,
procedure, results and
conclusion.
Supporting details 2
2.1 I think that air pressure will
make the egg fit through the
neck of a bottle.
Supporting details 4
4.1 Hard boil an egg 4.2 Take the shell off the egg 4.3 Light a small piece of paper and drop it into the bottle. 4.4 Put the egg on the neck of the bottle.
Supporting details 6
6.1 The egg popped into the
bottle.
Supporting details 3
3.1 Hard-boiled egg
3.2 a glass bottle
3.3 piece of paper
3.4 matches
Supporting details 5
5.1 size of egg
5.2 size of mouth of bottle
Supporting details 7
7.1 Table
7.2 Graph
Supporting details 8
8.1 The fire makes the air
molecules move further apart
and expand. The pressure pulls
the egg into the bottle.
Supporting details
Detail supporting
Main idea and further
describe,
explain, define, or
give examples
Conclusion
Summarize Main
ideas, Link to P.O.W.
Make a point
Main idea 1
Question /
problem
Supporting details 1
1.1 What happens when air
molecules expand?
This experiment was
started with think of
a topic, question or
problem and
hypothesis. After
that, prepare the
materials which are
needed, do it step
by step and
observed the result.
Finally, draw a
conclusion. As you
can see, this
experiment is not
difficult, everyone
can do it. But be
careful with the fire.
Comment [n5]:
The wording of you hook could have been clearer and stronger. Have you ever tried to pass a camel through the eye of a needle? A great Introduction with a strong P.O.W. In the Conclusion, linking back to the P.O.W. would have made it stronger.
ORIGINAL DRAFT
Egg in a Bottle
Have you ever tried to put a bigger thing into a smaller mouth’s container? If you haven’t, let’s try with me. I’m going to explain (the) process of a science experiment from the beginning to the end through the materials, procedure, results and conclusion.
Firstly, we have to think of (about) an experiment (‘s) topic which we are interested. After that, make more researches about it. In this case, the one I am interested is egg in a bottle.
Secondly, we have to make a question or problem which we will try to answer at the end of the experiment. For this experiment, my question is what happens (no s) when air molecules expand.
Thirdly, created the hypothesis to predict or guess what will happen in this experiment. Here, I think that air pressure will make the egg fit through the mouth of a bottle.
After we have a topic, question and hypothesis, we can start preparing the materials which are needed in the experiment. In this experiment, we need hard-boiled egg, a glass bottle, piece of paper and matches.
Then, now we can start doing the experiment. The first step is hard boil an egg. Second, take the shell off the egg. Third, Light a small piece of paper and drop it into the bottle. Last, put the egg on the mouth of the bottle.
The variable in this experiment is size of egg and size of mouth of bottle. They can be any sizes but mouth of a bottle should just (be) big enough for the egg to go half way through and not all the way through. (?)
After the experiment, we are able to answer the question that we made at the beginning of the experiment by the result we’ve observed. Then, observe again to see is the result same with the hypothesis? However, I observed that the egg popped into the bottle.
Then, we can show the result of the experiment by making a table and chart. So, reader can understand our experiment easier.
Therefore, we concluded that the fire makes the air molecules move further apart and expand. The pressure pulls the egg into the bottle.
This experiment was started with think of a topic, question or problem and hypothesis. After that, prepare the materials which are needed, do it step by step and observed the result. Finally, draw a conclusion. As you can see, this experiment is not difficult, everyone can do it. But be careful with the fire.
Peer’s name: Chosita K. (Atom) No. 2
Comment [n6]:
Original Draft is where you review Content Ideas and Structure of your essay. Have your learning group review it for you.
REVISED DRAFT Egg in a Bottle
Have you ever tried to put a bigger thing into a smaller mouth’s container? If you haven’t, let’s try with me. I’m going to explain the process of a science experiment from the beginning to the end through the materials, procedure, results and conclusion.
Firstly, we have to think about(of) an experiment‘s topic which we are interested. After that, make more researches about it. In this case, the one I am interested is egg in a bottle.
Secondly, we have to make a question or problem which we will try to answer at the end of the experiment. For this experiment, my question is what (will) happen when air molecules expand.
Thirdly, created the hypothesis to predict or guess what will happen in this experiment. Here, I think that air pressure will make the egg fit through the mouth of a bottle.
After we have a topic, question and hypothesis, we can start preparing the materials which are needed in the experiment. In this experiment, we need hard-boiled egg, a glass bottle, piece of paper and matches.
Then, now we can start doing the experiment. The first step is hard boil an egg. Second, take the shell off (out of)the egg. Third, Light a small piece of paper and drop it into the bottle. Last, put the egg on the mouth of the bottle.
The variable(s) in this experiment is(are) size of egg and size of mouth of bottle. They can be any sizes but mouth of a bottle should be big enough for the egg to go half way through and not all the way through.
After the experiment, we are able to answer the question that we made at the beginning of the experiment by the result we’ve observed. Then, observe again to see is(if) the result (is the)same with the hypothesis? However, I observed that the egg popped into the bottle.
Then, we can show the result of the experiment by making a table and chart. So, reader can understand our experiment easier.
Therefore, we concluded that the fire makes the air molecules move further apart and expand. The pressure pulls the egg into the bottle.
This experiment was started with think of a topic, question or problem and hypothesis. After that, prepare the materials which are needed, do it step by step and observed the result. Finally, draw a conclusion. As you can see, this experiment is not difficult, everyone can do it. But be careful with the fire.
Peer’s name: Nipawan P. (Boom) No.5
Comment [n7]:
Here you edit Punctuation, Grammar, Capital Letters and Spelling. Once again, your learning group can assist. Publish your file progressively, so they can comment.
Have you ever tried to put a bigger thing into a smaller mouth’s container? If you haven’t, let’s try with me. I’m going to explain the process of a science experiment from the beginning to the end through the materials, procedure, results and conclusion.
Firstly, we have to think of an experiment‘s topic which we are interested. After that, make more researches about it. In this case, the one I am interested is egg in a bottle.
Secondly, we have to make a question or problem which we will try to answer at the end of the experiment. For this experiment, my question is what will happen when air molecules expand.
Thirdly, created the hypothesis to predict or guess what will happen in this experiment. Here, I think that air pressure will make the egg fit through the mouth of a bottle.
After we have a topic, question and hypothesis, we can start preparing the materials which are needed in the experiment. In this experiment, we need hard-boiled egg, a glass bottle, piece of paper and matches.
Then, now we can start doing the experiment. The first step is hard boil an egg. Second, take the shell out of the egg. Third, Light a small piece of paper and drop it into the bottle. Last, put the egg on the mouth of the bottle.
The variables in this experiment are size of egg and size of mouth of bottle. They can be any sizes but mouth of a bottle should be big
enough for the egg to go half way through and not all the way through.
After the experiment, we are able to answer the question that we made at the beginning of the experiment by the result we’ve observed. Then, observe again to see if the result is the same with the hypothesis? However, I observed that the egg popped into the bottle.
Then, we can show the result of the experiment b y making a table and chart. So, reader can understand our experiment easier.
Therefore, we concluded that the fire makes the air molecules move further apart and expand. The pressure pulls the egg into the bottle.
This experiment was started with think of a topic, question or problem and hypothesis. After that, prepare the materials which are needed, do it step by step and observed the result. Finally, draw a conclusion. As you can see, this experiment is not difficult, everyone can do it. But be careful with the fire.
Name: Hsinju Chiang EP 4/1 #3 File name: expository_science_formative (Hsinju-Egg in a Bottle) www.30146.weebly.com References: - Haynes, J. (2006). River Edge Public Schools River Edge, N.J. Tampa, Florida